Christine's Poems
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Comment from pharp
Hello My Friend,
You are very good at writing poems, this one brought a smile to my face. I love the wit and humor. Excellent rhyming and rhythm; very smooth flow and a most enjoyable read to start my day. (Love your artwork) Thanks for sharing.....................Portia
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hello My Friend,
You are very good at writing poems, this one brought a smile to my face. I love the wit and humor. Excellent rhyming and rhythm; very smooth flow and a most enjoyable read to start my day. (Love your artwork) Thanks for sharing.....................Portia
Comment Written 22-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Hi Portia thanks for reading my little poem about 'anything' . it was for a contest but got lost in the system so I kept it on anyway glad you had a smile and have a great day . i have fun writing even with my wierd sense of humour lol Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Cute and funny, I think you've proved the point that poets can write about anything, even the thought of entering a contest.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Cute and funny, I think you've proved the point that poets can write about anything, even the thought of entering a contest.
Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hi Spiritual Echo , yes this was supposed to be my Contest entry about anything but I misplaced it during the post so had to come up with another one, but thanks for reading this anyway hope it made you smile. Appreciate your time and comments Have a great day Cheers Christine😃
Comment from mvbrooks
Whimsical, fun poem. The rhyme scheme is consistent. It's a challenge to find four consistent rhymes for each stanza while not forcing the text to fit. Your rhyme is highly effective and adds to the poems fun nature.
Editing note:
"I've checked out all the contest now..."
--"all" suggests more than one, so it seems "contest" should be plural (contests)
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"And I'm still lying her real snug..."
--change "her" to "here"
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A thought:
"I hope it meets requirement set..."
--should it be "requirements?" it might read smoother as "the requirements"
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Whimsical, fun poem. The rhyme scheme is consistent. It's a challenge to find four consistent rhymes for each stanza while not forcing the text to fit. Your rhyme is highly effective and adds to the poems fun nature.
Editing note:
"I've checked out all the contest now..."
--"all" suggests more than one, so it seems "contest" should be plural (contests)
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"And I'm still lying her real snug..."
--change "her" to "here"
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A thought:
"I hope it meets requirement set..."
--should it be "requirements?" it might read smoother as "the requirements"
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hi mybrooks and thank you for your review it is much appreciated and I will attend to the corrections so thanks for the suggestions. It is always nice to get a review and great when Spags are seen it heps one to improve so a big thanks and Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Nosha17
I loved the wit and the picture was most appropriate! Excellent rhyming and a most enjoyable read. In verse 2, it should read contests. Faye
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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I loved the wit and the picture was most appropriate! Excellent rhyming and a most enjoyable read. In verse 2, it should read contests. Faye
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hi Faye thanks so much for you support and review for this poem that was supposed to be an entry for a competition this am bit it somehow went to general poetry so I wrote another one for the contest, ( nothing better to do than write poetry all day lol ) I will also make the correction so glad to have you keep me in check really appreciate it. Big Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
I know that feeling, when you are warm under the covers and there is nothing that needs doing, and you just lie there reading or writing poetry. It is the best feeling. Nice rhyme and the poem flows well. Good job!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Hello :)
I know that feeling, when you are warm under the covers and there is nothing that needs doing, and you just lie there reading or writing poetry. It is the best feeling. Nice rhyme and the poem flows well. Good job!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2015
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Thank Gypsy it is very easy to wile away the day in bed. this was for a contest today but missed the boat so it was released on general poetry by mistake, still had fun writing it, and thanks for reading this with best wishes and a big Cheer my friend Christine😃
Comment from poetadeu
I couldn't quite decided if you meant this to be a contest
entry or not. It isn't listed in a contest, so I have to
assume not. This sounds like me some days. I want to write
but a few more hours in bed seems like heaven, so I will
choose heaven this time. Nice write and I like the pic, too!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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I couldn't quite decided if you meant this to be a contest
entry or not. It isn't listed in a contest, so I have to
assume not. This sounds like me some days. I want to write
but a few more hours in bed seems like heaven, so I will
choose heaven this time. Nice write and I like the pic, too!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hi Joyce, Yes this was written for the contest 'are you a poet ' in today's prompt, but when I was finalising the entry I entered it into poetry instead so now it is just on the normal site .I realized my mistake when I got my first review, I wrote this this morning before getting out of bed and saw the contests thought I would have a go,at this one but like I can do sometimes not concentrate so that is how it wound up in general poetry Oh well I may still try an entry but my muse is stretched lol Thanks for reading this anyway Cheers Christine😃
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Oh, no problem. It is still a great piece for your profile and status. I just noticed no contest sign was on the
write. It's a winner either way! Yeah!
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thanks heaps😃
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Yepper!
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Oh, no problem. It is still a great piece for your profile and status. I just noticed no contest sign was on the
write. It's a winner either way! Yeah!
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thanks a lot much appreciated
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My pleasure! LOL::{{-Joyce
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My pleasure! LOL::{{-Joyce
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I love the photo, but what time that must take!
-Poem is cleverly written with a good rhyme scheme.
-I like all the things you bring up about writing.
-Some things that stood out for me are:
* "The pressure's on now for my muse, and words for her to bring"
* "I hope it meets requirement set, is that not what you asked?"
-A few things to consider:
*all the contest now (contests)
*about, the day (comma not needed, as it is breaking up the phrase)
*suceed. (succeed)
*lying her (here)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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-I love the photo, but what time that must take!
-Poem is cleverly written with a good rhyme scheme.
-I like all the things you bring up about writing.
-Some things that stood out for me are:
* "The pressure's on now for my muse, and words for her to bring"
* "I hope it meets requirement set, is that not what you asked?"
-A few things to consider:
*all the contest now (contests)
*about, the day (comma not needed, as it is breaking up the phrase)
*suceed. (succeed)
*lying her (here)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hello respa1 and thanks for reading my poem I do so much enjoy your support and helpful hints. I must admit this was a little rushed as I was tryong to get it written before entering it into the contest prompt 'are you a poet' bit when I finished it I accidently put into poetry instead ( not concentrating) so i may have to try another write for that if I can get my muse working again lol I will correct the mistakes and love the fact you always give me a great feedback with points to consider. so a big Thank you and Cheer to you Christine😃
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You are very welcome for the review and the things to consider. I think your muse will come through:)
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hope so another one now done havent done much around the house today oh well to bad this is much better fun lol
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Glad another one is done, and I agree about stuff that needs to be done--not as much fun:)
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
_ These little critters are soooo neat!
_ We used to have them daily after housekeeping when we were on our cruise. Fun!
_ This is really cute. You just never know what can be running through those little critters minds---no, not at all. (*<*)
_ I like this---it gave me a chuckle.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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Hi, Christine
_ These little critters are soooo neat!
_ We used to have them daily after housekeeping when we were on our cruise. Fun!
_ This is really cute. You just never know what can be running through those little critters minds---no, not at all. (*<*)
_ I like this---it gave me a chuckle.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2015
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thank Jax for your review and glad to have made you chuckle. I use this image as I couldnt find any other one in such a shot time but it is cute and I had a new one each day. as always a big Cheer Christine😃