One More Dram
A story disguised as a poem--or vice versa.33 total reviews
Comment from Terra Dane
This is great for the voice is great as with your short stories that I have read. A perfect voice maintained throughout, so that at the end you feel as the reader that you've been sitting at a table in a bar listening to the tale being told all along.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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This is great for the voice is great as with your short stories that I have read. A perfect voice maintained throughout, so that at the end you feel as the reader that you've been sitting at a table in a bar listening to the tale being told all along.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, SMT. I really appreciate you kind words and many stars. Peace, Lee
Comment from strandregs
"It's bad enough to lost - did you mean loose?
Enjoyed your story you dried old camel , have another dram.
Never heard some of the words but just pretended I knew what they were.good luck you goofy old cayoteey. :)Z.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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"It's bad enough to lost - did you mean loose?
Enjoyed your story you dried old camel , have another dram.
Never heard some of the words but just pretended I knew what they were.good luck you goofy old cayoteey. :)Z.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2012
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Hey, Z, thanks for the spag alert--I can't believe I let that go.
So glad you enjoyed. The next dram is on me. Peace, Lee
Comment from c_lucas
Have Tom change your category to Poetry, Western. it is well written by a pen so talent and made Justice's scales balance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Have Tom change your category to Poetry, Western. it is well written by a pen so talent and made Justice's scales balance. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Charlie. I so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You're welcome, Lee. Charlie
Comment from Silverlock
Coleman's the King all right! Excellent rhyme that told a fabulous story with a great sense of time and place. Best of luck in the contest with this really entertaining read.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Coleman's the King all right! Excellent rhyme that told a fabulous story with a great sense of time and place. Best of luck in the contest with this really entertaining read.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thanks again, Silverlock. I had fun with this rhyming story. Peace, Lee
Comment from Gungalo
A great story told in quatrain form!! It was wonderful with the vernacular and all. I wonder just where he did take off for, eh?
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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A great story told in quatrain form!! It was wonderful with the vernacular and all. I wonder just where he did take off for, eh?
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Gungalo. Man, this poetry stuff is hard! I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from gramalot8
Humpwhistle, this is a very good story/poem or poem/story.. LOL... I enjoyed the vision of Coleman, Queenie, the gambling.... all of it in the great venacular you used for sure. Great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Humpwhistle, this is a very good story/poem or poem/story.. LOL... I enjoyed the vision of Coleman, Queenie, the gambling.... all of it in the great venacular you used for sure. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you, gramalot. I'm delighted that you enjoyed my hybrid story/poem. Peace, Lee
Comment from jjstar
As usual, spectacularly cool! Your style is so wonderfully different and your ability to transport me right into the scene, as if I'm right there, is really amazing. You just can write anything and make it seem effortless.
Thanks again. This was a treat to read. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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As usual, spectacularly cool! Your style is so wonderfully different and your ability to transport me right into the scene, as if I'm right there, is really amazing. You just can write anything and make it seem effortless.
Thanks again. This was a treat to read. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, JJ. I'm glad you enjoyed my hybrid story/poem. Peace, Lee
Comment from irishauthorme
This is just great! I liked the rambling style, the shifty rhymes, and the way you painted a picture of the gambler. I live in the CA motherlode country, and stories of the early mining camp gamblers abound. They all had a secret weapon, Coleman would fit right in.
Cheers, irish
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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This is just great! I liked the rambling style, the shifty rhymes, and the way you painted a picture of the gambler. I live in the CA motherlode country, and stories of the early mining camp gamblers abound. They all had a secret weapon, Coleman would fit right in.
Cheers, irish
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, irish. I would loved to have been a fly on the wall at some of these mining camps and boom towns. I suppose that's why I like to mix history with my fiction. I'm so glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
Comment from PearlW
Awesomeness - really enjoyed this story. I couldn't really find anything to nitpick; and you managed to keep my attention throughout and for that you deserve a six. Good luck in the contest, this is certainly a strong entry!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Awesomeness - really enjoyed this story. I couldn't really find anything to nitpick; and you managed to keep my attention throughout and for that you deserve a six. Good luck in the contest, this is certainly a strong entry!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Thank you so much, Pearl. Holding attention really is the name of the game. I'm so glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the great review. Peace, Lee
Comment from BadEducation
A tale of a cheat. Well sure he was good at it until the end of course. Well written story in form of a ballad. I enjoyed reading it thoroughly. Any more like this one, and I'll get you another dram!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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A tale of a cheat. Well sure he was good at it until the end of course. Well written story in form of a ballad. I enjoyed reading it thoroughly. Any more like this one, and I'll get you another dram!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Bad. Yes, this is pretty much a ballad. If you'll stand me another dram, I'll be happy to spin you another yarn.
Thanks again. Peace, Lee