Eight going On Eighty
60 word story22 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This one makes me laugh, Ingrid. Yes, I remember the emotions when my children outgrew their need for "Mommy" and I became a convenience rather than a necessity. It's hard to let go when there are so many dangers out there. :) nancy
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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This one makes me laugh, Ingrid. Yes, I remember the emotions when my children outgrew their need for "Mommy" and I became a convenience rather than a necessity. It's hard to let go when there are so many dangers out there. :) nancy
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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It still is, no matter how old they are.
Comment from mfowler
You set the reader up well to be expecting a broken romance, but this cute finish with the eight year old's Declaration of Independence is very cute. Good fun, good use of the 60 measly words.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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You set the reader up well to be expecting a broken romance, but this cute finish with the eight year old's Declaration of Independence is very cute. Good fun, good use of the 60 measly words.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2014
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And sometimes it only takes one. Think how often YES or NO changed someone's reality. I do have an eight-year-old grandson and he's too cool for public hugs.
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. It is hard to grow up. Some of our relatives have a hard time letting go. You had a nice response. The boy has at least another ten years of others letting go. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It is hard to grow up. Some of our relatives have a hard time letting go. You had a nice response. The boy has at least another ten years of others letting go. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Yeah and my grandson is eight. Where do you suppose that came from? Thanks for the read and review.
Comment from EMB
This is a cute story with a nice little surprise at the end, but I'm thinking that it all depends on the street. I'll be darned if I let an eight year old cross a busy intersection with six lanes. Haha!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This is a cute story with a nice little surprise at the end, but I'm thinking that it all depends on the street. I'll be darned if I let an eight year old cross a busy intersection with six lanes. Haha!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Oh come on, be truthful. some days you must surely encourage him to go out and play in traffic. Well, I have those evil thoughts about my eight-year-old grandson, but you seem far more balanced than I am.
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Haha! Perhaps a tad. :)
Comment from Janie King
Oh now this is just too cute and it is projecting the way it happens. They just grow up too soon. Great piece. Good luck in the prompt. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Oh now this is just too cute and it is projecting the way it happens. They just grow up too soon. Great piece. Good luck in the prompt. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Yes, my grandson is eight, too old for grandma hugs he tells me. Thanks.
Comment from victor 66
I am always in awe that some one can say so much in so few words. It was very sweet and an enjoyable read. Wish you the best of luck and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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I am always in awe that some one can say so much in so few words. It was very sweet and an enjoyable read. Wish you the best of luck and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much for reading and the review.
Comment from in777wr#
This was a cute short story. I chuckled at the end of it. Your story was well written, and reads well. It appears that this story is a good entry for this contest. Well wishes to you in this contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This was a cute short story. I chuckled at the end of it. Your story was well written, and reads well. It appears that this story is a good entry for this contest. Well wishes to you in this contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Treischel
What a lovely touching moment that is depicted in this well written sixty word dash. You hold the punch line until the end, which really adds to the poignancy.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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What a lovely touching moment that is depicted in this well written sixty word dash. You hold the punch line until the end, which really adds to the poignancy.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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It was a fun write. Thanks.
Comment from MarjorieAnne
Great family-friendly story, which could be the start of a novel. Authentic dialogue and appealing humor. How about an exclamation point instead of a comma after "anymore"? I wouldn't capitalize "geez".
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Great family-friendly story, which could be the start of a novel. Authentic dialogue and appealing humor. How about an exclamation point instead of a comma after "anymore"? I wouldn't capitalize "geez".
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Will correct geeze, but I have a phobia about exclamation marks.
Comment from suep
This was enjoyable and entertaining. Your dramatic beginning created a number of scenarios in my mind, and then it surprised me with the light hearted ending. Well written. Great job ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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This was enjoyable and entertaining. Your dramatic beginning created a number of scenarios in my mind, and then it surprised me with the light hearted ending. Well written. Great job ... Best wishes in the contest! :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2014
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Thanks. It was a fun write.