A Dollar For Dooley
Ghosts and gold26 total reviews
Comment from Carole Rosa
Susan, This was a great story. It kept my interest from beginning to the end. The dialog was amazing. You have a talent for slipping into another world. I just write non-fiction, because that's what I know. I could never write fiction. That takes a special talent. Nice job. Carole
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Susan, This was a great story. It kept my interest from beginning to the end. The dialog was amazing. You have a talent for slipping into another world. I just write non-fiction, because that's what I know. I could never write fiction. That takes a special talent. Nice job. Carole
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Hey!! Thanks for reading this Carole! SO glad you liked it, I just thought since you were out there you might! Thank you so much...what a thrill...hug! Suse
Comment from missy98writer
Susan.
What an ass you wrote about. LOL. You are on a roll with these fiction stories. Your dialect is great. Your descriptive writing is very good. Your words paint the story action and scene. The old dutchman is a colorful character. I love this story. Please have a fabulous day, my friend. This story about ass is awesome. Old Dutchman want his ass back. I'm so funny. BTW, your art work is priceless.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Susan.
What an ass you wrote about. LOL. You are on a roll with these fiction stories. Your dialect is great. Your descriptive writing is very good. Your words paint the story action and scene. The old dutchman is a colorful character. I love this story. Please have a fabulous day, my friend. This story about ass is awesome. Old Dutchman want his ass back. I'm so funny. BTW, your art work is priceless.
Melissa.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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:) YOU are!! I love hearing from you Melissa...I think humor is great, especially from someone like you. I mean it. JUST enough oneriness to make it real. Thank you again, I love this review too! :)) xoxo, Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Goiod story Susan. You do fiction so well. . They have decided to do a 'procedure' to try and fix my stomach without surgery. It will be on the 30th. It may work or they may have to do surgery anyway. All I know is that I want some solid food!!! Love ya, Hope you are feeling better!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Goiod story Susan. You do fiction so well. . They have decided to do a 'procedure' to try and fix my stomach without surgery. It will be on the 30th. It may work or they may have to do surgery anyway. All I know is that I want some solid food!!! Love ya, Hope you are feeling better!!! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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HI Deb! Thank you again, I am worried about you, and Ine too. We three have some darker days ahead, but then HOPEFULLY, brighter ones. Thanks for this review, but more importantly, take good care okay? I have had no serious pain for almost 23 hours...i don't understand. I was suffering for 7 days prior...who knows. Love you too Deb! Susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
Good piece, well done, well paced and yet a sad ending. That, of course, is where a lot of your work goes.
A bit much on the dialect for my taste, but your had to write your story your way.
Ted
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Hi Susan :)
Good piece, well done, well paced and yet a sad ending. That, of course, is where a lot of your work goes.
A bit much on the dialect for my taste, but your had to write your story your way.
Ted
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Hi Ted, thank you so much! I gave my next character life and a happy ending, just for you! hugs for taking time for me! :)) Susan
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Okay, sounds good.
You need to become more positive in your work and life.
Ted
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have been reading so much lately about cruelty to donkeys. I know that has nothing to do with your post, but I still am upset over it so have to share that.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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I have been reading so much lately about cruelty to donkeys. I know that has nothing to do with your post, but I still am upset over it so have to share that.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Hi Barb! Well, I always think I have an original idea, lol, but I think literally every subject has been covered. So, hopefully my little burro was more interesting than the others? :) I do appreciate your time to read this and share a review...hug, Susan
Comment from Alaskastory
'A Dollar For Dooley' is a well written story. Dobb's dialog sounds so real that it vividly portrays the old man. Dooley, too, has personality in his actions.
Very enjoyable tale.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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'A Dollar For Dooley' is a well written story. Dobb's dialog sounds so real that it vividly portrays the old man. Dooley, too, has personality in his actions.
Very enjoyable tale.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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hi Alaska! Thank you very much! I'm honored to have a six and more, to know you enjoyed my efforts! Very nice! Hope you are keeping warm? Luv, Susan
Comment from BethShelby
You really did a wonderful job of building suspense. It is a mysterious setting and your foreshadowing alerts the reader to fact this isn't going to end well. It is the stuff that fuels legends.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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You really did a wonderful job of building suspense. It is a mysterious setting and your foreshadowing alerts the reader to fact this isn't going to end well. It is the stuff that fuels legends.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2012
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Hi McBeth! HUG, and smiles...I'm so glad you enjoyed this...I worked hard on it, and really appreciate your reading it even with the swear words...hope it rang true. Thank you again Beth!! luv, Susan
Comment from MumEsGirl
Great writing. Very sad story throughout. That poor burro. I began to hate his owner from the very first line.
In some ways I am glad he suffered for his greed.
Look forward to reading more
kate
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Great writing. Very sad story throughout. That poor burro. I began to hate his owner from the very first line.
In some ways I am glad he suffered for his greed.
Look forward to reading more
kate
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Hi Mums! Thank you for this kind review! It's always a pleasure hearing from you too. I hope you're keeping warm and safe! Storms everywhere it seems... :) Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this story about the donkey that saw things his owner couldn't. i enjoyed reading this one. great picture.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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this is very well written, susan, you did a great job writing this story about the donkey that saw things his owner couldn't. i enjoyed reading this one. great picture.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2012
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Hi there!! Please forgive this late thank you? I am trying to catch up...I am sorry, but always read and appreciate hearing your thoughts! HUG! Susan
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Realist101:
A dollar in exchange for his soul
Now that ole miner was mighty bold
to think he could keep his gold
when the saints on him had a greater hold
Seems that Dooley was indeed a wise ass
who knew something was off in that morass
he knew the difference between sand and grass
and when his time had come to pass
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Realist101:
A dollar in exchange for his soul
Now that ole miner was mighty bold
to think he could keep his gold
when the saints on him had a greater hold
Seems that Dooley was indeed a wise ass
who knew something was off in that morass
he knew the difference between sand and grass
and when his time had come to pass
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 20-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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HI Jan! Thank you so much...I liked this little story, and appreciate your time to read and send it a great review! I'm sitting here nervous as a cat in a roomfull of rockers, the wind is HOWLING! Lord, I hope we don't get a tornado! Thanks again Jan!! oxox! Susan