At Day's End
contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
This is such a comfy-cozy poem! I just want to cuddle up with it (LOL)
Beautifully said Deb, and sooooooo you!
You definitely created that "bedtime" imagery you were aiming for! :-)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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This is such a comfy-cozy poem! I just want to cuddle up with it (LOL)
Beautifully said Deb, and sooooooo you!
You definitely created that "bedtime" imagery you were aiming for! :-)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Hi lorraine :) Thank you for your lovely feedback. I appreciate it! Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from RichardFann
Unique poem,
great story,
captures the close relationships
inside our lives.
The poem takes what is inside
to share
with those remote
clicking on a keyboard.
And I too reflect on what's most important to me.
Yes, another fab poem.
Well done.
Am doing the FutureLearn "Start Writing Fiction" course.
Till end June.
That's why have not been on Fanstory. Recently.
Life is fun when you write.
That's me.
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Unique poem,
great story,
captures the close relationships
inside our lives.
The poem takes what is inside
to share
with those remote
clicking on a keyboard.
And I too reflect on what's most important to me.
Yes, another fab poem.
Well done.
Am doing the FutureLearn "Start Writing Fiction" course.
Till end June.
That's why have not been on Fanstory. Recently.
Life is fun when you write.
That's me.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 14-May-2015
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Hi Richard :) Good to know what you're up to and glad you're enjoying it!
I've not been on here much recently either - got lots on.... life and all that!
Thank you for your great comments as always, Debra x
Comment from TPAC
Beautiful thought and wonderful warm heart felt poem, super delightful. Enhancing of spots could elevate work potential
EX:
I pretend to mind but secretly cherish each cuddle each kiss
How's this
I cherish each cuddle each kiss pretending to mind secretly
Thanking your for this kind wonderful expression
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Beautiful thought and wonderful warm heart felt poem, super delightful. Enhancing of spots could elevate work potential
EX:
I pretend to mind but secretly cherish each cuddle each kiss
How's this
I cherish each cuddle each kiss pretending to mind secretly
Thanking your for this kind wonderful expression
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind feedback and suggestion :) kind regards...
Comment from bayforesthimankush
It is a busy day tending the house and children; At the crazy day's end one awaits the the time to go to bed, embrace each other and sleep. Crazy day ends in love and sleep.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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It is a busy day tending the house and children; At the crazy day's end one awaits the the time to go to bed, embrace each other and sleep. Crazy day ends in love and sleep.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you :) Kindest regards...
Comment from emkoutny
I enjoyed this poem. It is hard as a mother to find time for yourself. It is easy to lose who you are in motherhood. I liked the image of the "Soap scented children." Well done.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I enjoyed this poem. It is hard as a mother to find time for yourself. It is easy to lose who you are in motherhood. I liked the image of the "Soap scented children." Well done.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind feedback...:)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Children will enjoy this well written poem. Story line easy to follow. Action flows smoothly. Picture helps illustrate the poem well. Write on.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Children will enjoy this well written poem. Story line easy to follow. Action flows smoothly. Picture helps illustrate the poem well. Write on.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you :)
Comment from valerieellis
Excellent! I really enjoyed the authenticity in your words and the way you strategically spaced the lines (as if the day was, indeed, winding down). I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Excellent! I really enjoyed the authenticity in your words and the way you strategically spaced the lines (as if the day was, indeed, winding down). I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Thank you, Valerie, for your kind and encouraging feedback :) warmest regards...
Comment from flylikeaneagle
I like your free verse of being a wife and a mom on Mother's Day and everyday. I can relate. My daughters loved the soapy bubbles in the whirlpool tub and swimming lessons taught by me. My children are getting older. They still like foot rubs with lotions. We spend time together. I had birth pains when they learned how to drive my Cadillac! Monica graduated yesterday from the University of Minnesota. Annie is still at home. Treasure your mom times. Have a blessed Mother's day! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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I like your free verse of being a wife and a mom on Mother's Day and everyday. I can relate. My daughters loved the soapy bubbles in the whirlpool tub and swimming lessons taught by me. My children are getting older. They still like foot rubs with lotions. We spend time together. I had birth pains when they learned how to drive my Cadillac! Monica graduated yesterday from the University of Minnesota. Annie is still at home. Treasure your mom times. Have a blessed Mother's day! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Thank you for your great feedback, I appreciate it! Many congratulations to your daughter on her graduation... You must be a very proud Momma :) kindest regards...
Comment from Praise000
You have managed to give the reader
a piece of reality talk. Where children are involved
it can be crazy -good or crazy-trouble.
"...in the hours between crazy and sleep
I am me..."
All the best in the contest. Praise000
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reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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You have managed to give the reader
a piece of reality talk. Where children are involved
it can be crazy -good or crazy-trouble.
"...in the hours between crazy and sleep
I am me..."
All the best in the contest. Praise000
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Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Thank you :)