The Summer Girl
A 100 Flash Fiction Piece19 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
VIA
Flash fiction, what's the flash? not including the word count. or is it counted to be the flash. flash for short.
anyway, thoroughly enjoyed this. did you drive a red convertible? I had a gold one and a green one before I was 20 yrs. Love them.
I related quite well to this girl, well not now but then.
good writing seeeeee!!!!!
lulube
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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VIA
Flash fiction, what's the flash? not including the word count. or is it counted to be the flash. flash for short.
anyway, thoroughly enjoyed this. did you drive a red convertible? I had a gold one and a green one before I was 20 yrs. Love them.
I related quite well to this girl, well not now but then.
good writing seeeeee!!!!!
lulube
Comment Written 08-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Hey there, lulube! Yeah, the flash is the word count--and the sports car. lol
Thanks for the glorious six! Wow! I'm thrilled and grateful. I'm so glad you liked the story. Glad you could relate well to my anti-heroine, too. She's a love 'em and leave 'em type. hmmmm I guess I know you a little better now. Huh?
Thanks for reviewing and sharing your stars! Means a lot to me, you know.
Sorry I'm so far behind. And I'm so far behind I may never get caught up again. But I'm workin' on it, workin', workin'.
Grateful to ya. Thanks again.
VIA
PS--No convertible, though I always wanted one. I did date a guy who had a red convertible. But that's as close as I came. I drove a blue mustang (1979) until it would go no further. I put 200,000 miles on that little sucker. We called her Chitty. I adored her. Still miss that girl. lol
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VIA
well why wouldn't we like the same cars.
I had a flat green, but sprayed over w2i5hg a creamier light green, but by the time I bought it the roof and top of trunk and hood had sunned down to the darker green. the sides were the only light green.
A 1979 MUSTANG automatic 302
OMG
list of some cars
VERY FIRST CAR 16 yrs paid $40
1955 CHEV
2 MG midget sports cars
MUSTANG 1979
1968 DATSUN PICKUP
1976 NISSAN PICKUP
1976 MONTECARLO
1981 FORD FAIRLANE STATIONWAGON
1977 FIREBIRD
1986 CHEVROLETTE HATCHBACK
1996 DODGE GRAND CARAVA
1991 MAZDA HATCHBACK
1963 INTERNATIONAL TRAVELL ALL VAN
to now
2011 VOLKSWAGON GOLF TD1 turbo diesel
I think that's about it
lulube
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omg That list took me back! I hadn't thought about Monte Carlos in years. Awesome cares. Fairlane wagons, too. My sister drove a Firebird, but I was a Mustang girl. A 79 mustang (powder blue) was my first car. I put 200,000 miles on her. I still dream of that car. I'd love a VW. Those are great cars, and a friend here drives one now. You've seen some fine wheels, lulube.
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I had a boyfriend when I was 18 yrs old whose brother had the hottest cars and I was the only one he'd let drive them. a /65 Mustang, /72 corvette (that years model) and an XKEJAG my fav. car to drive.
lulube
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Wow. Amazing cars! I'm not a huge Jag fan. They look too small and dangerous. I'm a Texan--everything needs to be bigger. LOL
Let's not talk about how that's affected my dating life. ;)
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lol mine too !!! I'll just remember the cars for now. lol
lulube
Comment from Louise Michelle
Flash fiction is my favorite genre and you met the writing challenge nicely. We could actually interpret this girl in more than one way. She could be symbolic of the season. Yet, I see it as a fleeting romance that broke your protagonist's heart. Lou
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Flash fiction is my favorite genre and you met the writing challenge nicely. We could actually interpret this girl in more than one way. She could be symbolic of the season. Yet, I see it as a fleeting romance that broke your protagonist's heart. Lou
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Hello Lou,
I'm so thrilled with this review. Thank you for taking the time to see the story from all angles. Yes, that's the point. I wanted to do something that used the seasonal imagery and told a story that was a little different. I'm so glad that you liked it. Thanks for your wonderful comments!
I apologize for taking so long to respond. I was out of town for the holiday, and now I'm playing catch-up.
Once again, your thoughtful review made my evening!
Vista Kay
Comment from RodG
I really like this story because of how you focused primarily on SETTING and how it changes subtly from start to finish. Some beautiful description of the last few "bleeding, chilly" days he spent with her. A wonderful nostalgic piece. RodG
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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I really like this story because of how you focused primarily on SETTING and how it changes subtly from start to finish. Some beautiful description of the last few "bleeding, chilly" days he spent with her. A wonderful nostalgic piece. RodG
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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I'm so glad that you liked the piece and the descriptions, Rod. I enjoyed the 100 Word Challenge. I've not written much in a long while, and I really needed to dip my toes back into the pond.
Thanks for the wonderful review and the supportive comments. Your encouragement means a lot to me.
Gratefully,
Vista Kay
Comment from Muffins
Lively, clear story of love for a season. It flows gently from the sentence to the heartbreak at the end. Sometimes we meet people who are only meant to be apart of our lives for a season. Lovely choice of photo. It matched the tone of the story.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Lively, clear story of love for a season. It flows gently from the sentence to the heartbreak at the end. Sometimes we meet people who are only meant to be apart of our lives for a season. Lovely choice of photo. It matched the tone of the story.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the great review, Muffins. I'm so glad that you liked the flash piece, and I really appreciate your kind comments. I wanted to do something just a little different. Your support means a lot.
Thanks again.
Vista Kay
Comment from JavaJunkie
This is excellent and the clear winner in my mind. I love how you have so artfully captured a story in only 100 words. Every word is essential and you have chosen wisely.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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This is excellent and the clear winner in my mind. I love how you have so artfully captured a story in only 100 words. Every word is essential and you have chosen wisely.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for this fabulous review. You, my friend, have renewed my faith in humans in general and encourage me as a writer overall.
Bless you all around.
Thanks again!
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Honestly I am flabbergasted that you didn't place in the contest. I seriously don't get it. In my book you were the clear winner and I read all the entries. I had my husband read it and he was equally impressed. I have been really surprised at how these contests go sometimes. Weird!
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Hello, JavaJunkie,
I apologize for taking so long to reply, but I left town for the holiday. Sorry.
Well, I was disappointed, I'll admit. But you're right. There is never any way of telling how the contests will go. It's confusing. And thanks so much for telling me how well you liked the story and that your husband liked it, too! I was really blue and, as I said, disappointed. But just seeing your supportive response here has helped so much! Thanks so much for sharing this.
I'm grateful. Let the weirdness continue. :)
Vista Kay
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the story. The lady in red blew into town. She took over the boy's soul until she was ready to leave. The young man was very sad. But he had many happy remembers of love. Great work . Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I love the picture. I love the story. The lady in red blew into town. She took over the boy's soul until she was ready to leave. The young man was very sad. But he had many happy remembers of love. Great work . Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2014
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I'm so glad that you liked the story so much. Thanks for the great review and the words of support and encouragement.
And I need that luck! Thanks again.
Comment from bluedragon776
Very nicely written and very descriptive, especially towards the end. It is so hard to tell a story is only 100 words. Good Job and Good Luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Very nicely written and very descriptive, especially towards the end. It is so hard to tell a story is only 100 words. Good Job and Good Luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for the encouraging review and the luck. I'm so glad you liked the story!
Yes, the 100 word count is difficult, but it's such a great exercise, isn't it?
Thanks again.
Comment from Pegcook
"The Summer Girl" contains some beautiful imagery. The vintage photograph complements the story. However, this reader must have missed something. What did the boy do that eluded forgiving himself?
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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"The Summer Girl" contains some beautiful imagery. The vintage photograph complements the story. However, this reader must have missed something. What did the boy do that eluded forgiving himself?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Fell in love.
Comment from Leineco
Ahhh. . .the epic tale of summer love
leaving behind the husks of once vibrant greenery. . .
Beguiled by the seductive bloom of wildly colored hues
he ran head-long into her whirlwind
and never saw the cloud of Furies
swirling on the horizon.
Very nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Ahhh. . .the epic tale of summer love
leaving behind the husks of once vibrant greenery. . .
Beguiled by the seductive bloom of wildly colored hues
he ran head-long into her whirlwind
and never saw the cloud of Furies
swirling on the horizon.
Very nicely done :-)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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So glad you liked it! Yes, he did run headlong into her whirlwind. Loved this review!
Thanks again, so very much.
Comment from JBCaine
Author X-
Forgive himself for what? Letting her drive away? Not hiding the body better?
Anyway, still very well done.
Luck to you in the contest.
JBCaine-
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Author X-
Forgive himself for what? Letting her drive away? Not hiding the body better?
Anyway, still very well done.
Luck to you in the contest.
JBCaine-
Comment Written 15-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2014
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Falling in love.
I was not happy with the end, and I made some changes. Thanks for the review and luck.