Comment from Rlegel99

Excellent

Poem from a children's book. The artwork works well with this piece. Your rhyme and rhythm are spot on for a children's book. Thanks for sharing this piece of poetry.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Thanks for the review. I will let my friend Lynn know that you like her illustrations. Thanks for noticing the rhyme and rhythm. - Wendy

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

Your Christopher definitely is a hyperactive kid, probably with Attention deficit Disorder, and I doubt he gets his ideas from books he's read, because reading books is not in his modus operandi, being hyperactive and all.

He drives his parents and teacher crazy, and the children in his class are terrified of him. It's likely that he kicked the nurse when she tried to treat that bump on his forehead he got going his woodpecker thing.

But what do I know? You did the research.

But - I'm still over four feet high, I know from photographs that I'm a former child, and I obviously was engaged in your poem, so I took your not limiting it to those who don't have those specs to be an invitation to read and review.

All in all, I guess the engagement is worth a fiver.

xoxo
Don

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

No, Don, I did not write this poem about you. Christopher (modeled after my son) is a voracious reader who also, singlehandedly, has proved the possibility of perpetual motion. Put the two together and every day was a "play" day. Thanks for the fiver. - Wendy

Comment from alf collier

Excellent

The biggest problem with having six stars to award, is that I have used them all!! This is a sixer!!! Well and truly and I am so sorry that I cannot give you one!!

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017

The wish for a sixth is as good as the real thing in my book. Thanks - Wendy

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is well written you bring the characters to life so well in a way the children will find exciting well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thanks Jill. I hope your father is getting better. Take care of yourself too. - Wendy

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Yes, Christopher Crumbly's a fun little boy
who loves to act out all the things that he's read.
He doesn't need ipads or some plastic toy.
He plays, "Guess what animal I am?" instead.

Well, the child in me loved this - a light-hearted, fun poem,
the words, and both rhythm and rhyme flowing smoothly throughout.
Good luck with your book, Wendy - and thanks for sharing and making
me smile.

Blessings,
Margaret

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thank you Margaret for the lovely review. I am having a great deal of fun playing with these kids. - Wendy

Comment from persevere

Excellent

You have given a vivid description of Christopher Crumbly's activities and abilities. He certainly would provide a distraction from an I-pad! Your rhyming scheme is perfect but I just have one suggestion about the rhythm in the last line. I think you should just leave out 'He'.
" He doesn't need iPads or some plastic toy,
plays, "Guess what animal I am?", instead.
The accompanying illustration is delightful.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thank you for the read and review. I took a look at the last stanza and understand your urge to take out what seems superfluous. But to keep the steady 11 syllable count, I need both "he's." I do appreciate the suggestion and hope you will point out anything you see or think of in the future. - Wendy

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Wendy,

Is Lynn Hunt doing all of the illustrations for the book you are working on? I think they will be a great addition, along with the poems, for your children's book. This is a another fun selection. Keep up the great work!

Kim

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Hi Kim, yes, Lynn is doing the illustrations. I give her the name I am thinking of and the country or ethnicity and what I am planning to play with in the poem and off she goes. I'm glad you loved little Christopher. - Wendy

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Love this one Wendy. Very visual descriptions make it easy to imagine Vhristopher Crumbly (love that name) acting out all of this. Love the NOW reference - He doesn't need ipads - that will get some of the kids thinking. Great page for your book.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thanks again Valda for taking time with my work. - Wendy

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Oh dear I love it very much. You have used the letter to a great advantage and made it a fun read. Nice rhyme and flow and I can picture each antic done

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

Thanks Barb. I am having a great time playing with these kids. - Wendy

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

It's so exciting that you're writing a children's book. Good for you. Love your poem. Nice alliteration and rhyming. Lynn Hunt did a great job with the art work, as she had in the previous chapter's poem I read. Marilyn

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017

She is doing all the artwork for me and I will pass along your compliment. I forgot the author note on one of the pages so will go back and add her name to it. Thanks for the time spent to R & R. - Wendy