To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Intimate Obscurity"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from country ranch writer
sometimes I think people are unaware of things around them for things are not as they seem or want them to be only your minds eye can grasp it
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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sometimes I think people are unaware of things around them for things are not as they seem or want them to be only your minds eye can grasp it
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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You are sure right on that. They don't bother to look and things just pass them by.
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welcome
Comment from w.j.debi
I like the whole thing, but I especially like the last two stanzas and the vantage point of the forlorn soul vs that of the blade of grass. "I can tickle you." Great personification of that little blade. I think I want him for my friend.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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I like the whole thing, but I especially like the last two stanzas and the vantage point of the forlorn soul vs that of the blade of grass. "I can tickle you." Great personification of that little blade. I think I want him for my friend.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much. I am delighted you understood so perfectly. Big smiles!! mikey
Comment from Sasha
For me, obscurity comes from looking but not bothering to see what you are looking at. This is a superb poem and a real gem too. Marvelous work with this one.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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For me, obscurity comes from looking but not bothering to see what you are looking at. This is a superb poem and a real gem too. Marvelous work with this one.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Wow. I adore the way you put that. (He steals her line and slinks away down a dark winding road giggling maniacally.) Thank you so very much! mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
amazing picture these words drew out mikey we stare endlessly into something unfathomable looking for a raft to float on for a moments peace very beautifully penned dear friend excellent piece
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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amazing picture these words drew out mikey we stare endlessly into something unfathomable looking for a raft to float on for a moments peace very beautifully penned dear friend excellent piece
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you. I read a couple of your pieces before I wrote this. Got that great imagery mode in my head!!
Comment from pattipac
Your well worded free-verse poem exudes an underlying truth about arragant people who purposely, or blindly dismiss others making them feel alone and obscure.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Your well worded free-verse poem exudes an underlying truth about arragant people who purposely, or blindly dismiss others making them feel alone and obscure.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Right on the money. Very insightful of you. So very appreciated. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from reconciled
because the hands connected to the arms that reach do not lead to the one face that breached soul deep breathing is a tournament. ,,-smile-...this is upper deck writing first class.....you got the gold....love you man Michael
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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because the hands connected to the arms that reach do not lead to the one face that breached soul deep breathing is a tournament. ,,-smile-...this is upper deck writing first class.....you got the gold....love you man Michael
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you. Means a lot coming from one that writes at a high level like yourself. Very encouraging! I shall attempt some kind of athletic feet, ill advised, but heroic nonetheless. mikey
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your a good man Mike...God bless you-
Comment from nelliesellie
You give a good description of obscurity vision. Sometimes we are just not paying attention. Many times we deliberately narrow the vision. Some people just can not see the important. Sometimes life does not see us. Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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You give a good description of obscurity vision. Sometimes we are just not paying attention. Many times we deliberately narrow the vision. Some people just can not see the important. Sometimes life does not see us. Great work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Love your analysis. Very insightful as always. Thank you so very much, mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
Wow Mikey, thanks for writing a poem about me - how do you know so much about me? I think we both must be lost souls sometimes. Maybe everyone is at times but I don't always see it in others but I feel it in you - in your poems.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Wow Mikey, thanks for writing a poem about me - how do you know so much about me? I think we both must be lost souls sometimes. Maybe everyone is at times but I don't always see it in others but I feel it in you - in your poems.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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What a wonderful thing to say. I appreciate that very much. I feel the same way when I read yours. They make immediate sense to me and I am saying "Yes!" right away. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Nosha17
Powerful imagery and words to convey your message about one's inclination to obscurity. I guess, in order to achieve obscurity we concentrate on less important aspects of life and feel empathy for the trivial. Well-written with good choice of words, and it flowed well. Faye
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Powerful imagery and words to convey your message about one's inclination to obscurity. I guess, in order to achieve obscurity we concentrate on less important aspects of life and feel empathy for the trivial. Well-written with good choice of words, and it flowed well. Faye
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you. Great insights and input. Very much appreciated as always. mikey
Comment from MoIronE13
Brilliant MIchael...brilliant.
This poem is a true work of ART.
Did you eat some Amanita Muscaria???
The old toad stollies...LOL
I pick a butt load at our beach cabin this past October.
They were some beautiful fresh and tasty.
a forlorn and irritated soul
sits on an abandoned ant hill
starring at a blade of grass
growing under a mushroom
and feels empathy
"Poor little thing growing
in the shadows."
This is exactly my trip man....yahooooo
Did you promote this??? It would be worth it!
I think I'll have a little nibble later today.
I'm late I'm late I'late...
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Brilliant MIchael...brilliant.
This poem is a true work of ART.
Did you eat some Amanita Muscaria???
The old toad stollies...LOL
I pick a butt load at our beach cabin this past October.
They were some beautiful fresh and tasty.
a forlorn and irritated soul
sits on an abandoned ant hill
starring at a blade of grass
growing under a mushroom
and feels empathy
"Poor little thing growing
in the shadows."
This is exactly my trip man....yahooooo
Did you promote this??? It would be worth it!
I think I'll have a little nibble later today.
I'm late I'm late I'late...
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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None of my friends would ever let me have any LSD or mushrooms. They would just say "Dude, you don't need this." hahaha. Glad you liked this. I rarely have enough anything to promote much. I review a lot but, I post a lot too. So, enough to get the 9.95 thing is usually about it. Once in a while I push it up a little. Appreciate the support though. Thank you much, mikey
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God shall provide for OUR needs.
Peace bro..