If There Was A Heaven
The phone call I would make29 total reviews
Comment from elpsog
My good friend it can be said that outside I am leather tough but inside my Irish sentimentality rules and there welled up tears for this beautiful love story. There is a heaven and there you love will live joyously forever.
God bless you,
Ray
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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My good friend it can be said that outside I am leather tough but inside my Irish sentimentality rules and there welled up tears for this beautiful love story. There is a heaven and there you love will live joyously forever.
God bless you,
Ray
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you so very much Ray for the emerald 6 ..They say the same about me and my German side as well lol All the characters are real and all have passed on..I must admit a tear did fall when I wrote this..Glad I had keyboard for if it was written by hand in ink I am sure many words would have been blotted out
Thanks again my friend
tk
Comment from krys123
TK;
+ A very well composed script written in a poetic format.
+ Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts in one stanza in line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Suggestions: would be more appropriate if one could write it up as a script format.
+ Poetic assessment and summary: What a very enjoyable read and very uplifting, inspirational and enlightening. The phone call to heaven seem to be very real and in some ways heartbreaking.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always. TK.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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TK;
+ A very well composed script written in a poetic format.
+ Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts in one stanza in line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Suggestions: would be more appropriate if one could write it up as a script format.
+ Poetic assessment and summary: What a very enjoyable read and very uplifting, inspirational and enlightening. The phone call to heaven seem to be very real and in some ways heartbreaking.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always. TK.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you Alex..You are correct as to the script format..But being such a plebeian at script writing I think I would fail miserably and lose some of the emotion of the write..But I think I might give it a try and learn something Using this as the basis Just for myself anyway Thank again for your always encouraging reviews
Aloha and Mahalo from the Big Island of Hawaii
tk
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TK; Your script in poetic form was a very touching writing. You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
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You are dearly and sincerely welcome, TK.
Alex
Comment from stephybs
Ahh! What can I say this made me cry. Such a wonderful thing to write and feel, you show great depth of deep feelings it's just beautiful. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Ahh! What can I say this made me cry. Such a wonderful thing to write and feel, you show great depth of deep feelings it's just beautiful. Beautiful!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Wow thank you again Lady Stephanie!! I am very glad that you listened into my phone call..To be honest even I had a tear or two when I re-read it..Memories have a way of doing that now and then don't they.
another ALOHA and BIG MAHALO (Thank you in Hawaiian)
tk
Comment from Bill Schott
Can't even imagine it. Blubbering at the concept of such an amazing call. If I wrote this I'd be trembling and shooting tears out of my head. Semper Fi, ATK.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Can't even imagine it. Blubbering at the concept of such an amazing call. If I wrote this I'd be trembling and shooting tears out of my head. Semper Fi, ATK.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much my friend for awarding me the green cross I do appreciate it..Yea this was a bit of a tear jerker wasn't it..Not my usual spinning reels of rhyme...But once in a while we have to take a detour from our comfort zone..That was what this one was...
tk
Comment from Treischel
I always knew you had a soft heart. This one really pulls at the heart strings. I sure wish the one call idea were true. Glad you included the cat and dog in Heaven. Now i have to wipe a tear.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I always knew you had a soft heart. This one really pulls at the heart strings. I sure wish the one call idea were true. Glad you included the cat and dog in Heaven. Now i have to wipe a tear.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you much Mr T Have to include ones pets.If there is a heaven we need to have all the things around us that we loved here on earth..It would be a shame if they had their own place their I think they would get lonely Think?
Thanks again for listening in on my phone call !!!!
tk
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha ATK,
You are right it does get the emotions going. One thing sure, there is a heaven. Thank you for sharing your story.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Aloha ATK,
You are right it does get the emotions going. One thing sure, there is a heaven. Thank you for sharing your story.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so very much Lady G for the kind review and the lovely greenie you have awarded me HUGS
TK
Comment from fimarie78
Thank you for sharing this with us. I was extremely touched by it.
think that if we are a believer, God can pass on messages for us and help us make that 'phone call'. It sounds as though you were a very happy family and I am so sorry for your loss.
Don't worry about the grammar. I thought it made for nice enjambment and the emotion behind it surpassed the words anyway.
best wishes Fiona
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I was extremely touched by it.
think that if we are a believer, God can pass on messages for us and help us make that 'phone call'. It sounds as though you were a very happy family and I am so sorry for your loss.
Don't worry about the grammar. I thought it made for nice enjambment and the emotion behind it surpassed the words anyway.
best wishes Fiona
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much Fiona I am more of rhyming minstrel than I am a writer of structure... But every once in a while I journey to the unknown and try my luck with something different..This one seemed to be liked by many...And you are right.. I think the emotion behind it suppressed any of the mistakes LUCKY ME LOL
TK
Comment from lakeport
If there was a heaven, indeed that would be wonderful if one could make a phone call to a loved one in heaven, That's a very heartfelt and loving phone call to your son, Thanks for sharing it. God bless you. Lakeport,
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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If there was a heaven, indeed that would be wonderful if one could make a phone call to a loved one in heaven, That's a very heartfelt and loving phone call to your son, Thanks for sharing it. God bless you. Lakeport,
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the great green cross my friend Many a time I thought about if there was a heaven could we communicate somehow..Lot of money made by those who say they can..
tk
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you are very welcome.lakeport.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A very interesting subject choice and format.
The loss of loved ones brings that constant desire to renew communication-to say what you couldn't or didn't say and to let them know you care.
A poignant read and it certainly did bring emotions to the fore.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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A very interesting subject choice and format.
The loss of loved ones brings that constant desire to renew communication-to say what you couldn't or didn't say and to let them know you care.
A poignant read and it certainly did bring emotions to the fore.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much Think we all would like to say things to those who have passed that we did not say before..Both good and bad..I know I have!!!
tk
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day TK. Mate, you have done it to me again, and agin I forgot to ask Delia to bring the tissues into my office. I loved it Sir, what can I say but wow! You are truly a star and a bright one at that. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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G'day TK. Mate, you have done it to me again, and agin I forgot to ask Delia to bring the tissues into my office. I loved it Sir, what can I say but wow! You are truly a star and a bright one at that. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much Sir Fez..But I am just a planet that circles you sir. You are the star both in rhythm,rhyme and story my friend
But I am very glad it moved you..If that be the case Mission Accomplished !!
tk