Jerry Jing-Jang Comes to Town
A cowboy tale74 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Cindy a well told story told in ryme Tes I like it I just wonder if you shoul break up you thoughts- example--
Of all the cowboys in the west,
Jerry Jing-Jang was the best.
Smarter by far than all the rest,
With horse and rope he passed the test.
At the rodeo or on the trail
Jerry Jing-Jang didn't fail.
( and do such to the rest of you poem)
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Hello Cindy a well told story told in ryme Tes I like it I just wonder if you shoul break up you thoughts- example--
Of all the cowboys in the west,
Jerry Jing-Jang was the best.
Smarter by far than all the rest,
With horse and rope he passed the test.
At the rodeo or on the trail
Jerry Jing-Jang didn't fail.
( and do such to the rest of you poem)
Gert
Comment Written 07-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2012
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Yeah, I need to get to that before the contest. Thanks for reminding me. I'll do it this afternoon. Several people said the same thing, but once it wasn't promoted any more I kind of forgot about it.
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You are welcome
Take care.
Gert
Comment from Suzie Q
Your Dad would be so proud!! This was a true delight to read. Actually made me think of the show "Gunsmoke" haha There are too many great stanzas to single out one.Loved the title and the photo you used was perfect! Absolutely brilliant!
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Your Dad would be so proud!! This was a true delight to read. Actually made me think of the show "Gunsmoke" haha There are too many great stanzas to single out one.Loved the title and the photo you used was perfect! Absolutely brilliant!
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thanks for the six! I'm so glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang.
Comment from Chris Davis
I think this a fun and 'colorful' write... I could picture Jerry Jing-Jang as I was reading. How wonderful also to honor those precious memories of your Dad. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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I think this a fun and 'colorful' write... I could picture Jerry Jing-Jang as I was reading. How wonderful also to honor those precious memories of your Dad. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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So glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for this wonderful review.
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You're welcome... :)
Comment from fairydancer
Ha ha! What a well told tale. Funny, clever and addictive stuff. Great cadence and rhyming too.
I look forward to reading more of your writes - Cally :)
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Ha ha! What a well told tale. Funny, clever and addictive stuff. Great cadence and rhyming too.
I look forward to reading more of your writes - Cally :)
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Thanks for the six! You're welcome to check out 'Jerry Jing-Jang and the Cattle Rustlers' in my portfolio if you like. I'm currently looking for more adventures for him.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliant, and I don't have a six to give you! I think the sheriff and the deputy should have been sacked! I love the name your father gave him, Jerry jing-jang, has a certain ring about it! Good luck in the contest, you stand a very good chance of winning with this one! xsx
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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That was brilliant, and I don't have a six to give you! I think the sheriff and the deputy should have been sacked! I love the name your father gave him, Jerry jing-jang, has a certain ring about it! Good luck in the contest, you stand a very good chance of winning with this one! xsx
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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I'll take the six you'd like to give it. His real name is Gerry. He made up the Jing-Jang himself. I changed the first letter so kids could sound it out easier. Thanks for the review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Cindy Warren ....
This is a very enjoyable story and you have good rhyming but you have not maintained a smooth, easy-to-read metre or rhythm. If you corrected this, you would greatly enhance your poem and it is good to know that it is based on true stories handed on to you by your Father.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Hullo Cindy Warren ....
This is a very enjoyable story and you have good rhyming but you have not maintained a smooth, easy-to-read metre or rhythm. If you corrected this, you would greatly enhance your poem and it is good to know that it is based on true stories handed on to you by your Father.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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I'm glad you enjoyed my story poem. I'm working on the flow. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'J----J---J Comes to Town' is an extremely well-written and entertaining piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. The truth of course will always come out.
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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'J----J---J Comes to Town' is an extremely well-written and entertaining piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. The truth of course will always come out.
Comment Written 26-May-2012
reply by the author on 26-May-2012
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Jerry Jing-Jang always wins. My grandchildren wouldn't have it any other way. Neither would the real Jerry Jing-Jang. I'm glad I could entertain you. Thanks for the wonderful review.
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Cindy Warren, you're more than welcome. Jerry Jing-Jang sounds like quite a charachter.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from adewpearl
cowboys in the west - West
I love the alliterative name of this cowboy
strong use of rhyming couplets
good steady cadence
good alliteration in couldn't rustle, couldn't rob
vivid descriptive detail that tells a fascinating story of life in the Old West
good alliteration in turned tail and fight fair
and in brash and bold
I love that the good cowboy in the white hat winds in the end! :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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cowboys in the west - West
I love the alliterative name of this cowboy
strong use of rhyming couplets
good steady cadence
good alliteration in couldn't rustle, couldn't rob
vivid descriptive detail that tells a fascinating story of life in the Old West
good alliteration in turned tail and fight fair
and in brash and bold
I love that the good cowboy in the white hat winds in the end! :-) Brooke
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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In my westerns the good guy always wins. My grandchildren wouldn't have it otherwise. So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for this wonderful review.
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Real life can be such a downer - I'm all for stories where good triumphs :-)
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If you liked that one you can check out 'Jerry Jing-Jang and the Cattle Rustlers' in my portfilio. The good guy wins again.
Comment from PJJuarez
A nice written story in this poem. It flowed good together and the rhymes were parallel to each other. Jerry Jing-Jang seems like such an interesting character, you brought out your dads story wonderfully. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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A nice written story in this poem. It flowed good together and the rhymes were parallel to each other. Jerry Jing-Jang seems like such an interesting character, you brought out your dads story wonderfully. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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I'm so glad you liked Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for this wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Doc Holiday
Good cowboy poem about the old west
Never heard of Jerry Jing-Jang, but we could have met sometime on the trail out there near Arizona.
Well-written tale!
Have a good one, Doc!
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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Good cowboy poem about the old west
Never heard of Jerry Jing-Jang, but we could have met sometime on the trail out there near Arizona.
Well-written tale!
Have a good one, Doc!
Comment Written 25-May-2012
reply by the author on 25-May-2012
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He's my dad. His real name is Gerry. He made up the Jing-Jang himself and told us some tall tales when we were kids. I'm glad you enjoyed my story poem. Thanks for a wonderful review.