A Lone Wolf
Wolf Contest Submission6 total reviews
Comment from DALLAS01
I really enjoyed this It is a moving statement on the nature of the hunter and a reminder of the white mans disregard concerning Native American culture.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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I really enjoyed this It is a moving statement on the nature of the hunter and a reminder of the white mans disregard concerning Native American culture.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much DALLAS01, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
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you're welcome.
Comment from rtobaygo
GREAT RHYMING. MESSAGE IS SUCCINCT, AND IS THE MINDSET OF NOT ONLY WILD ANIMALS (IF THEY DID HAVE ONE), BUT OF NATIVE AMERICANS AS WELL. EACH LINE HELD A MESSAGE THAT THE STANZA PULLED TOGETHER. GOOD JOB!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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GREAT RHYMING. MESSAGE IS SUCCINCT, AND IS THE MINDSET OF NOT ONLY WILD ANIMALS (IF THEY DID HAVE ONE), BUT OF NATIVE AMERICANS AS WELL. EACH LINE HELD A MESSAGE THAT THE STANZA PULLED TOGETHER. GOOD JOB!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for understanding my message Ray...blessings.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This was a great poem. So much emotion and sadness as man has taken so much from both animal and land....
Filled the prompt rules and a fine poem this is.
"A lone wolf gathers up his family,
Moving on again, to escape, to be free." // Powerful and a bit sad, yet will always need to move further away from man.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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This was a great poem. So much emotion and sadness as man has taken so much from both animal and land....
Filled the prompt rules and a fine poem this is.
"A lone wolf gathers up his family,
Moving on again, to escape, to be free." // Powerful and a bit sad, yet will always need to move further away from man.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Maureen
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much Maureen, for reading and reviewing...blessings.
Comment from robina1978
I liked this one a lot. Wolves is such a nice subject. You wrote about a difficult part of their life: threatened by humans. Good flow and rhyme all the way. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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I liked this one a lot. Wolves is such a nice subject. You wrote about a difficult part of their life: threatened by humans. Good flow and rhyme all the way. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing robina1978...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Bobbi22
This is an excellent poem about the wolf. A lot told about the life of the wolf and his instincts and survival. The last two lines sum it up nicely. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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This is an excellent poem about the wolf. A lot told about the life of the wolf and his instincts and survival. The last two lines sum it up nicely. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much for the six stars RightPics...I truly appreciate them and I am glad you enjoyed my poem...blessings.
Comment from Rama Rao
A fine poem for the contest. It moved freely, rhymed well and conveyed a good idea that man kills more than what is necessary. If you don't mind my saying so, this is not an uncommon idea.
Secondly,And he'll kill his whole family, if he can.- I get the drift of the line but kindly look at the pronouns and check what each of them relates to.
Thirdly,Each teaching the other valuable life lessons.- Each other is used with reference to two people. The line before it ended with people. Who is the other here?
Now you continue the poem with the word both-mighty hunters who kill only to feed. This excludes the man. So who is the second hunter?
Each brought to the extinction- here again each leaves room for doubt.
Maybe I am wrong, but I found the usage of each confusing and thought it fir to give my two cents worth.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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A fine poem for the contest. It moved freely, rhymed well and conveyed a good idea that man kills more than what is necessary. If you don't mind my saying so, this is not an uncommon idea.
Secondly,And he'll kill his whole family, if he can.- I get the drift of the line but kindly look at the pronouns and check what each of them relates to.
Thirdly,Each teaching the other valuable life lessons.- Each other is used with reference to two people. The line before it ended with people. Who is the other here?
Now you continue the poem with the word both-mighty hunters who kill only to feed. This excludes the man. So who is the second hunter?
Each brought to the extinction- here again each leaves room for doubt.
Maybe I am wrong, but I found the usage of each confusing and thought it fir to give my two cents worth.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2012
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Hi Ramo Rao...thanks for reading and reviewing...the whole poem revolves around the wolf and the native people...both having been mighty hunters and both who kill only to feed...also both having been treated the same way by the white man...perhaps I took it for granted that my message would be clearer...I was writing from a Native point of view as that is what I am...sorry if it was hard for you to understand...thank you again...blessings.
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I was referring to the usage of the words each, each other etc. Kindly check it out. RR.