Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Shirley, I see you are trying different forms...that is awesome...I did it for awhile...and just stopped...LOL...hope to get back in it...no one should remain in a house of abuse sweet girl...very well written...and the perfect picture...love ya Linda xxoo...

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2017

Thanks Linda.
I thank you for your review.
I have fun trying and thankfully most reviwers are kind.
"-) Shirley

reply by l.raven on 26-Aug-2017

there are a lot of wonderful people on this site...you are sooooooo welcome sweet girl...smiles back to ya...Love xxoo

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Shirley. This is an excellent Quatern written on an important topic. The shame isn't for the victim, but rather for the victimizer. Still--they suffer from remnants of shame for the rest of their lives even after they leave. I pray that all victims have the inner strength to break away and find their freedom. You've done a great job on your first attempt at this form. Nice tight writing, clear with good flow. Marilyn

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thanks so much Marilyn,
Your supportive comments are appreciated.
It is sometimes difficult to put myself and my past out there but only by acknowledging,
accepting and releasing can I move forward.
The support of fellow compassionate writers and readers such as yourself has made my writing
and personal journey easier.
:-) Shirley

reply by BeasPeas on 25-Aug-2017

It takes great courage and insight to be able to propel ourselves out of these destructive relationships.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and the picture was really good for this poem. Bless you! Teri

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thank you for reviwing.
I appreciate your time.
:-) Shirley

Comment from jaded831

Excellent

Great job, I loved the subject matter. The line, " she'd not another soul to care", means to me she wouldn't allow love in. Great job with imagery. Even though it was a sad poem you ended it on a happy note.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thank you.
"-) Shirley

Comment from heavenempress

Excellent

Waal, black colour made the poetry scary and indeed it matched the topic. I liked the way the poetry developed. It flowed so well and very easy to follow. Well. It's unfortunate that she was no longer innocent. Can I ask? Does the phrase no longer innocent mean bravery.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017

Thank you.
I used the word innocent because the victim of child abuse was a child .
In context 'no longer an innocent in a house of shame' simply means she's
Finally free from the house and the situation.
"-) Shirley

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

I enjoyed your first attempt at a Quatern, which is better than I can attempt. I interpreted this poem as being about an imprisoned sex worker in a brothel, and not an abused woman in a home:

Daily verbal abuse would come
A barrage she could not escape
An innocent in house of shame
Has secrets she will never tell.

But when I read your poem again, I believe it is about the verbal abuse of a woman in a house. Fortunately, she rescues herself:

An urge to leave abuse behind
Set her to plan a strong life's path

I love your repetition but feel the article is misplaced in your signature line:

An innocent in house of shame.

It does not read smoothly. Better would be:

An innocent in a house of shame.

or

Innocent in a house of shame.

You have to get that article before house.

This is a great first attempt at a Quatern and I hope you write more.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017

Thanks for reviwing. I a
Preciate your time.
:-) Shirley