Turquoise Mountains
The People wept for rain31 total reviews
Comment from anne1204
I loved this one, very interesting author notes about the skystone. Turquoise is one of my favorite semiprecious stone. I have a few pieces I love to wear. The rhyme is great and each line is easy to read and flow nicely to the nest. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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I loved this one, very interesting author notes about the skystone. Turquoise is one of my favorite semiprecious stone. I have a few pieces I love to wear. The rhyme is great and each line is easy to read and flow nicely to the nest. Anne 1204
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2010
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Hi again! Neat that you own some! ") Wow, I love jewelry made of turquoise. But it's something I would not wear. I get too dirty and grungy. Maybe someday I will get a rind! ") Thanks again Anne!! ") Susan
Comment from Ted T
Hi Susan :)
Well executed, structured with a universal message and a touch of American history.
The picture serves the piece quite well
I liked the way you crafted your stanzas and the font and color is easy to read.
Good writing.
Ted
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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Hi Susan :)
Well executed, structured with a universal message and a touch of American history.
The picture serves the piece quite well
I liked the way you crafted your stanzas and the font and color is easy to read.
Good writing.
Ted
Comment Written 18-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2010
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") Thank you Ted! I did try hard with this. It was a fun contest...and turquoise is my fav. gem. ") So good to hear from you!! Susan
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You're welcome :)
Comment from Judian James
I loved this piece Sue!! I do think I'd change out "she" to "did" in the second line, but otherwise, marvelous and educational. I had no idea!! Excellent!!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I loved this piece Sue!! I do think I'd change out "she" to "did" in the second line, but otherwise, marvelous and educational. I had no idea!! Excellent!!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Well, hello there Judian! I was NOT going to reply to this wonderful review, until I orderd Resonate, ") FINALLY, it is on its way. 2 biz days, they say. Thank you for being such a helpful and fun, and NICE reviewer to me Jude! Smiles! Susan
Comment from E.P. Thomas
Su,
It seems I'm always apologizing for being such a poor fan. I've been remiss once again, but I promise to catch up on those pieces of yours that I've waited too long to review. I like this poem very much. Next to haiku, rhyming couplets are my favorite kind of poetry because its something my prosody-ignorant mind can understand. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Su,
It seems I'm always apologizing for being such a poor fan. I've been remiss once again, but I promise to catch up on those pieces of yours that I've waited too long to review. I like this poem very much. Next to haiku, rhyming couplets are my favorite kind of poetry because its something my prosody-ignorant mind can understand. Excellent work.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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It's okay, I do understand g! good to hear, and thank you for this heartwarming review! I am a simple person, so my poems reflect, I guess? I like haiku too, short and sweet! ") Susan
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Great micro I just read of yours.
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A hug for your confidence g! S.
Comment from Alf Garnett jnr.
Hi Susan. Well, what a super and very kind-on-the-eye poem.
A really delightful read, and, are you familiar with the
blue ridge mountains? I saw them in a film called: Kissin'
Cousins! An Elvis film. But your poem just sums up the real
tranquility of the mountain scenery.
Well written, Susan. Best wishes and God bless you.
From, Darryl. xxx
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Susan. Well, what a super and very kind-on-the-eye poem.
A really delightful read, and, are you familiar with the
blue ridge mountains? I saw them in a film called: Kissin'
Cousins! An Elvis film. But your poem just sums up the real
tranquility of the mountain scenery.
Well written, Susan. Best wishes and God bless you.
From, Darryl. xxx
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Darryl! THANK YOU! What a kind review! I love it! I wanted to tell you, the mountains in this poem would be out west, in Arizona, maybe the Superstition Mountains, or something? Like near the Grand Canyon? I do love the Blue Ridge Mountains tho, full of some bad AND good...hillbillies. AND i love Elvis too. Thanks Darryl. IT's great to hear you liked this one ! ") xoxo. Susan
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Hi Susan. It sounds like the film:
Deliverance? With Burt Reynolds, Jon Voight, and the other one. When
they ran-in to some really nasty hillbillies! The best hillbillies I've known are: "The...Beverly Hillbillies". Striking Black Gold!
Take care Susan. God bless you all.
From Darryl.xxx
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Hi Susan. I've just been informed, the "WINNER" of a very recent Halloween contest, was also a SPONSER!!!! How predictable, eh? Take care. From Darryl.
Comment from Joan E.
I think it is fascinating that you never needed to use the word "turquoise" in the body of your poem because of all of your other descriptions and fine storytelling. Thank you for sharing this Native American tale in rhyming couplets.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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I think it is fascinating that you never needed to use the word "turquoise" in the body of your poem because of all of your other descriptions and fine storytelling. Thank you for sharing this Native American tale in rhyming couplets.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Joan! Thank you! I love turquoise and our native people so much. This was a fun one! Susan
Comment from bard owl
Well done! THis sounds like it should be an American Indian legend. You have described the mother's grief and the miracle of the turquoise well. Excellent read. Best of luck. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Well done! THis sounds like it should be an American Indian legend. You have described the mother's grief and the miracle of the turquoise well. Excellent read. Best of luck. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Linda! Thank you so much! I am glad you liked this effort!! ") Susan
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a great choice for
the contest, Susan - a good
contender.
it's heat too near
its heat
blue[,] fell from
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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What a great choice for
the contest, Susan - a good
contender.
it's heat too near
its heat
blue[,] fell from
Good luck to you, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Margaret! Thank you for this great review! I fixed the two things!! I will just never learn! ") I am thrilled that you liked this one too, I love turquoise and our native people too! It's a fun contest! All the entries are just beautiful! Thanks again Margaret!! ") Luv, Susan
Comment from marcii
A delightful poem that I felt emotions for those in it.
Your rhyming was unforced and your poem flowed throughout.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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A delightful poem that I felt emotions for those in it.
Your rhyming was unforced and your poem flowed throughout.
Good luck in the contest.
Marcii
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2010
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Hi Marcii! Thank you very much! I love these stones, and our native people too. I am very pleased that you enjoyed this effort! ") Susan
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
This is also a great entry, Susan. I may have went without the puntuation but I see no problems with it. Nice going on this.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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This is also a great entry, Susan. I may have went without the puntuation but I see no problems with it. Nice going on this.
Isaiah
Comment Written 16-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2010
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Hi Isaiah, thank you my friend. I love these stones, my favs! AND our native people too! Thank you for reading it and for this wonderful review too! Susan