The Glass Cat Eye
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Lord of Witchcraft"Talking to the dead has its consequences
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Comment from Paradox Tremors
Sorry, ran out of hose disappearing "sixes"--but believe me when I say this deserves a six. Well written. For a brief moment I actually thought something would go right and Steve and Esther (still love that name) could steal away into the night without being caught--of course, that would've made for a dull ending leaving Doc to his own fate alone. Love the writing my friend.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Sorry, ran out of hose disappearing "sixes"--but believe me when I say this deserves a six. Well written. For a brief moment I actually thought something would go right and Steve and Esther (still love that name) could steal away into the night without being caught--of course, that would've made for a dull ending leaving Doc to his own fate alone. Love the writing my friend.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much. Your opinion means more than sixes, believe it or not. I appreciate your time and energy.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Harriett. You certainly have a knack for writing this genre, I will give you that right off. You use strong verbs and show a ton of imagery...that's All so important in writing good stuff. Example:
"Then like a flash of light, he broke towards the guard, crashing into his side and knocking him to the floor. He adjusted his body to execute a head scissor lock, but was surprised how quickly the big man scrambled to his feet" (crashing, knocking, scrambling) all good
I must be honest with you I am not a sci-fi fan but this is good writing and has appeal regardless. Good job...Bob
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Hi, Harriett. You certainly have a knack for writing this genre, I will give you that right off. You use strong verbs and show a ton of imagery...that's All so important in writing good stuff. Example:
"Then like a flash of light, he broke towards the guard, crashing into his side and knocking him to the floor. He adjusted his body to execute a head scissor lock, but was surprised how quickly the big man scrambled to his feet" (crashing, knocking, scrambling) all good
I must be honest with you I am not a sci-fi fan but this is good writing and has appeal regardless. Good job...Bob
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much. My writing has improved thanks to you and many who review my writing. Blessings to you and have a great weekend.
Comment from starsong
I can never get enough of stories about magic and witchcraft-this was a lot of fun to read. The dialogue was really good, but I feel there should be more descriptions about the environment they are in.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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I can never get enough of stories about magic and witchcraft-this was a lot of fun to read. The dialogue was really good, but I feel there should be more descriptions about the environment they are in.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review. The environment was described in the previous chapter.
Comment from lola29
You are fast becoming quite the professional. Your writing, which has an flawless flow, makes it easy for the reader to stay engaged. Excellent!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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You are fast becoming quite the professional. Your writing, which has an flawless flow, makes it easy for the reader to stay engaged. Excellent!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much lola. Thanks to you and a few others here, I've become a better writer. I hope to be even better. Blessings to you and have a great weekend.
Comment from moyramouse
Esther, with sadden(saddened) eyes
God send (godsend)
This was action packed! You created excellent atmosphere and tension throughout and the dialogue was believable. How are they going to get out of this situation? Can't wait to see what Doc has up his sleeve and how 'Lima' is important! I suspected that Madame Reece was not quite the lady she pretended to be. I think if Steven and Esther get out of this they will be an item. No-one else would put their life on the line for her. xxmouse
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Esther, with sadden(saddened) eyes
God send (godsend)
This was action packed! You created excellent atmosphere and tension throughout and the dialogue was believable. How are they going to get out of this situation? Can't wait to see what Doc has up his sleeve and how 'Lima' is important! I suspected that Madame Reece was not quite the lady she pretended to be. I think if Steven and Esther get out of this they will be an item. No-one else would put their life on the line for her. xxmouse
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you xxmouse for your critical eye and knowledge. Madame seems to be writing herself. I wanted her to be innocently screwing things up, but she had other ideas. LOL. I will make the corrections you suggested immediately. Blessings to you. Have a great weekend.
Comment from 7thpoet
Wow! Such suspense and intrigue. What does doc have to do? Do they escape or does Azi Dakar actually appear for the witch? All these questions no answers...must, Read, on...
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Wow! Such suspense and intrigue. What does doc have to do? Do they escape or does Azi Dakar actually appear for the witch? All these questions no answers...must, Read, on...
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. Blessings to you.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have not read any of your previous chapter, but this one flowed at a good pace. You have a good plot and the characters are well developed. You even now have a human sacrifice.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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I have not read any of your previous chapter, but this one flowed at a good pace. You have a good plot and the characters are well developed. You even now have a human sacrifice.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2011
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Thank you Barbara. I'm now writing chapter 10 and hope you'll enjoy it.
Comment from The Stranger
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this tale of mythology, I am a big fan of Lord Of The Rings, though this is in no way attempting to copy it, the same "magical aura" surrounds this, simply excellent
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this tale of mythology, I am a big fan of Lord Of The Rings, though this is in no way attempting to copy it, the same "magical aura" surrounds this, simply excellent
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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Thank you so much. I'm really trying to end this as exciting as it began. I really appreciate your reading and review. Hope you keep hanging in there with me.
Comment from ulster3
Hello amahra...
This is another edge of the seat kind of read. That Madame Reece is a very scary individual. I hope Steve and Esther can get away but it looks pretty grim at the moment. I find I'm quite wrapped up in your wonderful story.
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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Hello amahra...
This is another edge of the seat kind of read. That Madame Reece is a very scary individual. I hope Steve and Esther can get away but it looks pretty grim at the moment. I find I'm quite wrapped up in your wonderful story.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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Thank you Rebecca. I'm so glad that you read and reviewed my story. Blessings to you.
Comment from Chuck23
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story, amahra! I like the way you ended this chapter with a lead in to the next one. I'm looking forward to learning more about the demon, are you going to bring that creature more into the next chapter?
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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I enjoyed reading this chapter of your story, amahra! I like the way you ended this chapter with a lead in to the next one. I'm looking forward to learning more about the demon, are you going to bring that creature more into the next chapter?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
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Thank you Chuck. I'm not sure if it will be the next chapter, but I know I'll have to bring it in soon. Every time I try to end the chapter, I feel it is too rushed. But I think I will. Even I'm getting impatient. lol I'm glad you liked it.