Cheryl
Where is she?20 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
A cute ending and a little unexpected. The story had some sizzle to it as well. I should have guessed it earlier though ... lol ... rarely does a man actually feel this way about any of the women I know and I know quite a few similar to what you describe ... awww well thank God for imaginations hey? xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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A cute ending and a little unexpected. The story had some sizzle to it as well. I should have guessed it earlier though ... lol ... rarely does a man actually feel this way about any of the women I know and I know quite a few similar to what you describe ... awww well thank God for imaginations hey? xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 12-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2011
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Hi, Kiwigirl. Thanks for reading my story. Yes, where would any of us be without our imagination? The world would be pretty dull. That's a shame that you don't believe men feel this way about women. There are more of us who feel that way than not. Unfortunately, many guys are just idiots and don't get it. - John
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was going to tease you about your fantasy, but I can't it's the fantasy of a teenage male, so it's understandable. I enjoyed reading it.
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I was going to tease you about your fantasy, but I can't it's the fantasy of a teenage male, so it's understandable. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2010
Comment from Winslow
Dear Thesis,
Quite a wet dream that is for sure. I thought it too good to be true. (LOL) Actually this story finishes on a sas note, since Robby will never be able to enjoy Cheryl's body for real.
Regards,
Winslow
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Dear Thesis,
Quite a wet dream that is for sure. I thought it too good to be true. (LOL) Actually this story finishes on a sas note, since Robby will never be able to enjoy Cheryl's body for real.
Regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
Comment from Rama Rao
What a fantasy of a young school going lad!
I thought it was an entry for purple prose, but it made sensuous reading.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
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What a fantasy of a young school going lad!
I thought it was an entry for purple prose, but it made sensuous reading.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
Comment from bookishfabler
YOu do to erotica what I do to my tales. take something familiar, lead the reader tot he right, and at the last second, turn the wheel hand spin to the left. Maybe that is why I like your writing style, thought the genre isn't what I would pick up in the library or bok store. Only one nit I saw.
"I know she's your best friend, Becky. But, she is (she's)really hot. Don't tell Mom, okay
Great job andgood luck in the contest.
hugs book
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YOu do to erotica what I do to my tales. take something familiar, lead the reader tot he right, and at the last second, turn the wheel hand spin to the left. Maybe that is why I like your writing style, thought the genre isn't what I would pick up in the library or bok store. Only one nit I saw.
"I know she's your best friend, Becky. But, she is (she's)really hot. Don't tell Mom, okay
Great job andgood luck in the contest.
hugs book
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
Comment from prophetess
Lol, nice twist Thesis. I like the way you start out slow, guide your way into a frenzied crescendo, and then bring us down to a warm and cuddly place. All as it should be. ~wink~
Good job my friend.
Prophetess
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Lol, nice twist Thesis. I like the way you start out slow, guide your way into a frenzied crescendo, and then bring us down to a warm and cuddly place. All as it should be. ~wink~
Good job my friend.
Prophetess
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
Comment from Shirley B
I started to give you a 1. "-) Because let's just say it was starting to get warm in here. Your imagery is pretty darn good there! Then you start talking about a sister. Bummer! Great job as always, Shirley
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I started to give you a 1. "-) Because let's just say it was starting to get warm in here. Your imagery is pretty darn good there! Then you start talking about a sister. Bummer! Great job as always, Shirley
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
Comment from Lastamen
Poor Robby, I understand his plight all too well, longing for a love that is far beyond you, as a youth. The story reads well but I could see the conclusion coming a mile away. Perhaps a bit more shock value with something totally unexpected like Cheryl being his sister or mother! Now that would have been a conclusion.
Till the last amen
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Poor Robby, I understand his plight all too well, longing for a love that is far beyond you, as a youth. The story reads well but I could see the conclusion coming a mile away. Perhaps a bit more shock value with something totally unexpected like Cheryl being his sister or mother! Now that would have been a conclusion.
Till the last amen
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Comment Written 16-Nov-2010
Comment from Popcorn69
This was great and surprising. Your descriptions and background setting was good. Your details about clothes, the passion, and events leading to a logical conclusion. Then the perfect twist. Good writing!
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This was great and surprising. Your descriptions and background setting was good. Your details about clothes, the passion, and events leading to a logical conclusion. Then the perfect twist. Good writing!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2010
Comment from Gungalo
LOL this is grrrrrrrrrrrrreat! What a tale you have spun through a dream. The ending is enough to make one fall off the chair with laughter. Typical brother sister stuff for sure, well except for the dream.
Some awesome imagery here. Love the infinity pool!! Excellent write my friend.
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LOL this is grrrrrrrrrrrrreat! What a tale you have spun through a dream. The ending is enough to make one fall off the chair with laughter. Typical brother sister stuff for sure, well except for the dream.
Some awesome imagery here. Love the infinity pool!! Excellent write my friend.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2010