To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Tickling the Sky"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from nordicgirl
Maybe two or three others on site write free verse of this quality. There is s diffetence between blank verse and free verse that escapes people here. Quatrains that don't rhyme border on prose and are poetry in name only. This is poetic free verse.
Maybe two or three others on site write free verse of this quality. There is s diffetence between blank verse and free verse that escapes people here. Quatrains that don't rhyme border on prose and are poetry in name only. This is poetic free verse.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from Capricorn30
A lovely, well-crafted poem!
Nice visuals complement the stunning artwork;
"blue ripples":
"red flashes";
To be able to take flight in so colorful a fashion as your metaphoric journey of love soars as that of the feather's grace.
Excellent!
The soft purple font also captured my eye--very pretty!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
A lovely, well-crafted poem!
Nice visuals complement the stunning artwork;
"blue ripples":
"red flashes";
To be able to take flight in so colorful a fashion as your metaphoric journey of love soars as that of the feather's grace.
Excellent!
The soft purple font also captured my eye--very pretty!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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I'm so pleased with the encouraging words. You pointed out everything that I hoped would be noticed. Thank you kindly. :)
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You're welcome, anon.
I'm elated that I was able to notice all you were conveying!
~cap30/Margaret~
Comment from RYME4U
I like this. It is well written free verse and attractively presented.I like the idea that Love is what makes the 'bird' fly.Your alliterations and metaphors are very well done. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
I like this. It is well written free verse and attractively presented.I like the idea that Love is what makes the 'bird' fly.Your alliterations and metaphors are very well done. Great job!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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Thank you. I appreciate the compliments. So pleased you enjoyed! :)
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the black and pink color scheme.Black like night and fear of being alone never feeling the flight of love and pick the color color of love.
I like the metaphor of the birds flight as love and the feather floating as the loss of the dream because if a bird loses its feathers it can no longer fly,
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
I like the black and pink color scheme.Black like night and fear of being alone never feeling the flight of love and pick the color color of love.
I like the metaphor of the birds flight as love and the feather floating as the loss of the dream because if a bird loses its feathers it can no longer fly,
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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You really have what I was going for on the money. It's always great to hear that someone gets what your going for. Thank you kindly.
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You're welcome. I am glad I got your points. Sometimes people use metaphors to mean something totally different than what I read into them.
dragonpoet
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Very creative. Looks like the words are floating like a zeppelin inside a cloud. Killer image. I hope you can tickle the voters. Good imagination on the words too. This is definitely a contender. Count your doubloon. wackydo, do loco
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
Very creative. Looks like the words are floating like a zeppelin inside a cloud. Killer image. I hope you can tickle the voters. Good imagination on the words too. This is definitely a contender. Count your doubloon. wackydo, do loco
Comment Written 27-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2014
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That's a great line, "words floating like a zeppelin inside a cloud"! Thank you very much. We'll see what the vast intellect of the voters decide. :}
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How did your turkey come out -- chef Mikey?
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It's still cooking. Start early and cook it low and slow. OOOOHHHH Yeah!!!! Ham too. How bout you. Family over?
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a wonderful free verse poem. It has some great alliteration and I love the play on words with grey doesn't matter:) Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
This is a wonderful free verse poem. It has some great alliteration and I love the play on words with grey doesn't matter:) Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
Comment from skye
This is beautiful, both in content and in form.
You captured the idea of love, used feathers and flight to emphasize it, and ended with a beautiful image of human love taking flight.
Excellent.
This is beautiful, both in content and in form.
You captured the idea of love, used feathers and flight to emphasize it, and ended with a beautiful image of human love taking flight.
Excellent.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014
Comment from djsaxon
Great pic, great shape to the write. Evocative imagery and a positive resolution. Strong use of alliteration. 'plumet', unless it is an intentional play on'plume', should read 'plummet' Cheers - DJ
Great pic, great shape to the write. Evocative imagery and a positive resolution. Strong use of alliteration. 'plumet', unless it is an intentional play on'plume', should read 'plummet' Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 26-Nov-2014