The Gift
A foal is born41 total reviews
Comment from Mammothbay
Hi there, overall, I really liked this piece. However, I think tha it probably could have been extended a little longer. I love the cat bit! Very creative! I did find it a little odd that it was from the point of view of the horse, but the series "Warriors" was from the point of cats, and that went over well, so I'm sure it's fine. Nice job!
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Hi there, overall, I really liked this piece. However, I think tha it probably could have been extended a little longer. I love the cat bit! Very creative! I did find it a little odd that it was from the point of view of the horse, but the series "Warriors" was from the point of cats, and that went over well, so I'm sure it's fine. Nice job!
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2012
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Sorry it's not long enuff. Let me know what technicalities I need to fix? Thanks. Susan
Comment from mparker016
Normally I litter the reviewer notes thing with suggestions and constructive criticism but I really couldn't with this. It's so well written.
It's very dramatic as well. I was unsure until the last few lines whether the little foal had even survived. But some wonderful imagery at the end put my mind at rest.
Really good job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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Normally I litter the reviewer notes thing with suggestions and constructive criticism but I really couldn't with this. It's so well written.
It's very dramatic as well. I was unsure until the last few lines whether the little foal had even survived. But some wonderful imagery at the end put my mind at rest.
Really good job.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2012
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hi there! I am very glad to hear you enjoyed this, and your review is not only kind, but encouraging too! Thank you very much! Susan
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Susan:)
You already know what a horse person I am. I have been present for the arrival of more than one foal and it always is a magical moment as the mother attempts to bring her baby to life in the exact way you describe by licking, prodding and nudging her baby.
Your words capture all the drama, uncertainty and fear of failure, until her baby rises on spindly legs and then instinctively seeks its first meal.
The moon, old tomcat and plastic clock show your careful attention to details and make this story special. I loook forward to more great chapters.
Love and Irish hugs, dear friend,
Roger
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Hi Susan:)
You already know what a horse person I am. I have been present for the arrival of more than one foal and it always is a magical moment as the mother attempts to bring her baby to life in the exact way you describe by licking, prodding and nudging her baby.
Your words capture all the drama, uncertainty and fear of failure, until her baby rises on spindly legs and then instinctively seeks its first meal.
The moon, old tomcat and plastic clock show your careful attention to details and make this story special. I loook forward to more great chapters.
Love and Irish hugs, dear friend,
Roger
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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OH Roger!! You have made me smile again. What a thrill. Each time you approve I'm encouraged just that much more...SO glad you love horses...wow. Hugs back and thank you so much my friend...xoxo. Susan
Comment from Rahul@ISM_India
I really enjoyed this chapter,Really interesting
Perfect artwork to compliment your story
Thanks for sharing
Pleasure reading and reviewing
Wish you a Happy New Year!!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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I really enjoyed this chapter,Really interesting
Perfect artwork to compliment your story
Thanks for sharing
Pleasure reading and reviewing
Wish you a Happy New Year!!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Hi Rahul! Thank you! I'm very happy you enjoyed this! AND for your time for me too! Susan
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey Susan,
First of all best wishes for the new Year. This is nicely crafted and laid out. Your use of the moon (Luna and a coat of sparkling, silver moon glow is so cool. Horse lovers of the world come together when we foal. Nice one here
Bear
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Hey Susan,
First of all best wishes for the new Year. This is nicely crafted and laid out. Your use of the moon (Luna and a coat of sparkling, silver moon glow is so cool. Horse lovers of the world come together when we foal. Nice one here
Bear
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Hi there Bear! Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, and I send you happy thoughts as well! Keep warm! lol! Susan
Comment from Bellringer
Susan, this was a most satisfying and life affirming tale. It spoke of motherhood and the miracle of life that often goes unnoticed. The dynamic tension in this "ordinary" moment was palpable. The fantasy element of the moon light was brilliant and, in a sense, spiritual. Great start to the New year! Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Susan, this was a most satisfying and life affirming tale. It spoke of motherhood and the miracle of life that often goes unnoticed. The dynamic tension in this "ordinary" moment was palpable. The fantasy element of the moon light was brilliant and, in a sense, spiritual. Great start to the New year! Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Hi Hector! Thank you so much! Once more, the sixer is so encouraging. Even still, I want to keep improving. Never fear to tell me when I do something wrong? Smiles!! Susan
Comment from Deepakurup
'The Gift' is a fantastic example of wonderful narration.The narration of child birth with such grace,dignity empathy and flow is amazing.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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'The Gift' is a fantastic example of wonderful narration.The narration of child birth with such grace,dignity empathy and flow is amazing.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Hi Mini! Thank you very much! SO glad you liked this and I'm very grateful for this lovely and most welcomed review! I hope you are keeping warm, where ever you are! Susan
Comment from misscookie
What a beauitful story to read.
your was the first this morning.
iiloved how the story moved and there was never a dull moments
This was a delight to read.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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What a beauitful story to read.
your was the first this morning.
iiloved how the story moved and there was never a dull moments
This was a delight to read.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Thank you Cookie! SO glad you liked this...I was hoping you would. I hope you have a wonderful day! HUG! Susan
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You are very welcome, and yes my day was wonderful I did some serious house cleamnig and clean out a close. the more I get rid of the more I find. take care.
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OH good! I need to do this too! AS soon as I get over this mess! :)) xx! Susan
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Take it slow and easy child because it will always be there trust me.
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I'm trying to Cookie...I finally got the right medicine, my kidney stent got infected and so i'm on anti-biotics now...MUCH better. I could barely walk!! Whew! S.
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Praise God your getting better who taking care of the animals for you?
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My son tries to help. I am so weak now, just from weeks of not doing much, it'll be hard getting back to it. Thank you for asking Cookie! Thanks for caring....X! Susan
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God bless you to be a strong woman. just take it easy so there will be nop other problems. Okay.
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") I will try Cookie...I've been cooped up in the house for weeks...so today, I want to go do some walking in a store...gee. Just to look and daydream. :/ S.
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I just don't how woimen or men do that I just go crazy just looking.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Susan,
I would so afraid this little filly was going to die and I was so relieved that she didn't. This is a wonderful story of patients and perseverance. I have seen colts born and it is a magical experience. They are so cute when they stand on their new and wobbly legs. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Hi Susan,
I would so afraid this little filly was going to die and I was so relieved that she didn't. This is a wonderful story of patients and perseverance. I have seen colts born and it is a magical experience. They are so cute when they stand on their new and wobbly legs. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2012
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Oh, I'm so glad you read this Chey. And that you've had/seen, the wonderment of foals coming into the world too. If you can, watch the movie Secretariat! I promise you will love it. The real owner of 'Big Red' is in it too! ")) xx. Susan
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I did see that movie and I agree it is wonderful.
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Oh good...I still, get tingly as he comes around the bend to win the Triple Crown. Diane Lane narrates and it makes me 'cry' strange tears of awe?? How odd. x.S.
Comment from Sasha
You never cease to impress and amaze me. This is such a beautiful story with awesome imagery that paint a stunning picture of the precarious nature of life. This is exceptional work and I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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You never cease to impress and amaze me. This is such a beautiful story with awesome imagery that paint a stunning picture of the precarious nature of life. This is exceptional work and I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Hi Sasha...wow! You always know just the right words...thank you for enjoying this and for taking time to let me know too. I always, always appreciate you. love! Suse