Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Everyone stumbles through memories to understand the path of their life and what comes next. These two sure started young. one love. The baby girl seems to be the one confused.

Congrats of winning the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2016

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016

OH! I am so honored and thrilled! These seven stars are already on my profile page! Thank you sincerely. The competition on this site is intense, and that my little poem was selected fills me with pride and humbles me at the same time. :)) (Happy-dancing!)

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Hey Dawn,
Great job with your three line poem. Such a poetic way of expressing this message about pondering our past experiences. Vivid imagery of the process. 8-)

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2016

Thanks so much, Karen. I truly appreciate you!

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Hi, Dawn

I know from experience with Haiku that writing a short poem is not easy. Even more difficult is being able to compose with a theme that touches most everyone who reads it -- which you've managed.

This is a really excellent contest entry, and I wish you good luck.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

three-line rhyme poem or non rhyme whatever the case of for the contest entry on my really enjoyed this song even though it's short and it reminded me of how cool but I don't like to wait till later remind you multiple words down on my tablet is my men to clear activator activates in the quiddity basically when I speak I get that from my weight wife have been dicular saying but Amanda curiosity to watch your mouth so here a problem somebody tell me s*** up to Amanda curiosity turning on the what the hell you're talking about and then you can live laugh life Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

Comment from DALLAS01

Exceptional

What a perfect title. If we could only find a constant rhythm. I think this is deserving of the prize. I must admit as I age and gain a different perspective, the confusion no longer seems as insurmountable. I finally quit trying to push the square pegs into the round holes and find that perhaps I can still be complete without having to unravel it all.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

I know what you mean... been there, done that... ;)
Sometimes it's better just to turn around and go forward, and just make sure you're not on 'repeat'...
I loved this. Very well done, Dawn...
Not an easy task, a three line poem.

Well done and good luck in the contest!
Cat

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

Wonderful poem. I agree completely with your note about how substituting "of" for "for" would change the meaning completely. I used to work as a psychotherapist and often thought of therapy as a process of trying to weave the expereinces of your life into a coherent, somewhat-healthy narrative - in other words, searching through your yesteryears for understanding. Your few words captured a very profound phenomenon.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016

Thanks for your wonderfully encouraging review. I do hope you will return for my next posting later today- a short editorial entitled, "What's Wrong With This Picture" that actually mentions this poem. All best wishes, Dawn :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your 3 line poem. The image is perfect. I believe the word is right as written. It seems to me that you are looking [for] something [understanding not stumbling through what you already found [of understanding]. I hope that makes sense. Good job and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016

Of course it makes sense, my dear friend - that's why I wrote it that way - the explanation I wrote in my notes is not for ME. I wrote the explanation because obviously the reviewer did NOT get it. I didn't want to have to repeat it over and over because there were others who did not comprehend the reason for that preposition either.

I honestly can't imagine how many OF THOSE there might be, jannypan, because I didn't think there was ANYTHING that needed explanation in the first place (at least not to fellow WRITERS.) But it's becoming increasingly obvious to me now that there is a large percentage of our membership who either can't be bothered TRYING to understand what they are reading and just scribble anything down and call it a review, or who don't respect anyone else's capabilities.

Thanks for reviewing. I always appreciate your visits.

Comment from chasennov

Excellent

3 line poem Contest entry. Family Fugue.' Indeed confusing if you do not wish to agree to (with) the author's definition. I do. I found this poem to be quite enlightening and most entertaining. Musical. Very well done.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016

Thanks for your wonderfully encouraging review. I do hope you will return for my next posting later today- a short editorial entitled, "What's Wrong With This Picture" that actually mentions this poem. All best wishes, Dawn :)

reply by chasennov on 23-Feb-2016

You are most welcome, Dawn.