To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Seasons Pass, But One I Grasp"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from amanda98653
Has anyone ever told you stuff like "I wish I could write like you" ?
I loved your poem.
My favorite verses:
"It's Summer now and how perfection pleases
every sense the smells and sights the life in flight
the trees reach heights all dressed in garish greens
with carpets, rioting colors anarchy reigns
and malarkey seems a sane response
even as the rain does not feel cold
the world does not feel wet"
The phrase "perfection pleases" is just amazing. wow.
My interpretation: All the greenery and faith keep "the world" alive. Even when the weather suggests dullness the negativity is not contagious--sunshine is right around the corner.
A fantastic poem, Mikey.
Hope you win.
hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Has anyone ever told you stuff like "I wish I could write like you" ?
I loved your poem.
My favorite verses:
"It's Summer now and how perfection pleases
every sense the smells and sights the life in flight
the trees reach heights all dressed in garish greens
with carpets, rioting colors anarchy reigns
and malarkey seems a sane response
even as the rain does not feel cold
the world does not feel wet"
The phrase "perfection pleases" is just amazing. wow.
My interpretation: All the greenery and faith keep "the world" alive. Even when the weather suggests dullness the negativity is not contagious--sunshine is right around the corner.
A fantastic poem, Mikey.
Hope you win.
hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Gee. Do you think it has a chance. I came in third a couple times in site contests. I would love to get any mention in a free verse one. I do like this one myself. You picked my favorites to review. I'm so delighted that you liked this one. I loved that paragraph too and felt like a poet when I finished it! I read it out loud with my Orson Welles voice. Hahaha. Of course, you did miss my 5-7-5 Zombie poem. It's award winning. Check out the contests. I just tied with Dean Kuch in a battle to the death. Two warriors battling to a draw. The whole site was hushed!! mikey
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Yes! It has a chance!!! Third place is really, really good. I came in third for the last free verse contest. That was almost a year ago.
I will check out your zombie poem!!!!! It's so awesome that you tied with Dean! Dean is really good with the horror stuff. I have written a horror story once..for English class. It's really cheesy. I think I should rewrite it and post it on Fanstory during Halloween or something.
hugs
Amanda
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, it is good to be back on a more regular basis and to be greeted by this finely written Free Verse Poetry Contest entry. It is creative and original in every respect. I enjoyed the appeal to the senses. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Mikey, it is good to be back on a more regular basis and to be greeted by this finely written Free Verse Poetry Contest entry. It is creative and original in every respect. I enjoyed the appeal to the senses. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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Hello my friend. I'm on my phone. Internet down and falling behind more than normal. But, had to jump forward to say thank you and hello. Hope things are well. I'll try to get to some of your work soon. I could use some uplifting!! Mikey
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Just think of any uplifting you feel as something you do for me. Paying it forward, my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from ravenblack
This is unlike much of your free Verse- a melding of your lyrical prose and your poetic verve. Such smooth flow (sorry, no other way to describe it) and your rhymes perfectly placed (not intrusive but true to your character's voice), your haiku, breath invading the air, the perfect ending. Your breath will keep the seasons alive. Come to think of it, the heritage of this poem is part haibun. Excellent work.
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This is unlike much of your free Verse- a melding of your lyrical prose and your poetic verve. Such smooth flow (sorry, no other way to describe it) and your rhymes perfectly placed (not intrusive but true to your character's voice), your haiku, breath invading the air, the perfect ending. Your breath will keep the seasons alive. Come to think of it, the heritage of this poem is part haibun. Excellent work.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from Andrewajgblue
A magical poem, whilst I was reading I felt it had a beat of it's own, I found it really soothing and quite mystical, I really loved everything about it, your internal rhyme and your poetic wording were very special, there was some great alliteration also, well done , worthy of a six,and of winning the competition it certainly has my vote, good luck,
Andrew
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A magical poem, whilst I was reading I felt it had a beat of it's own, I found it really soothing and quite mystical, I really loved everything about it, your internal rhyme and your poetic wording were very special, there was some great alliteration also, well done , worthy of a six,and of winning the competition it certainly has my vote, good luck,
Andrew
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I love the style you use in so mamny of your poems...this is wonderful as you go through the changes of the seasons...Me loving Winter...it wins...sooo love your poem...very well written you...and a great picture...luff Linda xxoo love
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HI Michael, I love the style you use in so mamny of your poems...this is wonderful as you go through the changes of the seasons...Me loving Winter...it wins...sooo love your poem...very well written you...and a great picture...luff Linda xxoo love
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this poetry contest entry. It is a strong poem and you use the spacing of your words to your full advantage. Great job and good luck.
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I enjoyed reading this poetry contest entry. It is a strong poem and you use the spacing of your words to your full advantage. Great job and good luck.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A well done muse with deep poetic phrases, feelings and a well creative structure. Well chosen words of the theme. Your concluding stanza is enticing with imagery of personification.
ola thomas
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A well done muse with deep poetic phrases, feelings and a well creative structure. Well chosen words of the theme. Your concluding stanza is enticing with imagery of personification.
ola thomas
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
as I speak
I see my breath invade the air
I am alive!.........yes we are alive....and sometimes more a
I've when the winds howl and power is cut and deprivation reminds us that we feel....well done
God bless
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as I speak
I see my breath invade the air
I am alive!.........yes we are alive....and sometimes more a
I've when the winds howl and power is cut and deprivation reminds us that we feel....well done
God bless
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent free verse poem that takes us through the seasons until the love makes a few cycle. I liked the stanza about autumn the best., I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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this is an excellent free verse poem that takes us through the seasons until the love makes a few cycle. I liked the stanza about autumn the best., I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014
Comment from Eric1
What a wonderfully descriptive and beautiful piece of free verse Micheal, this gripped me from the start, I particularly liked the Autumn and Winter verses, and your last three lines were inspirational! they sum up the whole poem, I wish I had a six to give my friend.
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What a wonderfully descriptive and beautiful piece of free verse Micheal, this gripped me from the start, I particularly liked the Autumn and Winter verses, and your last three lines were inspirational! they sum up the whole poem, I wish I had a six to give my friend.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2014