Peaceful River
A man pours out his grief and regret into a river.12 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is full of emotion and a struggle to deal with it. I like the idea of the river taking the teardrops to the sea or island far away. Good job with the rhyme. The picture is so fitting. No changes needed. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Your poem is full of emotion and a struggle to deal with it. I like the idea of the river taking the teardrops to the sea or island far away. Good job with the rhyme. The picture is so fitting. No changes needed. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much for your wonderful review! You uplift me!
Comment from adewpearl
excellent alliteration in your emotional opening words
solid rhyming in aabbccded format
good consonance of P sounds in pearly depths
lovely descriptive detail
good alliteration in trade these teardrops
soulful expression of emotion throughout
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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excellent alliteration in your emotional opening words
solid rhyming in aabbccded format
good consonance of P sounds in pearly depths
lovely descriptive detail
good alliteration in trade these teardrops
soulful expression of emotion throughout
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Very detailed and wonderful review! Thank you.
Comment from acerisestory
Oh my, this is a lovely poem, mystery poet!
Your fine use of imagery through your well chosen words evokes a strong feeling of loneliness and heartbreak. Your alliteration throughout adds to the great flow of your poem.
This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! alana
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Oh my, this is a lovely poem, mystery poet!
Your fine use of imagery through your well chosen words evokes a strong feeling of loneliness and heartbreak. Your alliteration throughout adds to the great flow of your poem.
This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! alana
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much. You are very encouraging! I'm so very glad you liked it.
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You are welcome!
Comment from pennedup
Very well written, can feel all those emotions in your plea for peace once again...good rhyme and rhythm throughout as well.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Very well written, can feel all those emotions in your plea for peace once again...good rhyme and rhythm throughout as well.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much! How delightful!
Comment from Louise Michelle
Now this is what I call an original angle!
I love how you personify the river, asking it to carry away your sorrowful tears. Very nicely written. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Now this is what I call an original angle!
I love how you personify the river, asking it to carry away your sorrowful tears. Very nicely written. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank for the sweet review!
Comment from mauial
Great emotional poem from the first line throughout. I especially liked this:
I'll gladly trade these teardrops and all my tomorrows, too,
For just one hour of yesterday and the happiness I knew,
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Great emotional poem from the first line throughout. I especially liked this:
I'll gladly trade these teardrops and all my tomorrows, too,
For just one hour of yesterday and the happiness I knew,
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for your warm review and for the 6 gold stars! The poem was based on my father's sorrow after he left my mother and our family on a wild whim and then spent the rest of his life lamenting the loss he caused.
Comment from fimarie78
A beautiful poem with a well chosen image. I liked the idea that time does heal and the way you said this would happen as you travel down memory lane was very well written. There were so many things I lived about it (I hope you don't mind if I add to my book case). I liked the teardrops falling into the river and lines 5 and 6 are very touching. Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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A beautiful poem with a well chosen image. I liked the idea that time does heal and the way you said this would happen as you travel down memory lane was very well written. There were so many things I lived about it (I hope you don't mind if I add to my book case). I liked the teardrops falling into the river and lines 5 and 6 are very touching. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and for the six stars. I would be honored for you to put it in your book case. You have encouraged and delighted me!
Comment from MelB
Nice artwork. This oozes with grief and regret. Nice rhyme and flow throughout. A nice contest entry.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Nice artwork. This oozes with grief and regret. Nice rhyme and flow throughout. A nice contest entry.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the awesome review!
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Your welcome:)
Comment from waterartist707
I truely felt you wanted to forget about your broken heart even if only for a minute but at the same time go back if you could. Very beautifully done.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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I truely felt you wanted to forget about your broken heart even if only for a minute but at the same time go back if you could. Very beautifully done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the insightful review. Deep emotions are aptly expressed in poetry!
Comment from RYME4U
The sadness in this poem is well expressed. The rhymes are well done and the rhythm flows smoothly as the sea inj your poem. This is well done!
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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The sadness in this poem is well expressed. The rhymes are well done and the rhythm flows smoothly as the sea inj your poem. This is well done!
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. It was poetry in and of itself!