Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I like -A day in the life of a cliche. Did you win the contest? You have a strong entry here. I am glad this is not about your life, the poem is a bit on the drama side of life. I think you did an excellent job.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015

Hi Gypsy - no it didn't win. I think that's something like six in a row where I've been the bridesmaid - oh well. Thanks for the kind words though, they're much appreciated. Craig.

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I think your poem is refreshing and meaningful. I enjoyed reading it and it held my attention. It flows and rhymes well and your artwork choice is perfect.

Angel123

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Thanks, Angel, for your kind comments. They're much appreciated.

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Live on I feel the writer and myself should be twins, writer holding the skills between the two, wonderful I thought in its conveyance writer course is precise and interesting in read

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Thanks so much, TPAC, for checking out my poem, and for your kind remarks. Much appreciated.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Got a chuckle out of this one. A menagerie of metaphores;
a symphony of synonyms --
couched in tortured, twisted rhyme,
connected by this author's whims.
I fear my audience won't clap
this foetid lump of steaming crap.

Hope you win.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Ben, glad it gave you a laugh. Thanks for the good wishes, too.

Comment from Mary H-W

Excellent

As I began reading, I thought this was going to be light and even humorous. I was going to quote your line:
this foetid lump of steaming crap.
as one of my favorites. But as I read on, the feel of your writing seemed to change to hurt and lack of forgiveness. I don't know if your mood changed as you wrote, or if I misunderstood the beginning portion.
Either way, I think it's well said. In poetry, we write whatever drives us. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Hi Mary. My mood didn't really change. I guess I was just having a gentle dig at the idea that poetry has to be all rainbows and sunshine or else really dark and morbid. And I was trying to throw as many cliches in there as I could fit. As someone I admire a lot has said:

"And the weirdest thing about a mind
Is that every answer that you find
Is the basis of a brand new cliché"

and I don't think we "poets" are immune to that.

That's all - not really deep.
Thanks for your review, sorry you found it a bit confusing.

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

This really made me smile. Where are the kittens and puppy dogs? It was all I could find that was missing lol Is it possible for a cliché to be original? I think you have done well within the parameters of this contest and I truly wish you nothing but sunshine and rainbows (and lots of votes, of course!) Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Damn, I knew I forgot something! Thanks for getting the point, and for your kind assessment - very much appreciated.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is excellent. I love the rhythm you have set up here. The questioning of the " grand plan" and the way some poetry is often just 'fluff' without profound meaning has been very well expressed. The ending gives wise advice....just live for today. Great job

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks for your kind words, Ryme4u, they are are much appreciated.

Comment from writerz

Good

A true delight - I enjoyed humor so I hope it was meant. As a poet I can identify when sitting to write, all subjects matters are open territory.
Flow was consistent, and though nothing earth shattering this is the kind of poem to enjoy a light quick pick me up of rhyme and rhythm.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thank you.