Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Marshmallow and Pumpkin"A collection of my children's poems
21 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Aaaagh!! My jaw is aching! I admire your ingenious collection of nonsense words Steve. This makes an amusing read. Best of luck in the competition. Giddy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Aaaagh!! My jaw is aching! I admire your ingenious collection of nonsense words Steve. This makes an amusing read. Best of luck in the competition. Giddy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks, giddy. It was an enjoyable prompt.
Steve
Comment from sgalletti
Hi Steve! What a fun contest! I'm thoroughly enjoying reading these rhyming nonsense poems. There are some great entries, yours included. Now, your entry really IS nonsense. Loved all the made up wrods LOL! Best of luck in the contest, Sue
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Hi Steve! What a fun contest! I'm thoroughly enjoying reading these rhyming nonsense poems. There are some great entries, yours included. Now, your entry really IS nonsense. Loved all the made up wrods LOL! Best of luck in the contest, Sue
Comment Written 24-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks, sue - it was a fun prompt.
Did you notice that you wrote 'loved all the made up wrods'? tee-hee!
Steve
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a good competitor even to Jabberwocky and Jive. I particularly like these lines: "The chick was named Robin; she had no egrets. / And the gulbats don't twick on our toeses;" Very clever. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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This is a good competitor even to Jabberwocky and Jive. I particularly like these lines: "The chick was named Robin; she had no egrets. / And the gulbats don't twick on our toeses;" Very clever. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks, jeanie - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Warren Rodgers
Great nonsense poem here Steve and thank you for entering the contest. Wonderful rhythm, creative rhymes, internal rhymes and multitudes of made up words come together in a great nonsensical story! I can appreciate how much work went into this and the finished product is superb! You have a great story telling ability along with all of your other talents. Good luck to you in the voting booth.
All the best, Rodger
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Great nonsense poem here Steve and thank you for entering the contest. Wonderful rhythm, creative rhymes, internal rhymes and multitudes of made up words come together in a great nonsensical story! I can appreciate how much work went into this and the finished product is superb! You have a great story telling ability along with all of your other talents. Good luck to you in the voting booth.
All the best, Rodger
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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And thank you for organizing - thought I might have a chance here, but I see brooke has jumped out to an unassailable lead - I guess that's what 600+ fans can do for you!
Steve
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I believe you need to turn that six upside down to get a more accurate current total lol.
Comment from Cornelius2000
Ah, shades of Lewis Carrol. What an absolutely delightful nonsense poem. All I have to say is:
Your poem is grimulous, no doubt indeed
It's chuck full of grobsters and such.
Yet speaking of gulbats I'm forced to concede
To rhyme, I am making up "glutch."
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Ah, shades of Lewis Carrol. What an absolutely delightful nonsense poem. All I have to say is:
Your poem is grimulous, no doubt indeed
It's chuck full of grobsters and such.
Yet speaking of gulbats I'm forced to concede
To rhyme, I am making up "glutch."
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you - showing some carroll-like skill there yourself. The Hunting of the Snark has to be one of my all-time favourites - if i ever write a longer version of this I intend to have my two meet up with carroll's butcher, baker, beaver, bellman, boots, barrister, broker etc...
Comment from sunnilicious
I love marshmallows and pumpkins. The smell is so intoxicating. But this is about your poem. And I love the title. And your nonsense is quite enjoyable. Excellent work.
Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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I love marshmallows and pumpkins. The smell is so intoxicating. But this is about your poem. And I love the title. And your nonsense is quite enjoyable. Excellent work.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you, sunni - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from cvcopac
the competitions out done--shot gunned. This nonsensicle poem can't be topped, it's got to much pop, invented language, multiple rhymes, and meter; plus fantasy and logic both rolled up in the same rug and delivered as a story--real story, begining, transistion and ending. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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the competitions out done--shot gunned. This nonsensicle poem can't be topped, it's got to much pop, invented language, multiple rhymes, and meter; plus fantasy and logic both rolled up in the same rug and delivered as a story--real story, begining, transistion and ending. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thank you - yep, thought I had a chance :o((
Comment from Alan K Pease
This is an excellent nonsense poem that is written in a foreign language which is only understood by a few including me. The poem is really good treatise on really can happen in the terms of sense and a few bottles of booze. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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This is an excellent nonsense poem that is written in a foreign language which is only understood by a few including me. The poem is really good treatise on really can happen in the terms of sense and a few bottles of booze. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks, Alan.
Steve
Comment from Joy Graham
Oh my gosh! I think you have succeeded with this nonsense poem. I tried to follow your story but your nonsense words kept me distracted. When all was said and done you had me convinced you told a story but I haven't a clue what it was about LOL!!! To me, that is what a nonsense poem should do. Too many of the entries I have read are too close to making sense but yours takes the cake! Well done and I wish you the best in this contest. You have a winning entry in my opinion :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Oh my gosh! I think you have succeeded with this nonsense poem. I tried to follow your story but your nonsense words kept me distracted. When all was said and done you had me convinced you told a story but I haven't a clue what it was about LOL!!! To me, that is what a nonsense poem should do. Too many of the entries I have read are too close to making sense but yours takes the cake! Well done and I wish you the best in this contest. You have a winning entry in my opinion :)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Joy, thanks for the kind words and the six stars - I felt there were only one or two true nonsense poems among the entries, but the voters clearly felt otherwise - I guess, since a few of them were the writers of the other poems, that makes sense.
Steve
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh my, Lewis Carroll would have been proud to have written this one!
Fabulous writing, meter, made up words, and a crazy kind of logic to it all. You make it look deceptively easy, but I have tried this kind of thing and didn't find it so. But then you said you wrote the last poem I enthused about in an hour or something, so perhaps you did find it easy!
A great read, and a most worthy entry into Rodger's contest. If anything is going to beat this, it is going to have to be very, very good!
Best wishes to you
Sally
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Oh my, Lewis Carroll would have been proud to have written this one!
Fabulous writing, meter, made up words, and a crazy kind of logic to it all. You make it look deceptively easy, but I have tried this kind of thing and didn't find it so. But then you said you wrote the last poem I enthused about in an hour or something, so perhaps you did find it easy!
A great read, and a most worthy entry into Rodger's contest. If anything is going to beat this, it is going to have to be very, very good!
Best wishes to you
Sally
Comment Written 23-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2012
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Thanks, sally - no beating the power of 600+ fans, apparently....
perhaps I should have followed my instincts and written another ten or so pages, like The Hunting of the Snark from which I drew a little bit of inspiration, but to tell the truth I ran out of time for this one.
Steve