Miscellaneous Poems - vol 3
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Comment from I am Cat
"From the day we arrive on the planet
And blinking, step into the sun
There's more to see than can ever be seen
More to do than can ever be done
There's far too much to take in here
More to find than can ever be found
But the sun rolling high
Through the sapphire sky
Keeps great and small on the endless round
It's the Circle of Life
And it moves us all
Through despair and hope
Through faith and love
Till we find our place
On the path unwinding
In the Circle
The Circle of Life..."
yeah... not sure why those lyrics from The Lion King came to me....
hmmmm.... lol
well, you met the requirements... damn, how I wish I had a sixer. LOL
you crack me up...
except it's not really funny.
but oh, it's really really good.
hard to beat a dick with a gun?
with a really big stick.
;)
(I actually wrote a poem once about a dick and a stick)
yeah
ok, i"m done. thanks for making me smile, but also for reminding me... of Cecil... long may his spirit bite the dicks with guns ;)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016
"From the day we arrive on the planet
And blinking, step into the sun
There's more to see than can ever be seen
More to do than can ever be done
There's far too much to take in here
More to find than can ever be found
But the sun rolling high
Through the sapphire sky
Keeps great and small on the endless round
It's the Circle of Life
And it moves us all
Through despair and hope
Through faith and love
Till we find our place
On the path unwinding
In the Circle
The Circle of Life..."
yeah... not sure why those lyrics from The Lion King came to me....
hmmmm.... lol
well, you met the requirements... damn, how I wish I had a sixer. LOL
you crack me up...
except it's not really funny.
but oh, it's really really good.
hard to beat a dick with a gun?
with a really big stick.
;)
(I actually wrote a poem once about a dick and a stick)
yeah
ok, i"m done. thanks for making me smile, but also for reminding me... of Cecil... long may his spirit bite the dicks with guns ;)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2016
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Thanks Cat :)
I almost wish there were a heaven and hell. Cecil would be feasting on vegie lion treats, and Walter would be roasting over an open spit.
Comment from Domino 2
Thanks for entering, mystery writer.
I never heard of 'Cecil', but guess he's a famous animal character.
A 'dick' is a great description for a hunter of trophies - 'a cowardly evil dick' would be even better. ;-)
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2016
Thanks for entering, mystery writer.
I never heard of 'Cecil', but guess he's a famous animal character.
A 'dick' is a great description for a hunter of trophies - 'a cowardly evil dick' would be even better. ;-)
Good luck and best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 22-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2016
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Hi Ray,
But then it would have to be a 5-7-10...
If you're willing to change the format, I'm willing to change my poem ;-)
Thanks for the good wishes, and thanks for the contest :)
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I realise that, LOL, and I was just trying to make a point about how disgusting 'sport' hunting is, and I didn't intend my suggestion to be included.
Thanks for getting back to me.
Cheers, Ray.
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I've just realised you were being sarcastic in a fun way. Sorry about that - I'm a bit slow this morning. :-)
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No worries LOL :)
Comment from winnona
I do not understand the poem at all. But you do have the five , seven , five syllables and the rest of the rules you have followed. Like iI said I do not understand what you are trying to say. But you did follow the rules so I am not taking stars away for my ignorance.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
I do not understand the poem at all. But you do have the five , seven , five syllables and the rest of the rules you have followed. Like iI said I do not understand what you are trying to say. But you did follow the rules so I am not taking stars away for my ignorance.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thanks, Winnona. I appreciate you not downgrading it because you didn't get the reference. Several months ago, a "big game" hunter and dentist from Minnesota named Walter Palmer paid around $60,000 for the "privilege" of shooting and killing a partially tame lion, that was used to people being around. This is not my first poem on the subject, and it won't be the last.
Again, thanks for judging the poem on its form, rather than content.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem. Good job with the syllable count. Your words tell the truth. I can't imagine how that **** can live with himself. Oh, he believes he did nothing wrong. Your words describe well the event. No picture is needed. Good job and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
I enjoyed your poem. Good job with the syllable count. Your words tell the truth. I can't imagine how that **** can live with himself. Oh, he believes he did nothing wrong. Your words describe well the event. No picture is needed. Good job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Jannypan, for the lovely review and also for the good wishes. Both are much appreciated :)
Comment from Irish Rain
Aww.....broke my heart that he was killed. Most excellent entry! I think you probably have the winner! Good luck to you, and blessings!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
Aww.....broke my heart that he was killed. Most excellent entry! I think you probably have the winner! Good luck to you, and blessings!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much for the lovely review, Irish Rain :)
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You are most welcome!
Comment from RodG
I can understand what you're trying to convey here: that in Nature it's survival of the fittest whereas mankind hunts for the pleasure of it. I am not a prude, but I don't see the need to use a term like "dick." You could make the same point by saying "a hunter with gun."
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
I can understand what you're trying to convey here: that in Nature it's survival of the fittest whereas mankind hunts for the pleasure of it. I am not a prude, but I don't see the need to use a term like "dick." You could make the same point by saying "a hunter with gun."
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Hunter doesn't fit the syllable requirement, nor convey my intentions - but thanks for your honest opinion :)
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I eliminated the second "a" so the syllable count does work.
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Oops, so you did - sorry.
Comment from joannakruk
Awesome creation; made me genuinely giggle. To be honest it took me a while to catch on (I'm a bit slow) but how clever! Luckily it takes a lot for me to be offended, however some 'thin-skinned' readers might take offence to the use of 'dick' - I think it's a perfect description :D.
It's a sad state of affairs when a douche bag with big bucks can pay to hunt an endangered species. Is it really necessary?
Best luck with the contest. My dibs are on you!
Jo :)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
Awesome creation; made me genuinely giggle. To be honest it took me a while to catch on (I'm a bit slow) but how clever! Luckily it takes a lot for me to be offended, however some 'thin-skinned' readers might take offence to the use of 'dick' - I think it's a perfect description :D.
It's a sad state of affairs when a douche bag with big bucks can pay to hunt an endangered species. Is it really necessary?
Best luck with the contest. My dibs are on you!
Jo :)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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Thanks so much , Jo, for enjoying my poem, and for the wonderful rating. Both are very much appreciated!
Comment from tfawcus
This one presupposes your audience knows who Cecil is. I don't! However, whoever he is (or was) it sounds as though he met a tragic end. I can only guess that perhaps he was a returned serviceman who used his own gun to defend the freedom of his country.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
This one presupposes your audience knows who Cecil is. I don't! However, whoever he is (or was) it sounds as though he met a tragic end. I can only guess that perhaps he was a returned serviceman who used his own gun to defend the freedom of his country.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2016
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It's about a lion who was shot by a "big game" hunter a while back. Thanks for the kind review :)
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Ah! I seem to remember something about it now. My brain is full, so all new knowledge now displaces something older!