Hues of Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Senryu(wife spends sleepless nights)"Senryu Collection
8 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
great pairing of humorous artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 format for the senryu
good alliteration in spends sleeping/snoring
many readers will laugh with understanding as they have the same problem in their marriages
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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great pairing of humorous artwork and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 format for the senryu
good alliteration in spends sleeping/snoring
many readers will laugh with understanding as they have the same problem in their marriages
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi,
Thank you for this lovely review! It's a common problem..LOL
Comment from Lylise
This is a strong entry into the Senryu Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fulfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This is a strong entry into the Senryu Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fulfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)
Comment from Delores J. Howard
Had to laugh--been there! I felt that the 2nd. line was a little forced with "love." (I realize it would not meet the qualifications if it was removed). Really cute piece.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Had to laugh--been there! I felt that the 2nd. line was a little forced with "love." (I realize it would not meet the qualifications if it was removed). Really cute piece.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Hi,
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Senryu has multiple layers. This one has humor(which is easily visible) and the satire(blind love fades with age, and now he doesn't care about her worries).
The interpretations depends on how one unfolds its layers and most of the average readers fail to see the hidden layer.
Thus 'love' is significant here. I am never after the 'stars', but the review should have relevant reasons.
Comment from tfawcus
I love his blissfully unaware look in the picture! Your poem contains the greater truth that what often eventually destroys a marriage is the suffering in silence instead of active steps to work a problem out.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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I love his blissfully unaware look in the picture! Your poem contains the greater truth that what often eventually destroys a marriage is the suffering in silence instead of active steps to work a problem out.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)
Comment from Charlene0513
A problem that faces many couples and no answer comes unless one of you gives up and moves out to the living room.
Nice flow with great picture showing ear muffs as a solution.
Charlene
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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A problem that faces many couples and no answer comes unless one of you gives up and moves out to the living room.
Nice flow with great picture showing ear muffs as a solution.
Charlene
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)
Comment from Petriesan
good luck int he contest,
The one who is most comfortable seems to have the least trouble sleeping it seems. . .or is it only the clueless? Guess it depends on point of view
nice piece
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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good luck int he contest,
The one who is most comfortable seems to have the least trouble sleeping it seems. . .or is it only the clueless? Guess it depends on point of view
nice piece
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)
Comment from Cajungirl
Your humorous poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. The artwork is great. I enjoyed the poem, there is nothing worst than spending the night listening to your spouse snore. I exile mine to the guest room. :}
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Your humorous poem has the correct line and syllable count per line. The artwork is great. I enjoyed the poem, there is nothing worst than spending the night listening to your spouse snore. I exile mine to the guest room. :}
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)
Comment from TOMORAL
This is funny. My sister-in-law has to sleep in another room sometimes. My brother sounds like a chain saw. I love the humor and this is very well done.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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This is funny. My sister-in-law has to sleep in another room sometimes. My brother sounds like a chain saw. I love the humor and this is very well done.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review! :)