Comment from linnietwotymez

Excellent

This is indeed a scary story. Is these accounts you describe real? That's how good you are as a writer. I hope this is a story. I find myself coming back to read more! Cheers.

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014

Thank you very much for dusting this one off and reviewing it for me, linnietwotymez, that's very kind of you.

It is a work of fiction with some historical fact added to the mix for realism. The author's notes tell the history but the poetry itself is entirely fiction.

Again, thanks so much for reading it, I am very grateful. :)

~Dean

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hello, Dean, this is a great seasonal piece you've penned here. Builds a nice, creepy picture in my head. And, graveyards at night? I come from a small town, (that might be enough said), however, on Friday nights, the guys with dates would drive them through the cemetery to get them to sit closer, and the guys in town without dates,(go figure!), would be hiding behind gravestones, waiting to jump out and scare the "bajezups" out of your date. It always worked the first time. Lol! This was a fun read, thanks for sharing, Bill

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks for giving it a look-see, Bill. And that story, it sounds a lot like the goings-on around my neck of the woods here where I live!

Comment from G.B. Smith

Exceptional

Hello Dean
I love stories like this from old Ireland. I love graveyards and especially on full moon nights. Your music selection is superb as well. This is a sure fire winner for the Halloween Poetry Contest. Best wishes
Bear

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks Bear, I'm happy that you think so, my friend. However, I fare very poorly in contests voted upon by the committee, traditionally, having only won once. But, this was for Halloween, my favorite holiday, and I simply couldn't pass up the chance to try, at least.

Thanks for you most gracious review!

Comment from weemick1960

Exceptional

Hi Dean, this is one hell of a piece of work. I Love it. Been to the graveyard late at night. I'm the one who got a scare, ran through the gravestones, looked back behind me, sort of went to the side of my true course a little, tripped over one of those small gravestones, and fell head over arse into a newly dug grave. I gave some poor old dear the fright of her life when I came out of that hole all covered with mud. Really enjoyed this one. I loved the flow, the story, the words you used to tell it and the vision your words created in my mind. The poem reads well, whether just reading or speaking it. You chose the right route with your piece I think, you could have went down a really dark road. I'm glad you didn't. This I really enjoyed, the whole atmosphere. Have a nice Sunday....MIKE.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Why, thank you, Mike, for your wonderful compliments and this fantastic review. I certainly appreciate it.

I didn't want this piece to be too hard core, because it's based upon an urban myth I'd heard from Londonderry, and the myth itself, or rather, the story surrounding it, is more ethereal than gory and blood-soaked. I wished to remain true to that legend, and hopefully, I've accomplished that feat.

Once again, Thanks for such an in depth review of this work. It's people like yourself who make doing what it is I try to do ( think outside the proverbial "box" just a bit ), that much more rewarding.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I've a bone to pick with this town. That was the perfect ending for this very delightfully written piece of poetic art. You told your tale here in smoothly rendered thoughts. I liked everything about this excellent piece of poetic artistry... John

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks so much for your wonderful review, John. I sincerely appreciate it!

Comment from bluedragon776

Excellent

Great backdrop, great poem. Very entertaining. However, I have a few concerns:
The reader has to scroll to far down to begin reading. Some of the words are hard to see ===4th stanza, lines 5-7. I think it is the white lettering against the blades of grass. A little distracting. Just thought may be interested. Good Luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013

Thanks very much, bluedragon776, I appreciate the great feedback! I will endeavor to correct the font problem ASAP...

Comment from giovannimariatommaso

Excellent

Quite a tale and quite a poem, reads well with bounce and lilt just in the right places to keep the story moving. I didn't see any spelling or grammatical errors. The music added to the frightfulness of the poem's ambience.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thanks for your input and insightful review, giovannimariatommaso. I do appreciate it...

Comment from me_tudor

Excellent

This was great. I loved the story in the poem and the way it flowed. And the picture was perfect. It added to the creepiness of the story.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thanks very much, me_tudor. I sincerely appreciate it!

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

That is a cool story for the campfire deep in the woods with an old church and cemetery close by. I have been to cemetery's late at night But not alone, they are spooky for sure. It is a great entry for the Halloween contest mate, good luck with!

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thanks so much, Hitcher. I've got a feeling I'm gonna' need it!

reply by Hitcher on 28-Sep-2013

Site ones are very hard to win But it's awesome when you do:)

Comment from amada

Exceptional

Wow, what an enchanting, scaring and marvelous trip. I will save it for my grandkids. Such a perfection in style, music, sounds and words. Best, best wishes.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2013

Thanks so much for your glowing review, amada!