Comment from bard owl

Excellent

This poem is a riot and very witty, with underrated bits of humor in almost every line. I read it twice just for the pleasure of reading it. Except for the part where you commented on rhyme, the rhyme in your poem is flawless as is the rhythm (except where you are talking about rhythm - Ha!)
Thank you for the relief from this site's grief and sorrow.
Best of luck in the contest.
Linda

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015

I replied to this earlier, but my reply isn't showing. It might have got lost in this morning's site hiccup.

Thanks so much for the lovely comments and good wishes :)

Craig

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

to be honest they were really bad

Ok, let's hear it for non-conformity! lol Loved the concept, rhyme scheme (ok, until the previous line, but obviously, I know why you did it. (still grating, but its ok, I'll live lol) Actually, this was the pivotal line and utter genius, of course. Good luck in the contest!!

Kim

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015

Thanks so much for the lovely review Kim. I'm glad you got the little joke in line 14. Comments much appreciated :)

Craig

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

I love the arrogance and humor. Watch out everyone else, I am here and no else is as good! I especially like that the one line about rhyming does not rhyme. Excellent use of satire throughout. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015

Thanks so much Debi, for the generous review. Very much appreciated :)

Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

This poem immediately brought this song to mind: the essence of the song, 'lord it's hard to be humble' (a country song, but this poem and that song have the same root of Form)

(a verse from that song)
Oh, lord, it's hard to be humble... when you're perfect in every way
I can't wait to look in the mirror... 'cause I get better looking each day
to know me is to love me, I must be a hell of a man
oh, lord, it's hard to be humble, we're doing the best that we can.

The use of breaking meter and rhyme, while professing both perfection goes in line with the theme of self-idolization and humility. There is tone of satire...
Otherwise the rhyming structure and beat has a simplicity, a straightforwardness... about it that's appropriate for the light-hearted play.

This contest seems like a mosh pit of poems, making them hard to compare against each other. But there is a guilty pleasure in projecting this poem outward... applying it to others frames of mind, the humble poet.

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015

Hi Turtle,

I know the song, and yes -- whilst it didn't come to mind as I was writing the poem, they are in a similar vein :)

There's more than a touch of irony in this bit of nonsense, because as I sat down at the last minute to try and pen something for this contest, I realised I was drawing a blank..... couldn't think of a thing -- whoops! So I turned to my usual last resort - satire. Not my best effort, but it's better than a blank slot in the entries - maybe. Thanks for reviewing :)

Craig.

reply by --Turtle. on 19-Oct-2015

Ah! A poem under pressure, a last minute rhyme. : )

Hey, your better than nothing would be better than my best shot!

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

LOLOL, Oh Craig, your wit is always so spot on! I love the way you lost your perfect meter just when you mentioned it, and you lost your perfect rhyme at just the right time as well... A poem of perfect imperfection! Well done, and I wish you all the luck in this contest, it should be an awesome race to the finish. I will relish just sitting back and watching this one play out! lol
Well done!
Cat

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015

LOL well I certainly won't be holding my breath Cat! I seriously blanked when it came to producing something "meaningful" at 2:30 am after driving all day,, so I reverted to my usual last resort ;-) Thanks heaps!

Craig.

Comment from lightink

Excellent

I only realized the title "Humility" after reading it! :)
It's definitely a poem that provokes emotions - one way or another!
I love how you send the syllable count and the meter off track - when you talk about the meter!
The last line is pretty precious, too.
I very much recommend to change the category to "satire".
Other than that it's a fun one!

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015

I almost did change it to satire when I posted.... but I thought maybe it would be more fun not to.

I'll take the advice though - thanks for the upbeat review :)

Craig

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I'll be sure to always remember that, Craig. After all, who needs or wants mediocrity these days anyhow?

Oh no, not me,
I'll vote for thee!
and then we'll see
your victory!

Best of luck in the voting booths...

~Dean :)

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015

Thanks Dean! I'm thinking maybe I should cut and paste your poem from above in its place..... it probably stands a better chance! Just a bit of fun. I had intentions when I signed up for this contest weeks ago of doing something grand - then somehow ran out of time and ideas right at the end! :)

Craig

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Oct-2015

I know what you mean, Craig. It happens to me too, all of the time, LOL.

Anyhow, I do wish you the best of luck. You just never know what's going to sway the voters in the end.
Always with respect
~Dean :}

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Good

As a contest entry this will probably be viewed for the tongue-in-check attempt at humor that it is. It does not exceed much more than that.

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2015