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Warm Waters

Winter is too cold and needed a warmer inspiration

21 total reviews 
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Johngie,

Congratulations on your winning nature haiku!
I love your imagery and inviting word choices...
"stimulating calm" is a wonderful satori and
your presentation is beautiful!

I'm glad I stopped by,
Linda

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
    Linda, Thank you so much. Third poem is a charm. Certainly encouraging enough to write more.
Comment from TPAC
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Vivid detailed account with heavy conveyance in structured thought, awakening to ones spirit. A precise read in my opinion capturing the free spirit of nature.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your comments.
Comment from The Death
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Hi mystery poet,

The syllable count is correct as per the form. Good word economy! It has good imagery and appeal. However, the third line sound grammatically awkward, as one moves from second to third line. I'd recommend slightly tweaking it to make the read smoother.

Example edit:

aquamarine waves

flowing over my body

stimulate calmness

Please note that I've reviewed it as a 5/7/5 poem, and not a haiku. Otherwise, you'd have to revise the third line significantly.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your comment. All help is appreciated.
Comment from w.j.debi
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You transport us away to the beach and the sea with your concisely written verse.

Perfect syllable count and excellent formatting to enhance your message.

I love the contrast of the opposites in the final line. It holds so much truth.

stimulating calm

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 05-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your comments.
Comment from LiveLoveDie
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I live in Florida and can attest to the stunning beauty that is the ocean. There's no better therapy than laying at the edge of the water, letting the waves caress you like the loving arms of a man. Beautiful writing. Great job!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your comments. Happy New Year.
Comment from AmeliaCanton
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This poem doesn't really make me feel warm, but it does make me feel calm. If it weren't for the picture, I would not have understood why the title was 'Warm Waters', but it is still a good nature poem.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your comments.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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This is a fine Nature 5-7-5. I love the water, so this contest entry was one that I could very easily relate to. Warm waters are so very calming. Not much beats that! I read all of the contest entries, and thought yours was the best. I also love the picture that you posted with your poem. :)

Well done! Best wishes for the contest, mystery writer!

bichonfrisegirl

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from angel123
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I like your poem and I enjoyed reading it. It makes me relax thinking about it. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your words.

Angel123

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from RYME4U
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Well done. Very colorful and descriptive. This Haiku meets all the requirements of the contest. Presentation is well done. Great job!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

Such lovely imagery expressed in this little 5-7-5.

Fits the competition rules well and great accompanying picture.

Best of luck in the booths!
GMG

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2016


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
    Thank you for your kind comments.