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Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Hidalgo Hernandez (Mexico)"Poetry for Children
16 total reviews
Comment from Rlegel99
Poem about an artist who uses uncommon imagery. The artwork works well with this piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing this piece of poetry on a fun subject.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Poem about an artist who uses uncommon imagery. The artwork works well with this piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing this piece of poetry on a fun subject.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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I appreciate the time you spent with my words and hope you don't mind if I cut and paste into the other eight since I am so pressed for time on busy B & B weekends. I am glad you liked the pieces. - Wendy
Comment from alf collier
Wow, this poem reminds me very much of a wonderful writer who was on this site two years or so, ago. You are one of the few poets I have read that has a natural ability with meter, and it is so very much appreciated!! This is another virtual sixer... but now you have raised the bar!!! *grin*
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Wow, this poem reminds me very much of a wonderful writer who was on this site two years or so, ago. You are one of the few poets I have read that has a natural ability with meter, and it is so very much appreciated!! This is another virtual sixer... but now you have raised the bar!!! *grin*
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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How about we raise a glass at the bar, but leave the bar itself right where it is? I'm glad you liked the poem and if you admired the writer a couple of years back, it was probably me going incognito ; 0
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Ah, I think not!! You have shown me a new level and one can never go back!!! (grin) So yes, we'll raise a glass, but the bar is one notch higher LOL
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing you 'Hh' page. This delightful poem flows well and tells a story with a great deal of description. The reader is drawn into the pictures he paints - I could almost feel the texture of the raised swirls!
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you for sharing you 'Hh' page. This delightful poem flows well and tells a story with a great deal of description. The reader is drawn into the pictures he paints - I could almost feel the texture of the raised swirls!
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks for continuing to follow my work. I appreciate your input. - Wendy
Comment from Dean Kuch
It sounds to me that young Hidalgo paints very similarly to Pablo Picasso, or perhaps Andy Warhol, for a more modern, contemporary take.
With the exception of the "coming to life" thing, of course.
Another excellent chapter, Wendy...
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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It sounds to me that young Hidalgo paints very similarly to Pablo Picasso, or perhaps Andy Warhol, for a more modern, contemporary take.
With the exception of the "coming to life" thing, of course.
Another excellent chapter, Wendy...
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks Dean for the R & R. Yeah if either showed up now I would tell them to get the Hh out. - Wendy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great write with Hidalgo Hernandez. Love the square soccer ball, and the lemons that dance etc. It's easy to imagine the bright artwork you so well describe through this poem. This will be a colourful page 8. Well done,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Great write with Hidalgo Hernandez. Love the square soccer ball, and the lemons that dance etc. It's easy to imagine the bright artwork you so well describe through this poem. This will be a colourful page 8. Well done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you Valda, These are the first poems I have ever written with a sort of outline for each 9 ethnicity, activity, pieces and parts. This way the artist can get going before the thing is even totally written. Of course, there are things that change and I end up with a ginger giraffe, and I forgot to mention the polka dot pig. but it all adds to the fun. I appreciate the R & R. - Wendy
Comment from BeasPeas
I DO like the artwork in this terrific poem which rhymes well with good cadence. Colorful and light hearted. This is good addition to your book under the letter "H." Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I DO like the artwork in this terrific poem which rhymes well with good cadence. Colorful and light hearted. This is good addition to your book under the letter "H." Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the kind words which I will pass on to my artist. It is good to know you liked it since that is your background. Always deal with the experts, right. Thanks too for the R & R.
Comment from CD Richards
Hi Wendy,
I once wrote a flash fiction about a painter whose pictures came to life - but it was rather dark. This one is full of fun. Just one tiny typo you might want to correct - you've got "apper" instead of "appear" - last line, stanza 3. I liked this, and think it will make a great addition to your book. Cheers, Craig
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Hi Wendy,
I once wrote a flash fiction about a painter whose pictures came to life - but it was rather dark. This one is full of fun. Just one tiny typo you might want to correct - you've got "apper" instead of "appear" - last line, stanza 3. I liked this, and think it will make a great addition to your book. Cheers, Craig
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the typo catch. I had to go back and quickly type the whole thing in because for some reason my cut and paste showed all the formatting stops at the end of each line. Not on my view, but on some. Sloppy of me. I'm glad you liked the rest. Would love to see your dark bit of art flash fiction. Is it in your portfolio under a name you can give me? - Wendy
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It was for a "tiny tales of terror" contest, it's called "The Lost", and it's up there. I think this link might take you straight to it:
http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=763116
I didn't say it was good ;) Cheers, Craig
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend I love the creativity you used with this poem you start by bringing his palette to life so well with the images he paints I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Yes my friend I love the creativity you used with this poem you start by bringing his palette to life so well with the images he paints I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for the glowing review Jill. I am having so much fun playing with these kids and it is nice to see that you are having fun too. - Wendy
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Wendy: I've been doing art therapy to destress lately. I like to help
people and then I need my chill time. You show how art can be fun
and different mediums can be used for the white paper. I would change
the double sometimes...at times could be used. Tighten up this paragraph.
I like how lemons dance. Maybe, add in more of this since kids do have imaginations. I've entered NaNos and NaPos. Have fun! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Wendy: I've been doing art therapy to destress lately. I like to help
people and then I need my chill time. You show how art can be fun
and different mediums can be used for the white paper. I would change
the double sometimes...at times could be used. Tighten up this paragraph.
I like how lemons dance. Maybe, add in more of this since kids do have imaginations. I've entered NaNos and NaPos. Have fun! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I love the suggestion and will steal it. I plan to go back to all these poems once NaPoMo has ended. Take the lumps of coal and hopefully turn them into diamonds, so all suggestions are gratefully accepted. - Wendy
Comment from kiwisteveh
I think you want palette rather than pallet...
The rhythm seems a little harder to get hold of here than in some of the others from this collection. I actually liked the verse where you threw in an extra rhyme to make abab rather than the abcb of the rest. I'm trying to think like a child listening to this!
Sounds like Hidalgo might be related to Picasso and Dali, all that weird stuff that he paints. There's a nice gentle message here about doing your own thing - I like that better than having it rammed down my throat.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I think you want palette rather than pallet...
The rhythm seems a little harder to get hold of here than in some of the others from this collection. I actually liked the verse where you threw in an extra rhyme to make abab rather than the abcb of the rest. I'm trying to think like a child listening to this!
Sounds like Hidalgo might be related to Picasso and Dali, all that weird stuff that he paints. There's a nice gentle message here about doing your own thing - I like that better than having it rammed down my throat.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Of course he doesn't want paint in his mouth and I really appreciate the catch. I will go back and rework all of these at the end of the month. Somehow the giraffe got lost in the bushes with the polka dot pig. I know that this needs a bit more work, but those daily deadlines. . . Thanks for the suggestions and I really will give that rhyme idea a shot. - Wendy