Leslie Ann's Exploits
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Jonathan's dilemma"A spoiled young lady who learns the hard way
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Comment from Curly Girly
It read well and I could spot no typos. He sounds like a loving husband who is fully committed to his wife. Let's just hope that it can stay that way. CG
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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It read well and I could spot no typos. He sounds like a loving husband who is fully committed to his wife. Let's just hope that it can stay that way. CG
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks for your continued support!
Comment from jjstar
Okay, so this is a story in a poem..geesh..sorry. Sometimes I'm a dunderhead.
Great background, descriptions of issues and relationship with his wife. Who would imagine that he would might get involved with another woman when he has this type of perfect love affair with his wife. I guess it's sure been know to happen though.
Great job!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Okay, so this is a story in a poem..geesh..sorry. Sometimes I'm a dunderhead.
Great background, descriptions of issues and relationship with his wife. Who would imagine that he would might get involved with another woman when he has this type of perfect love affair with his wife. I guess it's sure been know to happen though.
Great job!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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I'm delighted to see this positive review. One of your reviews about a month ago almost made me stop writing for awhile. I'm not the best writer out there, but I do try and put thought into what I do.
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What??????? OH NO....What??? I'm so sorry...your writing has always impressed me...especially the essays..I feel terrible. I'm going to go back and find it. You can't ever stop writing..:) I apologize from the bottom of my heart if I said anything hurtful. :(
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No, don't do that! I accept your apology, so forget it. I don't hold grudges. It could have been one of those days. I stopped reading your book for a while until I decompressed. I'm fine now. I had to tell you what happened, or I probably would have been resentful, but as it stands I'm okay with it. Your review was probably right. I'm lousy at editing my work. I can look at it a dozen times and still not see glaring omissions. As for yourself, you are an excellent writer and are deserving of Fanstory's A-list!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Sounds like the perfect couple. I can't imagine Leslie coming between a love like that. Well done!
>>But it was Mary Ann, who satisfied his needs completely.
Remove the comma.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Sounds like the perfect couple. I can't imagine Leslie coming between a love like that. Well done!
>>But it was Mary Ann, who satisfied his needs completely.
Remove the comma.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Phyllis!
Comment from Gungalo
Mary Ann's said she wanted all his attention and love,
And he showed her his devotion again and again.
He wanted her to know beyond a shadow of doubt,
Despite everything they faced, he was forever her man.
He'll stay true no matter what. Just because it is there doesn't mean every man wants to jump on it.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Mary Ann's said she wanted all his attention and love,
And he showed her his devotion again and again.
He wanted her to know beyond a shadow of doubt,
Despite everything they faced, he was forever her man.
He'll stay true no matter what. Just because it is there doesn't mean every man wants to jump on it.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks a million, Gungalo!
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Smile girl.
Comment from alexisleech
I have a feeling the next chapter is going to put Jonathan's determination to love his wife to the test, and I wouldn't doubt the help Leslie Anne offers would test any man's resolve! Another excellent development in the story.
Alexis x
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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I have a feeling the next chapter is going to put Jonathan's determination to love his wife to the test, and I wouldn't doubt the help Leslie Anne offers would test any man's resolve! Another excellent development in the story.
Alexis x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks again for the STARS!!!
Comment from c_lucas
This reads as if it should be in poetry instead of prose. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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This reads as if it should be in poetry instead of prose. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much, Charlie, for your encouraging support. Dossie
Comment from steevie
Jonathan is a good man but we shall see if he comes into temptation by Leslie Ann, the school vixen. I'm actually rooting for the vixen. LOL Jonathan is after all, only human.
Awesome chapter, Dossie. I can't wait until Leslie appears again, wearing something frilly.
Smiles steve
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Jonathan is a good man but we shall see if he comes into temptation by Leslie Ann, the school vixen. I'm actually rooting for the vixen. LOL Jonathan is after all, only human.
Awesome chapter, Dossie. I can't wait until Leslie appears again, wearing something frilly.
Smiles steve
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Steevie for staying in there with me on this one!
That's what fans are for!!
smiles
hugs
steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, titanx, you did an excellent job writing this poetic story about the man who was trying to stay faithful to his vows. i enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, titanx, you did an excellent job writing this poetic story about the man who was trying to stay faithful to his vows. i enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks MILLION! I'm sorry I'm so backed up with my thank you responses!
Comment from God's Writer
A great story poem my friend. Over the next couple of days I am going to be putting in a couple myself. Stop by and let me paint a picture for you.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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A great story poem my friend. Over the next couple of days I am going to be putting in a couple myself. Stop by and let me paint a picture for you.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks MILLION! I'm sorry I'm so backed up with my thank you responses!
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you Titanx9
Excellent rhyming.
A poem that I didn't desire to stop reading
To me your closure show how temptation will not take over
I know same man for me 59 years)
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Hello to you Titanx9
Excellent rhyming.
A poem that I didn't desire to stop reading
To me your closure show how temptation will not take over
I know same man for me 59 years)
Gert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thanks MILLION, Gert! I'm sorry I'm so backed up with my thank you responses!
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you are welcome
Gert