Totally scared.
A free style poem.13 total reviews
Comment from fimarie78
Very well written indeed. I thought I was the only one who was afraid at the sound of loud aircraft overhead. The likening of fear inside due to disease and fear in the world was effective. I pray for your good health and peace. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Very well written indeed. I thought I was the only one who was afraid at the sound of loud aircraft overhead. The likening of fear inside due to disease and fear in the world was effective. I pray for your good health and peace. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much for your kind review, Ine Have a great weekend.
Comment from RYME4U
This is a very serious subject. You have handled it well. The descriptions present clear images. The words of the free verse are nicely done. Good job!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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This is a very serious subject. You have handled it well. The descriptions present clear images. The words of the free verse are nicely done. Good job!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much for your kind review, Ine Have a great weekend.
Comment from scd41
With so much of senseless violence and deaths taking place all over the world, your fear is justified. You have used the three words fear, riot and heart in your poem at proper places that would make readers 'totally scared. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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With so much of senseless violence and deaths taking place all over the world, your fear is justified. You have used the three words fear, riot and heart in your poem at proper places that would make readers 'totally scared. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week. Thanks for your kind wishes.
Comment from michaelcahill
Hi. This is a really strong entry. You have two of the words perfectly used here in your well written piece. You have one word that you added an "s" to. I'm pointing it out in case the committee is being picky with this contest.
But now there are wars
and riots all over the world,
I do worry, especially for those
riots should be riot.
Other than that, great job. mikey
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Hi. This is a really strong entry. You have two of the words perfectly used here in your well written piece. You have one word that you added an "s" to. I'm pointing it out in case the committee is being picky with this contest.
But now there are wars
and riots all over the world,
I do worry, especially for those
riots should be riot.
Other than that, great job. mikey
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thanks Michael, Ine
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line
you convey the painful fear of living with cancer effectively
your line about planes flying overhead reminds me of the time of the Cuban missile crisis when I was a kid and actually did worry every time a plane flew over
Brooke
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line
you convey the painful fear of living with cancer effectively
your line about planes flying overhead reminds me of the time of the Cuban missile crisis when I was a kid and actually did worry every time a plane flew over
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You have used the three words well for this contest.
We have much to fear in today's world. Good luck in the contest,
Sandra. xsx
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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You have used the three words well for this contest.
We have much to fear in today's world. Good luck in the contest,
Sandra. xsx
Comment Written 10-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. And thanks for best wishes.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I am sure that you are not alone in feeling these fears. As it is with terrorism, we cannot let these fears control us otherwise they will have won. A well written piece, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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I am sure that you are not alone in feeling these fears. As it is with terrorism, we cannot let these fears control us otherwise they will have won. A well written piece, I couldn't find any faults. Good luck in the contest...Jacob
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Thanks for best wishes.
Comment from cbat
Your simple writing brings sympathy for your suffering and agreement of the worries this world brings.
I hope you keep writing. For me it helps chase away the pain and long hours of the day.
May you have many more good days!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Your simple writing brings sympathy for your suffering and agreement of the worries this world brings.
I hope you keep writing. For me it helps chase away the pain and long hours of the day.
May you have many more good days!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week
Comment from RichardFann
Thanks for this, a great poem.
I particularly liked the honesty and the way of describing your views and fears.
Also liked the ending. Dark, and mysterious, shadowy even, as we are allowed to wonder if your thoughts are really so bleak.
It flowed beautifully, and the structure made sense.
My emotions were touched because my wife is an up-to-now cancer survivor and has had moments of self-doubt. She still feels its presence in the shadows.
The strong images were well described, especially: heart, victims, riots and children.
Also the plane, that has many connotations for people, some tragic.
The cost of travel?
The dangers in life are maybe the costs of living.
Profound ideas are contained in this great poem.
To conclude: poignant.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for this, a great poem.
I particularly liked the honesty and the way of describing your views and fears.
Also liked the ending. Dark, and mysterious, shadowy even, as we are allowed to wonder if your thoughts are really so bleak.
It flowed beautifully, and the structure made sense.
My emotions were touched because my wife is an up-to-now cancer survivor and has had moments of self-doubt. She still feels its presence in the shadows.
The strong images were well described, especially: heart, victims, riots and children.
Also the plane, that has many connotations for people, some tragic.
The cost of travel?
The dangers in life are maybe the costs of living.
Profound ideas are contained in this great poem.
To conclude: poignant.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Thanks for your compliments and best wishes for your wife.
Comment from D. Alan Dunn
Ok, this poem hits home. As a cancer survivor, I feel it and have felt it, the fear in which she speaks. Not just the fear of the disease but watching our country going to hell in a handcart. Well-written, my fellow Texan!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Ok, this poem hits home. As a cancer survivor, I feel it and have felt it, the fear in which she speaks. Not just the fear of the disease but watching our country going to hell in a handcart. Well-written, my fellow Texan!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. You got it.