Comment from janalma

Excellent

This is so cute and funny. And, when you think about it, Lucy is right. What a silly story! Loved your sense of humor here. No typos, no spag. Well written, with sensible and interesting progression, and made me grin.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015

Thanks Jan, When caused by writing, grind are terrific. (So are bellylaughs.)

Ogden

Comment from writeapoem

Excellent

Pattygirl you did it again submitted a good write, that I happen to like. The Photo you seem to know how to select something to compliment your work.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015

Thanks for the compliments, Write! How in the world could you have read it so fast? It's been dormant for ages, and I promoted it a few seconds before you posted your review. Are you clairvoyant? And who is Pattygirl?!!

Ogden

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

I love reading this. yes, why do they write such nonsense story as Little Miss Muffet sitting on a tuffet eating curds and whey. Funny, but do you eat curds? No way, I say, yet Miss Muffet made history and became famous with kids. Funny little children, who don't even know how to choose what they want. LOL. I enjoyed your prose dear writer. God bless.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015

Thankd Nassus! It's always great when someone says they appreciate your work, but it's more meanful when it comes from another writer.

Ogden

Comment from johngie

Average

Very child like opinion on the classic poem. Screams like a boys point of view but seems to be written with a child's mind and mouth. The intention was well received.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015

I'm sorry you didn't like it, johngie. It's the first 3-star review I have gotten. I wiill give a lot of thought to your point of view. Thank you for your input.

Ogden

reply by johngie on 28-Nov-2015

Sorry but I am new to this.

Very child like--meaning written like a child had spoken the words. I hope this was what was intended.

I have just started, please have patience.

reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015

John, you've missed the point. This IS a child giving a book review. That is the explanation given at the top of the page. The kid is a piece of work! Her aggressive approach is my attempt at humor. If this didn't hit your funnybone, that's my fault.

Ogden

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a delightful story about how children perceive things. Many of the children's stories would be puzzling to a child. How did an egg sit on a wall is another example. Or how does an old woman live in a shoe?
Patricia

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015

Thanks a lot, Pat. That's a very nice review! You are a very nice person. Are you a boy or a girl? I know a girl who is a Pat, too. But I know two boys who are Pats. Which one are you?

Thanks for telling me you think that story is a big lie!
That lady who lived inside a shoe with all those kids! Maybe it is an exageration. I don't think it is ALL true.
There aren't any itallics on my iPad. Mommy gave me my own iPad for Christmas last Christmas.

All the kids believe in that shoe story just like Santa Claus. I'm going to tell them what you said, Pat. I wasn't so sure about that story myself. This is what I THINK about it:

I don't think that mommy did all of what they say. That's probably what you mean. Right? How can they expect us to believe EVERYTHING? So many people living in a great big shoe! Maybe she didn't "have so many children she didn't know what to do." But maybe she DID have too many kids. I know a boy who has six brothers, and he has to share his room with two of them. Why did his mommy and daddy buy so many children anyway?

Did they all live together in that one big room? They don't have real rooms in a big shoe, do they they? I like my privacy. (I have my own room.) I don't have any brothers and sisters. That's why I have my own room. I don't think I am spoiled.

Did they get somebody to tie the shoe before they went to bed? I know they can't have locks on a shoe. And they don't make keys that big anyway! Do they think us kids are that dumb?

That's why I wrote my review on that little Miss Muffitt. I'm glad you liked it, too. Lots of other people do. They are giving me nice reviews, too. I think I'll tell THEM my opinion of those shoe people, too. I'll just copy this and send it to them, too. I wish I had thought of that before so I wouldn't have had to write so many thank you notes. I wish FanStory wouln't make us write them! I'm very glad your review gave me this idea Pat when you said you didn't believe in the shoe story. Do you like writing reviews? I think I think like you do, and you think like I do. How about that!

I am going to be your fan. You ought to write an expozay on that phoney shoe story, and kids wouldn't believe it any more.

Do you think this reply is too long?

Ogden

reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015

Thanks a lot, Pat. That's a very nice review! You are a very nice person. Are you a boy or a girl? I know a girl who is a Pat, too. But I know two boys who are Pats. Which one are you?

Thanks for telling me you think that story is a big lie!
That lady who lived inside a shoe with all those kids! Maybe it is an exageration. I don't think it is ALL true.
There aren't any itallics on my iPad. Mommy gave me my own iPad for Christmas last Christmas.

All the kids believe in that shoe story just like Santa Claus. I'm going to tell them what you said, Pat. I wasn't so sure about that story myself. This is what I THINK about it:

I don't think that mommy did all of what they say. That's probably what you mean. Right? How can they expect us to believe EVERYTHING? So many people living in a great big shoe! Maybe she didn't "have so many children she didn't know what to do." But maybe she DID have too many kids. I know a boy who has six brothers, and he has to share his room with two of them. Why did his mommy and daddy buy so many children anyway?

Did they all live together in that one big room? They don't have real rooms in a big shoe, do they they? I like my privacy. (I have my own room.) I don't have any brothers and sisters. That's why I have my own room. I don't think I am spoiled.

Did they get somebody to tie the shoe before they went to bed? I know they can't have locks on a shoe. And they don't make keys that big anyway! Do they think us kids are that dumb?

That's why I wrote my review on that little Miss Muffitt. I'm glad you liked it, too. Lots of other people do. They are giving me nice reviews, too. I think I'll tell THEM my opinion of those shoe people, too. I'll just copy this and send it to them, too. I wish I had thought of that before so I wouldn't have had to write so many thank you notes. I wish FanStory wouln't make us write them! I'm very glad your review gave me this idea Pat when you said you didn't believe in the shoe story. Do you like writing reviews? I think I think like you do, and you think like I do. How about that!

I am going to be your fan. You ought to write an expozay on that phoney shoe story, and kids wouldn't believe it any more.

Do you think this reply is too long?

Ogden

reply by patcelaw on 28-Nov-2015

First I am a girl.
Next this is one very fun review and you ought to make it into a story. As you say children won't believe those lie anymore.
Keep writing my friend you are a funny person. And yes review are fun to write, I write a lot of them.
And by the way, another lie I was told was that I evolved from a monkey, that is a lie because I don't like bananas, nor do I have evidence I ever had a tail. Blessings Patricia an old ladyb don't live in a shoe.

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015

Do you have any evidence to the contrary besides bananas?

reply by patcelaw on 10-Dec-2015

According to science the monkey and the human are genetically different. I am not a scientist, but I will believe them on this.

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015

But you are such a religious woman!

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015

But you are such a religious woman!

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

What a precious story. It takes a lot of imagination to create a book/poem review by a child. Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015

Thanks! The contested ended several days ago. "Muffet" finished with two votes - mine and one from someone, evidently, with very bad judgment.

Thanks again for your very kind review.

Ogden

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 24-Nov-2015

I thought it was adorable! I didn't vote in that one or I would have chosen it!

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Typical reaction of a twenty-first century kid to the different words and phrases of past eras. Slightly odd in that the child did not decide to sue someone in the end.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015

Thanks, Red! Uh, on what grounds could she sue? If she can, I"ll write a sequel.

Ogden

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

I got a kick out of this amusing, tongue-in-cheek, little tale. It's true, kid's fairy tales are not really for kids. In fact, most of them would probably scare a little kid. Some grownup's prank to write them. Marilyn/BeasPeas

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Thanks for the insightful review, Marilyn! I had this one in reserve, waiting for the right opportunity to post it. I thought I might have a chance in the contest, but then I remembered that there probably will be lots of terrific poets in it also, like me, but wth years of their best work in reserve. I may not get a vote.

Don't worry, I won't he discouraged, no matter the outcome.

Don

reply by BeasPeas on 15-Nov-2015

The name of the game is just keep on writing for yourself and entering things. The law of averages says you have to hit it sometimes.

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Actually, I have always written humor (except, of course, when the assignment calls for something different) because I enjoy it more than any other genre,

I don't know if the law of averages applies to talent.

I always appreciate your advice, Marilyn

reply by BeasPeas on 15-Nov-2015

Hi Don. I'm not advising. I hope encouraging is a better word. I think you do alright on your own. I love reading humorous and clever poems (stories, too).

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Don't you remember, we first became "acquainted" when you welcomed me to Fanstar and gave me advice as we exchanged messages? During that time, I mentioned that you seemed to be a serious person. You replied that you are and generally don't appreciate humor. Then you reviewed one of my poems an said it made you giggle. I said
I was glad that you developed giggleability.

I hope that you have held onto it.

Don

reply by BeasPeas on 15-Nov-2015

Hi Don. I have an excellent memory and remember everything--like one of those savants--my kids are even worse--memories like elephants and can quote chapter and verse. Ha! Marilyn

Comment from jpduck

Excellent

This was fun. The writer clearly has a great future as a literary critic -- forthright, and with no concern for objectivity.

Best of luck with the contest.


Adrian

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Hey Adrian, I just posted this thing. How did you see it and write a review so fast! Are you a computer?

Ogden

reply by jpduck on 15-Nov-2015

Pure luck, dear boy, pure luck. I don't think I'm a computer; at least, I wasn't last time I looked.

Adrian

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

It has a lot to do with who your parents are.

Thanks for the good wishes, Adrrian!

Ogden

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

A lot of mother goose rhymes make no sense. Like Jack and Jill and Jack Sprat, Humpty Dumpty, etc. I think curds and whey could be cottage cheese. Are there and moral behind Mother Goose rhymes or are the just a fun way of learning words and reading.

I hope you did well in the contest.

Keep writing.

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Thanks for reviewing Muffitt, Dragon!

I know what curds and whey is. It's the little revierer who doesn"t

Yes, the moral of my Muffitt is that if you are a writer don't let that #%&@&&!?!! brat review it!

Ogden

reply by dragonpoet on 15-Nov-2015

You're welcome.

I am sad that you don't appreciate my review. You don't have to be nasty about it. By they way Google says the cottage cheese is curds and whey.

dragonpoet

reply by the author on 15-Nov-2015

Dragon, I liked your review very much! I was joking. Why would I want to insult someone nice enough to give me a good review?

I apologize for hurting your feelings.

Ogden

reply by dragonpoet on 15-Nov-2015

Thats ok. I probably just didn't get enough sleep last night.

dp