Comment from Pen of Fire

Excellent

This poem speaks truth unfortunately. Very well thought out. You did a great job with entry. /The artwork you chose is perfect. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thank you very much for your kind comments. They are very much appreciated :)

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello mystery writer,

I like your haiku for the contest of endanger animals haiku. You did a good job with the syllable count. You have to grammatically connected lines and a satori line. Goodjob!

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thank you, Gypsy, for your kind remarks. Much appreciated.

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

interesting theme... beautiful artwork.
I think you might have something here

well thought out...and yes,
we are sort of destroying ourselves
sadly.
well done,
good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015

Thank you, Cat, for your thoughtful review and your good wishes. They are most appreciated!

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. This is a very clever piece as you manage to endanger everything that is not human - I hope the committee does to tag this for not being about a specific endangered species as stated in the rules. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015

Hi Mystic Angel. Yes, I'm concerned about that too. My thinking is that if ALL species are endangered then certainly A species is. I haven't excluded humans from that list. The instructions also say to be creative, so I guess we'll see how it's interpreted. Thanks for your kind review :)

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 23-Jul-2015

I hope it works for you, but I have been sucked into the void before by the 'be creative' thing. I will light a candle you make it through for it is VERY good and uniquely clever.

reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015

Well, I was forced to change it. Pity, it doesn't have the same meaning now; but hopefully it "complies" :)

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

While I think this is outstanding as is, I suspect that the haikuistas will have an issue with 2 grammatically connected lines. I'm thinking you may circumvent that by putting a dash after the first line. I respect the minimal punctuation, but I think it might get you one or two more votes ;) The third line is clearly your satori. This is well written and to perfect syllable counts. I wish you the best of luck.

Kim

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015

Thank you for the advice, Kim. I do believe I will take it. Thanks for the lovely review and your good wishes as well.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Isn't that the truth? No species is safe. Your haiku is direct, simple, and well-crafted. It also packs a punch with a message that resonates.

I wish you success in the haiku contest.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015

Thank you so much for your kind review, much appreciated.