To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Another Time and Place"Free Verse Poetry
14 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Sounds like some sort of remorse or jealousy or let me guess this was written after you got stuck with your first wife and found out what kind of a traitor she was to yor feelings?
One spag maybe...?mere(i?)ngue, not sure of the spelling but then American spelling leaves a whole lot to be desired anyway hehe.
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Sounds like some sort of remorse or jealousy or let me guess this was written after you got stuck with your first wife and found out what kind of a traitor she was to yor feelings?
One spag maybe...?mere(i?)ngue, not sure of the spelling but then American spelling leaves a whole lot to be desired anyway hehe.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
Comment from reconciled
Jesus dude....this is brilliant....very impressive. You know it brother ...she'll not find another love like this. Standing ovation stuff Mike.....love Michael
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Jesus dude....this is brilliant....very impressive. You know it brother ...she'll not find another love like this. Standing ovation stuff Mike.....love Michael
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Wow. High praise coming from one of my favorites here. Most humbled and grateful. Thank you so very kindly, mikey
Comment from ravenblack
Medium or well done? ...rare, of course. Nobility can be a thorn. Back in the day, sometimes it was true- " nice guys finish last". Blinded by meringue- be sure to wipe it off before you go peeping or turn those lemons into lemonade and switch to Apple pie. Friends mean well, but sometimes are no comfort.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Medium or well done? ...rare, of course. Nobility can be a thorn. Back in the day, sometimes it was true- " nice guys finish last". Blinded by meringue- be sure to wipe it off before you go peeping or turn those lemons into lemonade and switch to Apple pie. Friends mean well, but sometimes are no comfort.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Yes, they do. It took me a long time to realize that there are no words. But, there is always PIE!!
Comment from cinderbella
Wow. This poem touches my heart. The last stanza is so revealing and is certainly my favorite. "...by-products of want, obsessions relentless beckoning, mocked and ridiculed..." Yep you describe it so poetically. I love this. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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Wow. This poem touches my heart. The last stanza is so revealing and is certainly my favorite. "...by-products of want, obsessions relentless beckoning, mocked and ridiculed..." Yep you describe it so poetically. I love this. :) Sandra
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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I am so happy you liked this one my friend. It certainly is one of those things that happens to those of us that have the nerve to go all in. Thank you very much for the great review, mikey
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. You communicate your theme well. I like the back and forth in your piece. The word choice is strong.
Barbara
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. You communicate your theme well. I like the back and forth in your piece. The word choice is strong.
Barbara
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013
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How encouraging you words are to hear. Thank you so very kindly. mikey
Comment from Spitfire
It's true. Heart break lead one to understand the by-products of too much passion. stalking, preying, obsession. Love the symbolism of food in here. Favorite line:
You'll love again.
But, not like this,
not like this.
Another unique poem. You're a genius.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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It's true. Heart break lead one to understand the by-products of too much passion. stalking, preying, obsession. Love the symbolism of food in here. Favorite line:
You'll love again.
But, not like this,
not like this.
Another unique poem. You're a genius.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Those are some pretty humbling words there my friend. I think that we both agree that answers are somewhere outside the little boxes that everyone seems in a big hurry to fit in. I love it when you tell someone that they should have written about flowers or babies or God if they want to win a contest because it is absolutely true! It really does take the sting out of not getting recognized sometimes when I remember you saying that. I can't thank you enough for your encouraging words. mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
What puts us where we are at.? What makes us feel like winners? Can we feel like we are the winners even if no one else thinks we are? Everyone wants us to be happy. But do we want to be happy in the way they want us to be? Great work,
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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What puts us where we are at.? What makes us feel like winners? Can we feel like we are the winners even if no one else thinks we are? Everyone wants us to be happy. But do we want to be happy in the way they want us to be? Great work,
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Great comments and insights. Almost a poem themselves. Thank you so much for this beautiful uplifting response. mikey
Comment from l.raven
Michael, some times you have to let it play out...you do every embarrassing thing you can do to keep it...the stress is overwhelming...but it's the road you have to take to get there...no time limit!!!!The pain goes to bed with you and the pain wakes up with you...looking for it to pass...a great write...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Michael, some times you have to let it play out...you do every embarrassing thing you can do to keep it...the stress is overwhelming...but it's the road you have to take to get there...no time limit!!!!The pain goes to bed with you and the pain wakes up with you...looking for it to pass...a great write...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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glad you liked this. great insights and comments. on the money. let it play out. how true. mikey
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thank you and you are so welcome Mikey...xxoo
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't think it could be said any better by anyone. Heartbreak can only heal from the inside out, and there is nothing anyone can say to help. And although, it never truly goes away, time can ease the pain.
Thanks for a very nice read!
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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I don't think it could be said any better by anyone. Heartbreak can only heal from the inside out, and there is nothing anyone can say to help. And although, it never truly goes away, time can ease the pain.
Thanks for a very nice read!
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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You hit it right on the head. Very insightful review and comments. Most appreciated, mikey
Comment from Nichola
Thought-Provoking poem. It is a lonely, desolate sort of writing. The person in the poem is not happy with the way things are going but does not have the power to change it.
"mocked and ridiculed,
by your own joy,
insanely happy,
in the midst of your tragic failed existence" - tragic
"But, I'm already blinded by merengue," - using food as a kind of replacement and source of comfort
"There will be another,
(but, I want no other)" - internal dialogue with
oneself - very effective
"I sit at a table,
surrounded by elegance,
broke and eating breadsticks;
watching them eat my steak." - others are being rewarded for all your hard work
"So weary of irony and pathos," emotionally exhausted, having to disguise one's true feelings with irony. Pathos can have 2 meanings, one , a girl that a boy loves, or two, generating feelings of sorrow or feelings of tenderness.
Your spacing of the poem reminds me of the style of the poet, Brian Teare.
Nichola
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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Thought-Provoking poem. It is a lonely, desolate sort of writing. The person in the poem is not happy with the way things are going but does not have the power to change it.
"mocked and ridiculed,
by your own joy,
insanely happy,
in the midst of your tragic failed existence" - tragic
"But, I'm already blinded by merengue," - using food as a kind of replacement and source of comfort
"There will be another,
(but, I want no other)" - internal dialogue with
oneself - very effective
"I sit at a table,
surrounded by elegance,
broke and eating breadsticks;
watching them eat my steak." - others are being rewarded for all your hard work
"So weary of irony and pathos," emotionally exhausted, having to disguise one's true feelings with irony. Pathos can have 2 meanings, one , a girl that a boy loves, or two, generating feelings of sorrow or feelings of tenderness.
Your spacing of the poem reminds me of the style of the poet, Brian Teare.
Nichola
Comment Written 22-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013
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What a wonderful analysis and in depth review. I so appreciate the time you have taken. The comparison to Mr. Teare is most flattering indeed. I am humbled. I have always favored this style since high school, kind of second nature now. Not used much on this site. I like to direct the eyes here and there and set things apart. Wonderful and encouraging words as always. Thank you so very much, mikey