Birthday Wishes
flash fiction23 total reviews
Comment from Joseph Registrato
Don't tell this writer he can't write a complete story in 60 words. Dynamite, this has everything. Sensitive, touching, gets to you on a number of levels. I'm not sure what six stars looks like, but this is close.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Don't tell this writer he can't write a complete story in 60 words. Dynamite, this has everything. Sensitive, touching, gets to you on a number of levels. I'm not sure what six stars looks like, but this is close.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Joseph, for rediscovering this old post and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
You are a multi-talented person! An 80 word flash. I've been reading all the flash fiction I can find that has already proved itself, but haven't been reviewing because, being so old, I don't know whether it counts for either of us. But this little shortie must be commented on. You have quite a few to choose from on this "ribboned" poems section in "read." And while I'm here, which English grammar and punctuation book do you consider the best. I have a Jane Straus & I don't think there's anything wrong with it but Margaret Snowdon never heard of her. It seems like the name Strunk & White comes up a lot. What say you? GoodHearted Woman (Marcia)
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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You are a multi-talented person! An 80 word flash. I've been reading all the flash fiction I can find that has already proved itself, but haven't been reviewing because, being so old, I don't know whether it counts for either of us. But this little shortie must be commented on. You have quite a few to choose from on this "ribboned" poems section in "read." And while I'm here, which English grammar and punctuation book do you consider the best. I have a Jane Straus & I don't think there's anything wrong with it but Margaret Snowdon never heard of her. It seems like the name Strunk & White comes up a lot. What say you? GoodHearted Woman (Marcia)
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, GoodHearted Woman, for browsing through my portfolio. I love being rediscovered, and welcome the exceptional rating and your kind praise of "Birthday Wishes." There is a fine grammar program app (cheap) you could easily download called GRAMMAR-LY. When I taught, I used WARRINER'S HANDBOOK which I still think is as good as they come. Rod
Comment from Pen of Fire
Beautifully written. How sad to see someone you love come to that place in life. So much said in so few words. Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Beautifully written. How sad to see someone you love come to that place in life. So much said in so few words. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much, Pen of Fire, for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and for your wonderful praise and generous rating. Rod
Comment from Muffins
Beside Cancer, Alzheimer is the meanest disease nature has plagued us with. It's destroys not only the one trap inside its unforgiving hold, but the loves ones who watch their love one slip away. The heartache in this simple scene is tremendous.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Beside Cancer, Alzheimer is the meanest disease nature has plagued us with. It's destroys not only the one trap inside its unforgiving hold, but the loves ones who watch their love one slip away. The heartache in this simple scene is tremendous.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and for your wonderful praise and generosity. Indeed, Alzheimer is "the meanest disease" and I am pleased my short-short captured the pathos for you. Rod
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. Somehow this piece slipped by me. I'm sure many of us can identify with your words as most know someone with Alzheimer's/senile dementia. Congratulations on winning the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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This is excellent. Somehow this piece slipped by me. I'm sure many of us can identify with your words as most know someone with Alzheimer's/senile dementia. Congratulations on winning the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2015
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Hi Marilyn. Thanks so much for dropping by and sharing "Birthday Wishes." I really appreciate the congrats and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, this certainly is a very sad story. It's so sad because in many instances, it is an all too common reality for some elderly individuals. In other words, this kind of thing does happen.
So tragic but well written.
Best of luck to you in the competition. ~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Well, this certainly is a very sad story. It's so sad because in many instances, it is an all too common reality for some elderly individuals. In other words, this kind of thing does happen.
So tragic but well written.
Best of luck to you in the competition. ~Dean
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Yes, it is a sad story, too true these days. Thanks for sharing, Dean. Always appreciate your reviews. Rod
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Anytime, Rod. :)
Comment from meggie13
The grandmother is in hospice care and has Alzheimer's .It's her birthday but she forgot how to blow the candles. You blew the candles and made a wish. Did you wish she died? Very good flash fiction. The picture used is perfect for your write.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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The grandmother is in hospice care and has Alzheimer's .It's her birthday but she forgot how to blow the candles. You blew the candles and made a wish. Did you wish she died? Very good flash fiction. The picture used is perfect for your write.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Hi Maggie. I will let you draw your own conclusions about what the Speaker wished for. But thanks so much for sharing "Birthday Wishes." Rod
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You are welcome , Rod. My answer is that he wished for her to die .Meggie :))
Comment from mvbrooks
60 words is brief and quick, yet you were able to convey emotion (sadness, pride for the grandmother, helplessness).
The mixture of her age and the location -- being a hospice--conveyed much in a few words.
Your final words are almost haunting "weeping, I make a wish and blow."
strong story.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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60 words is brief and quick, yet you were able to convey emotion (sadness, pride for the grandmother, helplessness).
The mixture of her age and the location -- being a hospice--conveyed much in a few words.
Your final words are almost haunting "weeping, I make a wish and blow."
strong story.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I truly appreciate your sharing "Birthday Wishes," mvbrooks, and your understanding comments. Rod
Comment from Debbie Noland
A poignant write for the flash fiction contest. I like the way you imply at the end what the wish is. Your first paragraph sets the scene well and your few well chosen words provide good description and dialogue. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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A poignant write for the flash fiction contest. I like the way you imply at the end what the wish is. Your first paragraph sets the scene well and your few well chosen words provide good description and dialogue. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Hi Debbie. I am so pleased you found "Birthday Wishes" poignant. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from justjo66
Very well written. Your very short story had everything in it to tell me about a life lived and forgotten. So sad. The picture reminded me of my own grandmother, now, gone. I miss her. Your story touched my emotions.
Jo
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Very well written. Your very short story had everything in it to tell me about a life lived and forgotten. So sad. The picture reminded me of my own grandmother, now, gone. I miss her. Your story touched my emotions.
Jo
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Hi, Jo. I am delighted you enjoyed "Birthday Wishes" and could relate to it so easily. Thanks so much for sharing and your generous gift of stars. Rod