Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Chapter 12; part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from marcii
This was a well balanced chapter, it flowed effortlessly and at a good pace.
It was a good meeting of Mother and Daughter and the bit about Cassie wanting to be an Agent was just something I feel a child would say after a rescue like that.
Marcii
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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This was a well balanced chapter, it flowed effortlessly and at a good pace.
It was a good meeting of Mother and Daughter and the bit about Cassie wanting to be an Agent was just something I feel a child would say after a rescue like that.
Marcii
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I am sorry that you are reading these without the bonus points. Thank you.
Comment from connied
Thanks for using my art-
aloha,
Connied
enjoyed this:
"But, you were brave and it was great how you protected me and killed the bad guys." She paused, before she asked, "Can girls be secret agents?"
Joe glanced at Sara. "Yes, they can."
"No! They can't. Girls need nice safe jobs, like teachers and nurses," Sara interjected.
Joe glanced toward the door, hiding his grin. "I'm sure the excitement will wear off in a few days. You did raise her to have a mind of her own. She's just like her mom."
His eyes met hers, as he changed the subject. "I need to get back. There are two girls who need rescuing."
Sara walked up to him and placed her hand on his arm. "Joe, please ...."
"We'll talk when I get back." He stepped toward the door, but turned back and kissed her cheek. He grinned at Cassie. "Now, I've officially kissed your mom."
Sara touched her cheek and watched him leave the room. She took a deep breath, walked back to Cassie, and held her close.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
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Thanks for using my art-
aloha,
Connied
enjoyed this:
"But, you were brave and it was great how you protected me and killed the bad guys." She paused, before she asked, "Can girls be secret agents?"
Joe glanced at Sara. "Yes, they can."
"No! They can't. Girls need nice safe jobs, like teachers and nurses," Sara interjected.
Joe glanced toward the door, hiding his grin. "I'm sure the excitement will wear off in a few days. You did raise her to have a mind of her own. She's just like her mom."
His eyes met hers, as he changed the subject. "I need to get back. There are two girls who need rescuing."
Sara walked up to him and placed her hand on his arm. "Joe, please ...."
"We'll talk when I get back." He stepped toward the door, but turned back and kissed her cheek. He grinned at Cassie. "Now, I've officially kissed your mom."
Sara touched her cheek and watched him leave the room. She took a deep breath, walked back to Cassie, and held her close.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I felt your artword was perfect.
Comment from animatqua
I really like Cassie's attitude. She could have been so frightened by the experience that she never wanted to be near violence again. Instead, her first thoughts are how she can be as strong and as helpful as Joe. Nice character!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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I really like Cassie's attitude. She could have been so frightened by the experience that she never wanted to be near violence again. Instead, her first thoughts are how she can be as strong and as helpful as Joe. Nice character!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Really good. Cassie's character is absolutely believable. So was Sara's wanting details now that her daughter is safe. Which leaves Joe being protective of Sara and shushing Carrie. Enjoyed.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Really good. Cassie's character is absolutely believable. So was Sara's wanting details now that her daughter is safe. Which leaves Joe being protective of Sara and shushing Carrie. Enjoyed.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
He noticed Matt say something???
This is a very interesting chapter. I haven't read them all, but have read a few. You should listen to your doctor and get rested up. I will keep you in my thoughts and prayers. Have a Merry Christmas! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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He noticed Matt say something???
This is a very interesting chapter. I haven't read them all, but have read a few. You should listen to your doctor and get rested up. I will keep you in my thoughts and prayers. Have a Merry Christmas! Debbie
Comment Written 24-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and words of wisdom.
Comment from nora arjuna
hi barb, finally they are saved. as always nicely done, though i feel you rushed a bit somewhere in the middle where george breaks the news to sara.
just a suggestion:
he turned [his head] toward the window - how about removing the two words, or 'he glanced toward..'
happy celebration to you!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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hi barb, finally they are saved. as always nicely done, though i feel you rushed a bit somewhere in the middle where george breaks the news to sara.
just a suggestion:
he turned [his head] toward the window - how about removing the two words, or 'he glanced toward..'
happy celebration to you!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind reviw and eagle eyes.
Comment from RugbyBottle
Hey, I havn't read the previous chapters, however the chapter was still entertaining. Lots of good descriptive writing. And a good job building the romance part of the story too.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Hey, I havn't read the previous chapters, however the chapter was still entertaining. Lots of good descriptive writing. And a good job building the romance part of the story too.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lisasolorio1
Well I have enjoyed so far what you have posted and look forward to reading the rest of the 70 pages. As well as for you I hope you get better and try to enjoy your Christmas. There has been some pretty ugly viruses going around that last for a long time so take care.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Well I have enjoyed so far what you have posted and look forward to reading the rest of the 70 pages. As well as for you I hope you get better and try to enjoy your Christmas. There has been some pretty ugly viruses going around that last for a long time so take care.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragement.
Comment from essence56
I want to thank this writer for the effort and style put into this story. It is outstanding. You continue to take care of yourself and follow doctor's orders. I love your writing and want to see and read more of you. I am learning alot from you. Thanks Barb
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2010
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I want to thank this writer for the effort and style put into this story. It is outstanding. You continue to take care of yourself and follow doctor's orders. I love your writing and want to see and read more of you. I am learning alot from you. Thanks Barb
Comment Written 23-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Scornwell
I thought this was well written. Your characters remain strong and the dialog sounds realistic and seems consistent with the characters.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2010
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I thought this was well written. Your characters remain strong and the dialog sounds realistic and seems consistent with the characters.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.