To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "twin chairs rocking"Free Verse Poetry
14 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Two people who come a long way together need not to speak, they know each other's thoughts and can just sit together rocking in their twin chairs
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Two people who come a long way together need not to speak, they know each other's thoughts and can just sit together rocking in their twin chairs
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Beautifully stated. Yes, exactly. Thank you for the nice insights. mikey
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem. I believe you are over the 15 words or less count. You used 16 words. Your artwork choice goes well with your poem.
Angel123
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I believe you are over the 15 words or less count. You used 16 words. Your artwork choice goes well with your poem.
Angel123
Comment Written 23-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Hyphenated words are counted as one word, so I'll be okay. So pleased you liked this. I thought it was a perfect little picture, thank you so much. mikey
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Thank you for letting me know that hyphenated words are counted as one word. That information will serve useful in my writings.
Comment from Jared_L
I have not seen many works like this one on here. It created a picture within my mind that was only aided by the one provided. For me, ending with the title of the work pulled it together into that picture.
I did not review all of the works in this contest but couldn't help but stop here and leave a note on this one. It resonated with my heart. Thank-you for sharing your art!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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I have not seen many works like this one on here. It created a picture within my mind that was only aided by the one provided. For me, ending with the title of the work pulled it together into that picture.
I did not review all of the works in this contest but couldn't help but stop here and leave a note on this one. It resonated with my heart. Thank-you for sharing your art!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one. I thought it said exactly what I wanted to say and it delights me that it resonated with you. Any poet wants nothing more. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from l.raven
true love is when no matter how old you get...you are both young in each others eye's...I love your poem...and the picture says it all...
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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true love is when no matter how old you get...you are both young in each others eye's...I love your poem...and the picture says it all...
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2015
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Yes, exactly correct. Thank you so much. A darling picture, yes? mikey
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you are so welcome Michael...xxoo Linda Luff
Comment from Gloria ....
Wow, you sure packed a lot of meaning into a fifteen word poem. Almost a whole lifetime's worth of smokin' hot love, daydreams answered and a happily ever after ending.
The picture is really cute too. Best wishes to you in the contest. Tis the season.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Wow, you sure packed a lot of meaning into a fifteen word poem. Almost a whole lifetime's worth of smokin' hot love, daydreams answered and a happily ever after ending.
The picture is really cute too. Best wishes to you in the contest. Tis the season.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Yay! That's the reaction I was hoping for. I could dig being part of that couple forty or fifty years from now or whenever I recover from my dream state. Thank you kindly. :)))
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Wow, you must be a young buck to be living for another fifty years. Suddenly I feel old. :))
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No, you're not old in the least. I'm a little teeny bit insane is all. It's a great asset to me. :))
Comment from country ranch writer
love the presentation work up for your poem love granny and grandpa sitting in their comfy chairs enjoying themselves relaxing
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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love the presentation work up for your poem love granny and grandpa sitting in their comfy chairs enjoying themselves relaxing
Comment Written 22-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much. This is how it should be after the dust settles!!! So pleased you enjoyed. :))
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yepper
Comment from nordicgirl
I think you are successful here. Hoping to meet that special someone. Then actually meeting them. Hoping that it will be mutual, discovering it is. Then, a lifetime together in love. Really beautiful. More entries to come, but I doubt this will be touched.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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I think you are successful here. Hoping to meet that special someone. Then actually meeting them. Hoping that it will be mutual, discovering it is. Then, a lifetime together in love. Really beautiful. More entries to come, but I doubt this will be touched.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Wow. You have it to a tee. It's nice to be understood completely. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. A galaxy of stars too. I'll cross my fingers, but the response is enough for me. I wrote what I wanted to write. :)) Thank you kindly
Comment from trumby
Fantastic imagery matched with a beautiful free verse poem, wonderfully expressed message. I really enjoyed reading this free verse. Like this line:
"endless daydream erupting"
When I retire from work, I would like to stay beside my wife in a rocking chair and reminisce the past.
Good luck in the contest. All the best.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Fantastic imagery matched with a beautiful free verse poem, wonderfully expressed message. I really enjoyed reading this free verse. Like this line:
"endless daydream erupting"
When I retire from work, I would like to stay beside my wife in a rocking chair and reminisce the past.
Good luck in the contest. All the best.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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I'm so delighted with your response. Just what I was hoping for. Thank you for the well wishes, but I'm more than satisfied with the response. Big smiles. :))
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I think you are very close to something special here. The idea of two chairs rocking in unison does imply a sweet sort of love, but with the big words and awkward sentences, I'm afraid it may be losing it's impact. (sorry!) Do you HAVE to use 15 words? Or can it simply be a poem that has 15 words or LESS? If so, I would suggest editing a bit. Also, I don't think the CEC will count 'smoky-room' as one word. Just a suggestion or two. Don't mean to offend!
Good luck in the contest - please let me know if you revise and I'll happily re-rate!
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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I think you are very close to something special here. The idea of two chairs rocking in unison does imply a sweet sort of love, but with the big words and awkward sentences, I'm afraid it may be losing it's impact. (sorry!) Do you HAVE to use 15 words? Or can it simply be a poem that has 15 words or LESS? If so, I would suggest editing a bit. Also, I don't think the CEC will count 'smoky-room' as one word. Just a suggestion or two. Don't mean to offend!
Good luck in the contest - please let me know if you revise and I'll happily re-rate!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Hmm. I always appreciate candid responses and I'll take yours to heart. I'm pretty happy with this to be honest. I guess we'll see. If I end up in last I owe you an imaginary drink. If I win ... we'll I guess I'm still buying, yes? Ha! Not offended, just up ended!!! LOL!!!!
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I think that's fine! I believe our job here is to point out what we see -- 'steel sharpens steel', you know? But I certainly don't expect anyone to follow every word I say -- especially if you've read much of my work! hahaha! Not claiming to be an expert in ANYthing. Thanks for taking my comments in the manner intended and I'll take you up on the drink - but it will be a Dr. Pepper for me, please. *smile*
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Dr. Pepper it is. Better off with that myself, or so EVERYONE tells me. Ha! :))
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done.
Comment from William Ross
Yes I see it even without the picture Great job. Good luck in the contest with this. Sending Very Merry Christmas Wish's your way.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Yes I see it even without the picture Great job. Good luck in the contest with this. Sending Very Merry Christmas Wish's your way.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015
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Great to hear. Merry Christmas to you and yours as well. Appreciate the encouraging words! :))