When's the Karaoke Start?
Humorous (meaning funny) 5-7-5 contest entry25 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
Simplicity is often the key to success. The very act of entering with no expectation of creative input, and winning, is the essence of irony.
Simplicity is often the key to success. The very act of entering with no expectation of creative input, and winning, is the essence of irony.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
Comment from Cajungirl
Perfect line and syllable count for a drunk. LOL
Very enjoyable poem and I love that picture. Best of luck in the contest.
Perfect line and syllable count for a drunk. LOL
Very enjoyable poem and I love that picture. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from RGstar
Good adaption to a powerful image.
I think this is the winner of the competition, then again, who am I to judge.
Good write.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Good adaption to a powerful image.
I think this is the winner of the competition, then again, who am I to judge.
Good write.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from a.w.brooks
It was ok I don't see the funny in the poem because one I don't think drinking is funny. Really that is all I can say
I got drunk and THEN-
I entered this DAMN contest
...................five more syllables
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It was ok I don't see the funny in the poem because one I don't think drinking is funny. Really that is all I can say
I got drunk and THEN-
I entered this DAMN contest
...................five more syllables
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh my God, this made my day! To say it's funny is an understatement. The layout and artistic presentation are phenomenal - love your large letters and the words you strategically put in caps. Last line was too much. This is a jaw-dropping piece, and I can already congratulate you on the win. And oh, must I tell you that the picture is bomb? It's going to stay with me (lol).
Oh my God, this made my day! To say it's funny is an understatement. The layout and artistic presentation are phenomenal - love your large letters and the words you strategically put in caps. Last line was too much. This is a jaw-dropping piece, and I can already congratulate you on the win. And oh, must I tell you that the picture is bomb? It's going to stay with me (lol).
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
yes those dreaded syllables
sometimes hard to find
especially when one is drunk .. LOL
cheers..Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
yes those dreaded syllables
sometimes hard to find
especially when one is drunk .. LOL
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from rouskin
I got drunk and THEN- I entered this DAMN contest ...................five more syllables.... Perfect syllable count :):):)and great picture Best of luck in the contest
Cheers !
I got drunk and THEN- I entered this DAMN contest ...................five more syllables.... Perfect syllable count :):):)and great picture Best of luck in the contest
Cheers !
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. Sometimes it I best when you are in altered state of mind,, especially when you are entering a contest when the rules limit the themes. You have done a good job and stayed within the rules
I love the picture. Sometimes it I best when you are in altered state of mind,, especially when you are entering a contest when the rules limit the themes. You have done a good job and stayed within the rules
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, very good, very cute, and funny. I'm glad that you took Ernest Hemingway's advice ... "Write drunk, edit sober." I especially liked:
five more syllables
(quick thinking and creative, i.e. for being "drunk.")
A fun poem. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Hello author, very good, very cute, and funny. I'm glad that you took Ernest Hemingway's advice ... "Write drunk, edit sober." I especially liked:
five more syllables
(quick thinking and creative, i.e. for being "drunk.")
A fun poem. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 29-May-2014
Comment from Peter Mansson
Sorry I don't quite get the intended humour or the relevance of the last line,but what a great picture-- a selfie maybe? LOL
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
Sorry I don't quite get the intended humour or the relevance of the last line,but what a great picture-- a selfie maybe? LOL
Comment Written 29-May-2014
reply by the author on 29-May-2014
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I entered this DAMN contest
I/ en/ tered/ this/ damn/ con/ test/
Pretty sure there is seven there.
the intended humor is that the author is drunk and couldn't think of anything to put in the last line. As it turns out "five more syllables" is five more syllables, which is what he needs to complete his 5-7-5. Not a selfie, I wish I looked that good!! Hahaha.
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Sorry Michael, you are quite right about the seven, and I think I need a drink, cheers