O Africa Beware
A Rhymer19 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi ameen,
This is a most fabulous poem but the rules won't let me give you a six (sob) Your rhyming pattern is excellent and your word selection is descriptive and evocative. I feel so sorry for the people of Africa and I wonder if we really know how fortunate we are? Bravo! Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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Hi ameen,
This is a most fabulous poem but the rules won't let me give you a six (sob) Your rhyming pattern is excellent and your word selection is descriptive and evocative. I feel so sorry for the people of Africa and I wonder if we really know how fortunate we are? Bravo! Blessings, chey
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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chey my friend, I am so pleased you like the write, always grateful to you for your time and the wonderful review, thank you very much.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, ameen, you did a great job writing this poem about the destruction of africa where everyone is to blame. i enjoyed reading this one....
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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this is very well written, ameen, you did a great job writing this poem about the destruction of africa where everyone is to blame. i enjoyed reading this one....
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 31-May-2012
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swj my friend, I thank you for your time and the wonderful reviews, take care my friend.
Comment from Jean Lutz
For some very interesting history study the past of South Africa. I am happy to claim both black and white friends from there. Only yesterday a dear friend of mine was buried. He was a white man that had been a missionary to blacks in South Africa. His one desire was to go back. My first thought when I learned of his death was "Hope went to Heaven" That quickly changed to "Hope comes down from Heaven". I do not believe death stops good works. Lots said in your ten lines of reminder and warning.
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For some very interesting history study the past of South Africa. I am happy to claim both black and white friends from there. Only yesterday a dear friend of mine was buried. He was a white man that had been a missionary to blacks in South Africa. His one desire was to go back. My first thought when I learned of his death was "Hope went to Heaven" That quickly changed to "Hope comes down from Heaven". I do not believe death stops good works. Lots said in your ten lines of reminder and warning.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Once again my friend, I thank you for your time and the wonderful, thoughtful review, God bless you.
Comment from Spitfire
Is something going on if Africa now? I know it's a poor
country and would agree: Even natives collaborate.
Plundered your wealth? Again, I'm lost. I don't know my history that well. I just assume it's all true as greed has always always been a motive to take over countries. I enjoyed the word choices and rhythm however, just confused on the context.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Is something going on if Africa now? I know it's a poor
country and would agree: Even natives collaborate.
Plundered your wealth? Again, I'm lost. I don't know my history that well. I just assume it's all true as greed has always always been a motive to take over countries. I enjoyed the word choices and rhythm however, just confused on the context.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Think colonialism my friend and to this day, the continent is robbed of its wealth in diamonds, oil, etc. As always, appreciate your time and the kind review, thank you very much.
Comment from Titanx9
This a most profound piece. It speaks to centuries of the pillaging of Africa, both within and without, while folks live in sub-standard conditions. Now that China has set its sights on this continent, I wonder whether there be anything left for the indigenous people. I commend you for writing this flowing, descriptive and rhythmic piece. Beautiful artwork.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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This a most profound piece. It speaks to centuries of the pillaging of Africa, both within and without, while folks live in sub-standard conditions. Now that China has set its sights on this continent, I wonder whether there be anything left for the indigenous people. I commend you for writing this flowing, descriptive and rhythmic piece. Beautiful artwork.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Hello again my friend, I thank you for stopping by and the wonderful, thoughtful review; as well as the generous rating, take care.
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes in this powerful poem of social commentary
What an indictment, my friend, of those horrible times throughout history when colonizing countries have arrived on some foreign sure to exploit and even slaughter the indigenous populations Brooke
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strong rhymes in this powerful poem of social commentary
What an indictment, my friend, of those horrible times throughout history when colonizing countries have arrived on some foreign sure to exploit and even slaughter the indigenous populations Brooke
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Brooke my friend, I thank you for your precious time and am grateful for the encouraging review, take care my friend, God bless.
Comment from geetika sethi
VERY INTERESTING POEM HERE AMEEN BHAI.
ITS VERY DIFFERENT TOO. I LIKED THE START ...ESPECIALLY THE 1ST STANZA WHICH HAS A LOT OF WEIGHT AND ATTRACTS THE READER NO LIMIT.THEN SECOND BUILDS THE CONTINUITY AND PROGRESSES TOWARDS A SMOOTH OUTLOOK.
THANKS FOR SHARING.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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VERY INTERESTING POEM HERE AMEEN BHAI.
ITS VERY DIFFERENT TOO. I LIKED THE START ...ESPECIALLY THE 1ST STANZA WHICH HAS A LOT OF WEIGHT AND ATTRACTS THE READER NO LIMIT.THEN SECOND BUILDS THE CONTINUITY AND PROGRESSES TOWARDS A SMOOTH OUTLOOK.
THANKS FOR SHARING.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Hello Geetika, I am honored and humbled that you called me 'bhai'and I love it, thank you my bahen, my beti. I appreciate your time and the wonderful review, so glad that you like the poem, thank you again, take care.
Comment from Hareem.S
A wonderful poem which says a lot, I had to read to read it twice to comprehend it. So sad, the plight of Africa. Enjoyed reading this rich poem.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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A wonderful poem which says a lot, I had to read to read it twice to comprehend it. So sad, the plight of Africa. Enjoyed reading this rich poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Assalam Alaikum beti Hareem, I am glad you like the poem, thank you for the wonderful review, take care.
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased your used Smurphgirl's vivid artwork for this social commentary. I admired your satire and provocative phrases. -Joan
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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I am pleased your used Smurphgirl's vivid artwork for this social commentary. I admired your satire and provocative phrases. -Joan
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Joan my friend, I thank you for the wonderful review, always grateful to you for your time and encouragement, take care.
Comment from Taurean Monkey
A powerful poem, I like how you've dealt with historical reference to colonialism and over time it's become the same old story, just a different lot of people claiming they will civilise natives, converting them into God fearing people. I really like this line: Fertile soil left to dehydrate. Your poem reads as though it's equally applicable within a country's own political context.
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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A powerful poem, I like how you've dealt with historical reference to colonialism and over time it's become the same old story, just a different lot of people claiming they will civilise natives, converting them into God fearing people. I really like this line: Fertile soil left to dehydrate. Your poem reads as though it's equally applicable within a country's own political context.
Comment Written 30-May-2012
reply by the author on 30-May-2012
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Hello TM, I appreciate your time and the wonderful, insightful review, thank you very much.