Political Correctness?
Short Story-100 Word Dash-Contest Entry21 total reviews
Comment from Saucey
Well I say I see now, surgeries are remarkable these days. Political correct story is right LOL, Congratulations. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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Well I say I see now, surgeries are remarkable these days. Political correct story is right LOL, Congratulations. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2014
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It was fun to write. The picture is confusing I must say. I'm just glad I'm married and retired!
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LOL
Comment from Domino 2
Though I have the upmost tolerance for the gay community, I would take the greatest offence if conned into kissing a man on the lips.
Entertaining read with a clever ironic fun ending.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Though I have the upmost tolerance for the gay community, I would take the greatest offence if conned into kissing a man on the lips.
Entertaining read with a clever ironic fun ending.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Great response. That is more along the lines of what I was thinking when I wrote this. The whole scene of dating and trying to find a mate is a big deception anyway. I guarantee that I'm not the catch I'm trying to portray when I'm on the prowl. Hahaha. But, how to react when you think in a tolerant way, but, like you say, it is offensive to be deceived in that way. Glad you liked this and appreciate the candid response. mikey
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Thanks for your great reply, Mikey.
Comment from victor 66
congratulations, Michael! First, I'm always impressed with a person's experience, especially if it's similar to mine. I spent 3 days in a Marine brig once. No fun. Secondly, I had a friend on R and R In Bangkok, from Vietnam. He was sitting in a bar touching this lady's leg. He slowly moved his hand farther up and was terribly surprised that "this lady" was better equipped than he. Third, I did a 100 word story and went by FanStory's Advanced editor. I was disqualified because there was 98 words in the story. Oh yes, I counted and came up with 98 as well. I had the idea that FS knew something I did not. Wrong. Learning experience. At least you only used your fingers, I had to take off my shoes. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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congratulations, Michael! First, I'm always impressed with a person's experience, especially if it's similar to mine. I spent 3 days in a Marine brig once. No fun. Secondly, I had a friend on R and R In Bangkok, from Vietnam. He was sitting in a bar touching this lady's leg. He slowly moved his hand farther up and was terribly surprised that "this lady" was better equipped than he. Third, I did a 100 word story and went by FanStory's Advanced editor. I was disqualified because there was 98 words in the story. Oh yes, I counted and came up with 98 as well. I had the idea that FS knew something I did not. Wrong. Learning experience. At least you only used your fingers, I had to take off my shoes. Best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I had that same problem with the editor. Word said 100, advanced said 102 then I changed it then it said 98. I kept playing around till finally I just counted with my fingers and put it in my notes. I'm too lazy for shoes. I wear flippies so my toes are always handy. Ha! This isn't an uncommon situation. The modern world. I miss the old days! mikey
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Ah well, such is life. Keep up the good fight.
Comment from Muffins
A fast, fun, sassy piece with a wonderful intriguing ending. The blend of the smooth talk vibrating in the air like music, the quick assumption then realisation in 100 words makes this piece hard to stop reading over and over again.
P.S. Your write about Fan story advance word. I used it and I quickly figured out that spaces between paragraph's are counted as lines? Weird, isn't it?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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A fast, fun, sassy piece with a wonderful intriguing ending. The blend of the smooth talk vibrating in the air like music, the quick assumption then realisation in 100 words makes this piece hard to stop reading over and over again.
P.S. Your write about Fan story advance word. I used it and I quickly figured out that spaces between paragraph's are counted as lines? Weird, isn't it?
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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The editor here is strange, yes! I had 100 words on Word, 102 on advanced here. I changed to 100 and it said 98. I finally counted with my fingers and wrote it all out in my notes. Hahaha. Glad you liked this one. It was fun to write once the idea hit me. mikey
Comment from amada
Congratulations in winning the contest! Very good description of a hot and stylish chick until the truth is discovered. I think maybe this is a common experience these days...men fooling men!
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Congratulations in winning the contest! Very good description of a hot and stylish chick until the truth is discovered. I think maybe this is a common experience these days...men fooling men!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Mikey, congratulations on your contest win - you and Dean both wrote great entries :-)
Love the humor in this
great dialogue - love the alliteration and the rhyme in their speech LOL
and a fun reveal in your conclusion :-) Brooke
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Mikey, congratulations on your contest win - you and Dean both wrote great entries :-)
Love the humor in this
great dialogue - love the alliteration and the rhyme in their speech LOL
and a fun reveal in your conclusion :-) Brooke
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a good story for this type of abbreviated format. It reminds of a buddy of mine who kissed a he/she in the Philippines even though he knew. He said he was pretty. MR. KNOW-iT-ALL MOMENT: 'alliterative' means words that begin with the same consonant sound = round the rigid rock .
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This is a good story for this type of abbreviated format. It reminds of a buddy of mine who kissed a he/she in the Philippines even though he knew. He said he was pretty. MR. KNOW-iT-ALL MOMENT: 'alliterative' means words that begin with the same consonant sound = round the rigid rock .
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
Comment from royowen
I like this entry in 100 word dash contest! What an interesting twist in this well written story of an ironic encounter! Some of these boy/girls are prettier than some girls! I enjoyed this descriptively expressed narrative! Well done, good luck! Blessings, Roy.
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I like this entry in 100 word dash contest! What an interesting twist in this well written story of an ironic encounter! Some of these boy/girls are prettier than some girls! I enjoyed this descriptively expressed narrative! Well done, good luck! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from aanneee
So this raised a real chuckle in me for sure and I can see where it could be an enormous shock to the unsuspecting kisser. Still chuckling and I wish you luck - Dinah
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So this raised a real chuckle in me for sure and I can see where it could be an enormous shock to the unsuspecting kisser. Still chuckling and I wish you luck - Dinah
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
Comment from Delahay
I really enjoyed the conundrum the author faces in this situation. They want to be open minded but when confronted with being in such a position, what can they do? How quickly things can change when one is expecting one thing and it turns out to be something completely different.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I really enjoyed the conundrum the author faces in this situation. They want to be open minded but when confronted with being in such a position, what can they do? How quickly things can change when one is expecting one thing and it turns out to be something completely different.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Yep. You have it right on the money. Something that I'm sure happens. I imagine that it is something that happens to a degree between men and women too. You don't really know who you are meeting until you get to know them.