Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"Kaleidoscope turns
color burst on western sky
brilliant reds and gold
sets the tops of autumn trees
divinely ablaze with fire"
this is a fine piece of poetic art! i love the imagery, it is quite breath-taking as a tanka should imagine! the poem flows effortlessly and true to form.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014

And thank you rebekka for this fine review and such encouraging remarks. So glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from rjpurdy

Excellent

What an incredible picture that plays perfectly with your carefully chosen words. Your tanka tells a complete story in so few words. A lovely piece of work. rj

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2014

Thank you rj for this great review and such generous stars. I am delighted you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Shirley B

Excellent

This is a very nice poem. You have used very nice imagery. The art work you chose was a great choice too. Best of luck to you in the contest. Thank you for sharing, Shirley

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014

Thanks Shirley for this encouraging review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

gorgeous presentation of your poem
which is in good syllable count for the tanka
the third line functions effectively as a pivot line
good alliterative pairing of brilliant and burst
lovely descriptive detail with a wonderfully celebratory, exuberant, passionate tone
Brooke

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014

Thanks Brooke as always, for reading and commenting. :-) Carolyn

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

kaleidoscope turns, indeed that's a beautiful expressed Tanka poem,Good luck at the contest.I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Hugs!lakeport.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2014

Thanks E, I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews. :-) Carolyn

reply by lakeport on 22-Oct-2014

your welcome,Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I love kaleidoscopes. Have loved them from early childhood. I have a beautiful kaleidoscope made with stain.d glass and it is so lovely and relaxing to use. Sunsets and sunrises are kaleidoscopes. We need to enjoy them and relax in His beauty. Blessings, Pat

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thank you Pat for your insightful comments. I have also always loved kaleidoscopes. So glad you enjoyed the Tanka. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi Caroline
Sunset is always entrancing, so beautiful that involuntarily your mine begins to think of expressing itself. So i understand your keenness to set this on paper.. Well Done.
How are you and your family.? Hope you are doing fine.
I am back. I just posted a writing. Hope you like it. I have been very lazy those last few weeks. God bless.
Benny

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi dear Benny and welcome,
I'm so glad you liked this Tanka. You are so right, sunsets inspire. Thanks for your comments.
We are all doing well, I hope you are the same.
Take care,
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

Hi, Carolyn.
What a perfect poem capturing the brilliance of the setting sun. Your visuals really shine in this post, my favourite line, "sets the tops of autumn trees divinely ablaze with fire." Our leaves in Ontario are the most vivid colours right now, such a beautiful sight.
Bye
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

I love fall, now I am usually ready for spring after one winter snow. (I don't always get my way. LOL) Thank you for the wonderful comments and generous stars. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

So beautiful...reminds me of the other evening..I looked out my kitchen window, and the sugar maple down the road had been caught in the sunset, the top was blazing neon orange...I didn't know such beauty in a tree was possible...your poem describes it perfectly!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Thanks JO for your wonderful comments and for sharing the visual of your own sugar maple. This time of the year is so awesome.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Well done. Your pivot line works fine for the start and the end of the poem. Too bad you didn't have a camera to catch the real thing. Was it as breathtaking as this photo?

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014

Yes it was, so glad you enjoyed this one Shari, thanks for the affirming comments. :-) Carolyn