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Awakened at 2 a.m.

Hiding my sister-in-law

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Comment from closetpoetjester
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I have come to the conclusion that you John are quite wicked.
But I love it.
Your writes sizzle from start to finish and you seem to have an endless possibity of ways, angles about all things sexual.
You were a very naughty boy here and as much as I was "tut tutting" I did enjoy the tittillating read.
Well constructed, perfectly written as always and presented on a steaming, erotic platter.
Well done and I adored it as always. Sorry it took me three days to get to the bottom of my message box.
Cheers and take care my wicked, wicked friend. Mwahaha!
Closet xoxoxo

 Comment Written 16-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 17-Aug-2010
    Lol. Wicked, eh? I just love the sensual part of life. Too many people overlook it and ...well, that's a shame. At least naughty gets people to think, comment and react. Naughty is much more fun than boring, don't you think?

    I really appreciate your responses. You've become a good friend here on Fanstory. - Thanks - John
reply by closetpoetjester on 17-Aug-2010
    You too and yes I am a little bit naughty too, but it is fun isn't it.
    I feel the same way about my friendship with you John. You are now a dear friend.
    Glad to have you on my side so to speak.
    cheers friend
    Phillippa xo
Comment from missy98writer
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John,
what a naughty story you've written. I loved it. Another sexy gal you used as your art work. Excellent dialogue, sensual narrative and very descriptive writing. Here are the paragraphs that stood out for me:
Unlatching the deadbolt, I opened the door, to have Sara push her way inside, knocking me to the floor and falling on top of me in the darkness.
As she told me this, she started crying uncontrollably. She wrapped her hands around my neck and pushed her tight body hard against mine. Before I realized what was happening, she was hugging me tightly, kissing my neck and rubbing her body firmly, against mine. My boxers provided me little protection against the friction she was causing.
"Sara? Why would Sara come here at 2 a.m.? Jennifer left for Asia today; she'll be gone for a month. I don't expect to see Sara until Jennifer gets back. What's going on, Sam? Is everything all right?"
Locking the door and walking to the laundry room, I opened the door. Before I could say anything, Sara wrapped her arms around my neck and gave me the deepest French kiss I ever got.

Five minutes later, I was lost in ecstasy, as Sara rode me to climax. The sly smile on her face, told me she too, enjoyed the ride
"John, don't say another word. You're a lot more handsome than Sam. I'd do you in a heartbeat anyway. Besides, I'd be helping out my sister, making sure you didn't go to any bars and come home with a disease. With me, you don't even have to wear a condom."
I was able to take the next three weeks off as vacation, having Sara spend eight hours a day with me. I explored every inch of her body; skinny dipped in the pool and made love to her at least three times a day.
Little did she know that Sara was making sure my appetite was well satisfied.
Just wait until Jennifer or Sam learns the truth. What a devious story about adultery. You're a fabulous story teller. Keep up the erotic writing. . .Melissa.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010

Comment from irishauthorme
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Every guy's fantasy, and you got it right this time! I am thankful that my sister-in-law lives a long ways away, or I'm sure that I would be in trouble1
Very well written, you did good sex scenes withoput any sleaze, or without overdoing them, where everybody comes together every time.
Godd job!
irish

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2010

Comment from barbara.wilkey
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we stayed holed up in my house (stayed held up)

You are amazing. You're muse must keep you extra busy. This is another very good read.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2010

Comment from LadyWave
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Well, well, what a very naughty story. Quite deliciously naughty in fact. I was totally invested in the characters from the start. Very nice work.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    Thank you so much. Many of my stories tend to be on the naughty side. I feel it's my duty to balance out all the religious offerings on the site, lol. - John
Comment from c_lucas
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. This is a touchy situation with the potential of blowing up at any moment.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    Thanks, Charlie. Yes, this could be quite volatile, if the wife came home, :) - John
reply by c_lucas on 14-Aug-2010
    You did a good job.
Comment from NJTink
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Oh my, now that was a rather interesting short story. Just hope the sister does not cut her trip short. Someone or two will be in the doghouse. Great write.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    LOl, yes, it could get quite ugly, very quickly. Thanks for a fun review. - John
Comment from Jay Squires
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Well done, friend. Your writing is fast-paced, yet lingers in the right places.

Honestly, I don't think you needed to have this coded as Mature Adult, with all the warnings. The comic books kids read today are as racy as yours was. I think it would have done just fine with a little typed warning at the top.

Good luck on your writing.

Jay

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    Thanks, Jay. Initially, I didn't have the big warning, but some of the more conservatives on the sight, suggested it would be a good idea. - John
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
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This is a great, enjoyable story of 'sexapades'- but don't you think you should have put the 'Mature Warning' on this? Not sure what the rules are, in regards to this- but do think it should have the large Mature notice.
I found no spags- the story is very professionally written. A good write! Thanks, Betty

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    I'm always perplexed by this. I usually put that big warning if it's graphically written, but this one is suggestively written. However, because it might offend someone, I've put the bug warning on it. Thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. - John
Comment from jadapenn
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Oops, this was hot. Now naughty Sara and angelic John are having a whale of a time while sis is away. Wonder how many times this type of thing happens. Lol.
You told a wonderful and interesting story, Thesis. I enjoyed all the intrigue and hot sex. :) luv jada

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2010


reply by the author on 13-Aug-2010
    Hi, Jada. Thanks for enjoying my story. Hope all is well with you. Regards, - John