The Dryad
A Double Cleve22 total reviews
Comment from arsinBW
Wow this is pretty cool and I had never heard of this before. Seems like it would be dificult. I also enjoyed the subject matter.
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Wow this is pretty cool and I had never heard of this before. Seems like it would be dificult. I also enjoyed the subject matter.
Comment Written 11-May-2013
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Hi again, I guess I said most everything in the message I sent, but I do appreciate your taking time away from your own words to read and review mine. Love those Dryads!
Comment from Sally Carter
Wendy, this is a remarkable poem, and the only reason for the 5 is that all my 6s have been used up. Here's what it deserves:
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It seems pointless me restating all the clever and beautiful things you have done here; you wrote it, for goodness's sake!
What most impresses me is the way you have chosen words so carefully that they often make sentences in all directions, rather than simply being a list of descriptions. Little words at the end of phrases, such as "of", and "while", and the comma in the line "warming, they wiggle", make such a difference.
Interesting, the effective way you use a semi colon in the last column.
Of course, wonderful alliteration, especially in the line mentioned above - warming/wiggle.
And on top of that, the imagery is quite beautiful, even if there were no picture to look at.
Thank you, Wendy, for the pleasure of reading this poem and for helping me realise that a double cleve (must get the spelling right) CAN be more than just a clever juggling with words. I might even, one day, try another...
My very best wishes to you.
Sally
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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Wendy, this is a remarkable poem, and the only reason for the 5 is that all my 6s have been used up. Here's what it deserves:
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It seems pointless me restating all the clever and beautiful things you have done here; you wrote it, for goodness's sake!
What most impresses me is the way you have chosen words so carefully that they often make sentences in all directions, rather than simply being a list of descriptions. Little words at the end of phrases, such as "of", and "while", and the comma in the line "warming, they wiggle", make such a difference.
Interesting, the effective way you use a semi colon in the last column.
Of course, wonderful alliteration, especially in the line mentioned above - warming/wiggle.
And on top of that, the imagery is quite beautiful, even if there were no picture to look at.
Thank you, Wendy, for the pleasure of reading this poem and for helping me realise that a double cleve (must get the spelling right) CAN be more than just a clever juggling with words. I might even, one day, try another...
My very best wishes to you.
Sally
Comment Written 11-May-2013
reply by the author on 11-May-2013
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And back at you Sally. Your review is so thorough and it is wonderful to see specifics attached, rather than just a banal, happy face review. As to the connecting words, yes, they do work magic for the cleve. I am not a staccato writer by any means. If I can squeeze another word into a sentence, and think I can get away with it, I will add two. The cleve doesn't allow for a lot of that, but some can be tasty and ease the movement from line to line. I hesitated to move everyone in that direction as I thought it had more to do with personal style than form. I have since come to think that it is a necessity in order to achieve the right flow. I am learning during this reviewing process too. I think next time I rule the world, I will feel more comfortable in suggesting, tugging, pulling or dragging you guys in a specific direction. This time I was a bit of a wuss. - Wendy
Comment from TELLER OF TALES
A very beautifully writtem piece, great coordination,excellently guided through every line,every word,wonderful work by the author, the fantasy is truly a masterpiece,i defeneatly recommend it to all.....THE TELLER OF TALES...
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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A very beautifully writtem piece, great coordination,excellently guided through every line,every word,wonderful work by the author, the fantasy is truly a masterpiece,i defeneatly recommend it to all.....THE TELLER OF TALES...
Comment Written 10-May-2013
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my words. I enjoy the form as it gives me a chance to write poetry and work a puzzle at the same time. Thank you also for the recommendation.- Wendy
Comment from visionary1234
oh I have missed you Wendy! such a clever write (I've never attempted one of these) - we have a famous Aussie painter (whose name totally escapes me) who was rather naughty but specialized in painting nymphs - lots of them hanging in the Sydney Art Gallery (which I love to visit whenever I get to Sydneyk which isn't often these days) ... your poem reminds me of his light, lovely, airy creations ...
a landscape become(becomes?) body
lovely to read you again!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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oh I have missed you Wendy! such a clever write (I've never attempted one of these) - we have a famous Aussie painter (whose name totally escapes me) who was rather naughty but specialized in painting nymphs - lots of them hanging in the Sydney Art Gallery (which I love to visit whenever I get to Sydneyk which isn't often these days) ... your poem reminds me of his light, lovely, airy creations ...
a landscape become(becomes?) body
lovely to read you again!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 10-May-2013
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Hello Sharyn, It is nice to feel like writing again. I think I just had too many 18 hour days and too much business stress. I just couldn't face writing or reviewing or quite some time ( I think most should be glad that I didn't try and rate them when I was in such a grand funk.) I am working my way back and hope to get back into a steady schedule of writing and reading my favorite authors (you are definitely included in that bunch) - Wendy
Comment from MelissaBickel
This is fantastic!!! I love the colors and the photo you chose to go with this poem. I'm glad I tried my hand at it. Enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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This is fantastic!!! I love the colors and the photo you chose to go with this poem. I'm glad I tried my hand at it. Enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you Melissa, I'm glad you did too. Perhaps we should talk them into adding a cleve challenge to the NY Times Sunday Puzzle page! - Wendy
Comment from NicciFaye
Expectionally different. Amusing muse has given way to the fairy inside you. I love the picture and the dancing and embracing words. Great poem. Many blessings.
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Expectionally different. Amusing muse has given way to the fairy inside you. I love the picture and the dancing and embracing words. Great poem. Many blessings.
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you so much, NicciFaye, for your thoughtful and well penned review. I appreciate the time you took from your own precious words to read mine. - Wendy
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great poem its like reading four poems in one I like these types of poems and I liked the picture it was so cool thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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This is a great poem its like reading four poems in one I like these types of poems and I liked the picture it was so cool thank you for sharing
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work. Actually, it is five poems in one. Each column is a complete poem. You can also stack the columns, in order, and read it that way. Finally, read it horizontally, jumping from column to column as you read each row. I am really glad that you liked it. - Wendy
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend you have done really well in creating this poem it has so much to offer , so much imagery and feeling and a bonus for the reader it is 5 poems in one I enjoyed my friend well done take care regards Jill
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Hello my friend you have done really well in creating this poem it has so much to offer , so much imagery and feeling and a bonus for the reader it is 5 poems in one I enjoyed my friend well done take care regards Jill
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you, Jill, for the lovely six. I had a great deal of fun putting this puzzle together. I am so glad you enjoyed it. - Wendy
Comment from wordsareus
I wish I had a six left to give you for this one. IT looks like a difficult poetry format and it is exceptionally well-written. Great use of assonance and imagery!
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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I wish I had a six left to give you for this one. IT looks like a difficult poetry format and it is exceptionally well-written. Great use of assonance and imagery!
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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And I accept your wishful six with gratitude. I respect your writing and so your appreciation means a great deal to me. Aren't those poetic devices fun? - Wendy
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Absolutely!
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Hi Wendy, This is definitely one of the best double cleaves I've read. I know how difficult these are to write and you have done a masterful job of laying this out so that it makes some sense and does so as smoothly as possible. What I notice most is the wonderful alliteration throughout! You are very talented!
All the best,
Rodger
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Hi Wendy, This is definitely one of the best double cleaves I've read. I know how difficult these are to write and you have done a masterful job of laying this out so that it makes some sense and does so as smoothly as possible. What I notice most is the wonderful alliteration throughout! You are very talented!
All the best,
Rodger
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thank you, thank you for the kudos. I am glad that you liked it and I eagerly await your attempt.- Wendy