Lyrics for song The Door
He is closing the door...24 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
I enjoyed the way the speaker in the poem describes the man that thugs at her heart. The description is so effective that we can almost see visibly and hear the sound of his boots on the floor. What an excellent write.
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I enjoyed the way the speaker in the poem describes the man that thugs at her heart. The description is so effective that we can almost see visibly and hear the sound of his boots on the floor. What an excellent write.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate every one.
Comment from mvbrooks
I enjoyed this sad/realistic narration of the lover who realizes she is not "miss right" but more "miss right now" and wants to enjoy that "now" before it passes. Pragmatic--yet one senses it won't be so easy so see that door close, even though she's tried to prepare herself. Very moving.
A thought--the poem suggests he hasn't left yet "I know before long..." and most of the poem is written in the present.
However, this stanza is written in past tense and is a bit jarring in the timeline:
Your future was calling;
The voice wasn't mine.
I wanted to be there
To watch your light shine.
Shouldn't it be
Your future IS calling
the voice ISN'T mine
I WANT to be there
to watch your light shine
Just a thought as the change in timeline was confusing since it shifts in the middle of the poem--yet they are still together at the end of the poem..."for now...."
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018
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I enjoyed this sad/realistic narration of the lover who realizes she is not "miss right" but more "miss right now" and wants to enjoy that "now" before it passes. Pragmatic--yet one senses it won't be so easy so see that door close, even though she's tried to prepare herself. Very moving.
A thought--the poem suggests he hasn't left yet "I know before long..." and most of the poem is written in the present.
However, this stanza is written in past tense and is a bit jarring in the timeline:
Your future was calling;
The voice wasn't mine.
I wanted to be there
To watch your light shine.
Shouldn't it be
Your future IS calling
the voice ISN'T mine
I WANT to be there
to watch your light shine
Just a thought as the change in timeline was confusing since it shifts in the middle of the poem--yet they are still together at the end of the poem..."for now...."
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much! I appreciate your advice. Bless you, Lois
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This posting has nice artwork. It clearly depicts the content of the poem. Well written piece that I enjoyed immensely. Keep up the good work as I look for more from your name.
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This posting has nice artwork. It clearly depicts the content of the poem. Well written piece that I enjoyed immensely. Keep up the good work as I look for more from your name.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your comments and for reading it!!!
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Loanna: romance is such a rollar coaster ride. Does he love
me or not? I like how you add the shut the door. Will you meet
again. Nice song. Hope this goes well for you.
Happy New Year. flylikeaneagle - nancy
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Loanna: romance is such a rollar coaster ride. Does he love
me or not? I like how you add the shut the door. Will you meet
again. Nice song. Hope this goes well for you.
Happy New Year. flylikeaneagle - nancy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
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Thank you for writing and reading it...
Comment from Joy Graham
Yes, this is a sad one. We all have some sad stories to tell. It's better out than in as Austin Powers says in his movie. I like your carefree writing style. It's easy to read with no hidden meanings or big words for me to decipher lol!
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Yes, this is a sad one. We all have some sad stories to tell. It's better out than in as Austin Powers says in his movie. I like your carefree writing style. It's easy to read with no hidden meanings or big words for me to decipher lol!
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Joy! Yup, I'm not exactly Jane Austin...but I love what you said...thanks again.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a nice 'little melancholy lyric'.
Well rhymed, good rhythm, well done.
The artwork is interesting and a good match.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
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This is a nice 'little melancholy lyric'.
Well rhymed, good rhythm, well done.
The artwork is interesting and a good match.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for reading it and writing to me. Blessings, Sharon.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written song you have penned. This would be a really good country song to be sung. You used very good heartfelt words and great imagery with your words. Blessings, Teri
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This is a very well written song you have penned. This would be a really good country song to be sung. You used very good heartfelt words and great imagery with your words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much, Teri!.
Comment from Janet Foor
A sad and certainly a melancholy song with vivid imagery and heartfelt emotion.
The last stanza really brought it all together. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
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A sad and certainly a melancholy song with vivid imagery and heartfelt emotion.
The last stanza really brought it all together. Very nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
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Janet, your words meant a lot! Thank you so very very much.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I love these lyrics. I hope you take the time to put them to music or send them to someone who will. I have LIVED these lyrics, as I am sure have others. You nailed it on the reality aspect and the creativity angle also. Good job! Now set it to music! You may have a hit!
Wendy
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I love these lyrics. I hope you take the time to put them to music or send them to someone who will. I have LIVED these lyrics, as I am sure have others. You nailed it on the reality aspect and the creativity angle also. Good job! Now set it to music! You may have a hit!
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
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Wendy, I have read your kind words four times! Thanks so much. You made my day!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
For now, I'll just wonder...
As my next drink I pour
Is my heart going with you
As you close the door?
A lot of us feeling blue this time of year.. I love this a wonderful expression of lyrics, a fantastic read, well done love and regards Meia x
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For now, I'll just wonder...
As my next drink I pour
Is my heart going with you
As you close the door?
A lot of us feeling blue this time of year.. I love this a wonderful expression of lyrics, a fantastic read, well done love and regards Meia x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
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Bless your heart....thanks for writing!