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Comment from Earl Corp
I'm going to try to read all the short stories in this book but I know it will take some time. Good luck with this endeveavor. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
I'm going to try to read all the short stories in this book but I know it will take some time. Good luck with this endeveavor. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Earl
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It seems that every possible animal, snake, insect was able to get to the birdseed, but the birds!! That wasn't on, was it? Lol. It took a while before you realised it would be better to stop feeding the birds. Poor things! That was so funny, and expensive. Brilliant prologue, Bill. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
It seems that every possible animal, snake, insect was able to get to the birdseed, but the birds!! That wasn't on, was it? Lol. It took a while before you realised it would be better to stop feeding the birds. Poor things! That was so funny, and expensive. Brilliant prologue, Bill. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I am so pleased you are reading these.
Comment from RFL
First, congrats on winning the Flash Fiction contest with this very short story. It engaged me immediately. So glad you freed all those innocent critters. Loved the ending. Guess there is more than one way to solve a problem. Enjoyed the read. Best, RFL
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
First, congrats on winning the Flash Fiction contest with this very short story. It engaged me immediately. So glad you freed all those innocent critters. Loved the ending. Guess there is more than one way to solve a problem. Enjoyed the read. Best, RFL
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks, RFL, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hahaha. Great piece, Bill. Thank you for the chuckle. I really think this should have done better than 3rd place but congrats on that though. A cat to top it off, lol. Excellent. Have a great day.
Ron
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
Hahaha. Great piece, Bill. Thank you for the chuckle. I really think this should have done better than 3rd place but congrats on that though. A cat to top it off, lol. Excellent. Have a great day.
Ron
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Ron. I actually caught a mouse with it once. His 'friends' came along and chewed off his tail and face. Maybe I should have included that? :)
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Lol. Yeah I'm sure all the little old ladies would just love to hear about that in detail. Ha
Comment from Raul1
Excellent poem! Looks like this person tried everything to the animals. He used the trap to catch mouses. Instead he caught different animals. I like this poem. No grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
Excellent poem! Looks like this person tried everything to the animals. He used the trap to catch mouses. Instead he caught different animals. I like this poem. No grammatical errors.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Raul
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You're welcome
Comment from Van
Good read. Captivates the reader from start to finish. Well told in such a short piece. I found no SPAGs and can offer no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for the submission.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
Good read. Captivates the reader from start to finish. Well told in such a short piece. I found no SPAGs and can offer no suggestions for improvement. Thanks for the submission.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Van
Comment from Artasylum
BILL SCHOTT Probably better you stop before you catch a child... you never know it seems as it the catch just kept getting bigger and it was only a matter of time. good poem. thanks. yours, diana
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
BILL SCHOTT Probably better you stop before you catch a child... you never know it seems as it the catch just kept getting bigger and it was only a matter of time. good poem. thanks. yours, diana
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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To late. Thanks, Diana, for giving this a look.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A friend and I were sitting on the porch watching birds at the feeder. When it ran empty, I took a bag of bird seed out and refilled it. Soon we started seeing birds drop dead all around the feeder. My wife had bought bird seed and fertilizer at the same time. Guess which I used.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
A friend and I were sitting on the porch watching birds at the feeder. When it ran empty, I took a bag of bird seed out and refilled it. Soon we started seeing birds drop dead all around the feeder. My wife had bought bird seed and fertilizer at the same time. Guess which I used.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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That?s a hoot. Now I know how to end my squirrel problem.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nice work, Bill. I enjoyed this short piece. Sounds like feeding everything except the birds. Word count is spot on. Good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
Nice work, Bill. I enjoyed this short piece. Sounds like feeding everything except the birds. Word count is spot on. Good luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Russell
Comment from Angela Hayes
Good read, educational, well presented, cartoon characters doing an activity feeding birds, colourful image, creative use of words, fascinating, creative way of thinking, to put cartoon in a poem.
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
Good read, educational, well presented, cartoon characters doing an activity feeding birds, colourful image, creative use of words, fascinating, creative way of thinking, to put cartoon in a poem.
Good Luck!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018
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Thanks, Angela.
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You're welcome :)