Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

History as a subject for study is fascinating and am happy it is recorded for posterity and future generations to enjoy. Well chosen words to convey your message and good complimentary picture. Good luck in the contest. Faye

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

Thanks, Faye. Glad you liked the word choices, artwork, and message. Appreciate your thoughts ... ;o) Art

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

True, not everything we read about in our history books is the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth. A lot of stories were fabricated around General Custer's fateful last stand, for instance, to anger more white folks and cause them to hate American Indians.

That's just one example, but there are literally hundreds of others.

Nicely written septolet, Poet 'X'. Best of luck you you in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

Yep - makes us wonder about what to believe about all that history handed down to us. With regards to ancient history, stories retold a thousand times, we must digest all of it with a several grains of salt. And, imagination makes history much more fun. What fun we can have leaving future generations whales of tales. Thanks for your thoughts on this septolet. Cheers ...;o)

reply by Dean Kuch on 29-Jul-2014

It was my pleasure. :}

Comment from Smoothiecool

Excellent

good luck in the contest

your few chosen words portray the message well

the rise and fall of history guiled be man

good enjambment in verse to allow flow

cheers..Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your comments.
Cheers ... ;)

reply by Smoothiecool on 29-Jul-2014

most welcome..SC

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

Great artwork to compliment your nicely constructed poem. It sends a get message of reality.

Well done. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks, Jax - Glad you liked the message in this septolet, and the artwork. Appreciate your comments ... ;)

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

A figurative look into the minds that keep connected with the cosmos and finds pleasure in finding out the unknown.
Nice flow with accurate number of words.
Charlene

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks for your thoughts and impressions from this septolet.
Appreciate it ... ;)

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This sepotolet is the first I've reviewed with a philosophical perspective. It paints a picture of time, not a moment in time, but a 'forever' kind of time. Sadly man's imaginations are not always human, just, or concerned about the planet.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks. Appreciate your comments on this philosophical septolet. Yes, a 'forever' kind of time perhaps outside the human mind. We are the tiniest blip in the vast eons of time, yet we have wild imaginations. Present, past and future all wrapped up in history. It's interesting to think about such things ... ;)

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hi, You adhered to all the contest rules apart from that your poem is 6 lines instead of 7. That is the reason I deducted a star. Otherwise, a well executed contest entry. Strong message and great presentation. Kindest regards, Debra :)

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks! Can't believe I overlooked the 'seven-line' requirement. I deserve more than one star deducted. I think I was concentrating too hard on creating two stanzas with 7 words in each stanza. Anyway, fixed the issue, and will do better should I write another septolet - Glad you liked the message and presentation. Appreciate your review...;)

reply by Debra White on 29-Jul-2014

You're very welcome :) I added a star! x

Comment from mauial

Excellent

Your poem has six lines instead of the required seven. A simple fix below.

Civilizations rise
and fall
recorded
for posterity

History turns pages
gilded with man's
imagination

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks. Yep, I goofed up on the 7-line requirement. I changed the second stanza so it now has 4 lines. Appreciate you pointing out my error. I'll do better on the next septolet, should I write one. ... ;P

Comment from rrabinow

Good

I enjoyed reading your poem. The prompt asked for the lines to be in pairs, and some lines only have one word, and others have more than two. Great use if description. I like the picture you used. Best of luck.

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this poem and the artwork. Actually, the prompt asks for a 7-line poem consisting of only 14 words, broken into two parts - in this septolet, I broke the poem to have 7 words in each stanza.
Appreciate your comments ... ;)

reply by rrabinow on 28-Jul-2014

You are welcome. I thought that the prompt wanted each line is pairs.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a wonderful septolet poem for the writing prompt. Great use of your 14 words - they say so much. Good luck.
teresa

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014

thanks, teresa - glad you liked this septolet - appreciate your comments- cheers ... ;)