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Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "When Love Died, I Died"
Free Verse Poetry

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Comment from Sankey
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Hmmm real deep mate so l=sorry it took me so long to get to this you know all the reasons I think. Let me guess First wife? I mean the one that was not a wife in the true sense of the word. Talk about a pre -marital divorce huh!
Thanks for sharing your sorrow mate. NO SPAGS! How naughty of you.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2013

Comment from ravenblack
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Very inventive acrostic, the trinity of "I died". When love dies and one is left hanging, it is a living death, the stare of empty eyes wishing for fullness to come, knowing on some level that it won't.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 30-Nov-2013
    Yes, the worst. Got to the end and realized it wasn't the end. So, had to keep going. Came out pretty good. mikey
Comment from Sasha
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Acrostics are really hard to do well, and you have done just that with this one. I especially like the repetition. Excellent work with this one. Very powerful and full of strong emotion.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 29-Nov-2013
    I finished this and then I read it and realized that it wasn't finished. So, I had to add the extra two parts. I am glad you liked it. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from adewpearl
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When Love Died I Died I Died I Died - an intriguing acrostic phrase
good touches of alliteration
soulful expression of heartfelt emotion
good use of enjambment
effective use of repetition to intensify the emotion
Brooke

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    Thank you so much. Got to the end and I realized I wasn't done. So, I needed more ending. It worked out fairly well. I am pleased you liked it! mikey
Comment from Cookie333
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This wasn't stilted or stalled anywhere my friend, it is difficult to write an acrostic (at least for me) and have it read so smooth, well done Mike,
thanks
karen

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    How pleased I am to hear that. Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Nosha17
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Love can be so painful when it is one-sided. Your vivid imagery made your poem even more effective. Your choice of language was very good and it flowed along from start to finish. Well-written. Faye

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    I so appreciate the positive input. Very encouraging. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
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hum... well... it is well written. hits a little too close to home for me...feels like my ex-husband might have written it. Dare to dream again Mikey!
~teresa~

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    Ha! I got over it and so will he!! Happiness is found in the truth. I've been hanging out with Confuscious too much. mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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When I was sixteen, very much in love the boys parents said we were too young to be serious. I thought I would die of a broken heart. I didn't but this poem is real. Good job Michael. Nancy

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    I never tell anyone that. It is real. But, they are correct when they say we will survive. But, I never forgot any of it. Fortunately a lot of the memories are wonderful. mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
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I love the poem. This has happened to me. A huge part of me died. I really tried with my first husband. I would have loved him and devoted my life to him. He never had any intention of liking me, let alone love me. I am actually glad he did that. I made my self into a type of person who found a great second husband. Great work.

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    A horrible thing but, also a learning experience and one that strengthens. Not fun at all. But, it worked out for me too. Glad you liked it, mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
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i related to these words remembering back to hells kitchen ha ha How could you not glance back with longing just one time very beautifully drawn piece dear friend

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2013

reply by the author on 27-Nov-2013
    Glad you liked this one. Long, long ago. She left me something to make a good poem about!! mikey