Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter 1 Part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Alexandra Laine
I love the casual small time feel. Could use a bit more visual context as to the main characters speaking and the yard, location etc.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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I love the casual small time feel. Could use a bit more visual context as to the main characters speaking and the yard, location etc.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the review. The rest of the descriptions come later, this is only part one of chapter 1
Comment from Forever&Always
Great way to start a book. Your grammar and punctuation are perfect. You did a great job describing your characters and setting the scene for the rest of the book. Truly written like a professional. Can't wait to continue reading.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Great way to start a book. Your grammar and punctuation are perfect. You did a great job describing your characters and setting the scene for the rest of the book. Truly written like a professional. Can't wait to continue reading.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank you for reading my post.
Comment from Nylsaj
This first chapter captured my attention from the beginning to the end. It flowed smoothly and has set the foundation for an exciting interaction with the main characters. I believe the writer is doing an excellent job because I have developed an appetite to have more. Thanks.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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This first chapter captured my attention from the beginning to the end. It flowed smoothly and has set the foundation for an exciting interaction with the main characters. I believe the writer is doing an excellent job because I have developed an appetite to have more. Thanks.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2010
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Thank you for going back and reading from the beginning. That is very special to an author.
Comment from KayteeF
I hope you don't mind, but I have decided to go back to the beginning.
I have not done much book reading recently, and I want to give my head a wee rest from my own work.
I have read through the chapters before, but I was not too comfortable about reviewing this type of work.
Now I just want to say, this is great work. It is like reading from an old friend.
Now, to the next part.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I hope you don't mind, but I have decided to go back to the beginning.
I have not done much book reading recently, and I want to give my head a wee rest from my own work.
I have read through the chapters before, but I was not too comfortable about reviewing this type of work.
Now I just want to say, this is great work. It is like reading from an old friend.
Now, to the next part.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Thank you for taking time to read my work. I am honored.
Comment from M.L. Gardner
I enjoyed this opening chapter. I think it introduced the characters well and followed a good pace. A couple of times the dialogue and/or characters actions seemed alittle forced, but I can't remember specifically, so it must not have left that severe an impression with me. And that might just be me. You seem to have a natural flow to your writing otherwise and I look forward to reading more!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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I enjoyed this opening chapter. I think it introduced the characters well and followed a good pace. A couple of times the dialogue and/or characters actions seemed alittle forced, but I can't remember specifically, so it must not have left that severe an impression with me. And that might just be me. You seem to have a natural flow to your writing otherwise and I look forward to reading more!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Deseree
Cute start to what looks like a romance. What i like so far is the tomboy in Cassie. And the conversation between cassies mom and Joe.
When Jeos mom remembered her cookies, I would have thought she would have made more of a fuss as mothers do.
Cant wait to read part two
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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Cute start to what looks like a romance. What i like so far is the tomboy in Cassie. And the conversation between cassies mom and Joe.
When Jeos mom remembered her cookies, I would have thought she would have made more of a fuss as mothers do.
Cant wait to read part two
Comment Written 01-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2010
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I am so sorry you weren't able to read this when there were bonus poings on it.
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Me too, but now that I have started reading it I am not stopping I want to see what happens
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Thank you very much.
Comment from skychild27
the author's notes are helpful, and its a well written scene placement. you're setting things up, getting ready to unleash the characters. well done so far.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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the author's notes are helpful, and its a well written scene placement. you're setting things up, getting ready to unleash the characters. well done so far.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Daphne W. Robinson
Good job setting the stage for what is to come. It helps to get a feel for the characters and the background of the neighborhood in which they live. I look forward to reading additional segments as they develop.
Daphne W. Robinson
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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Good job setting the stage for what is to come. It helps to get a feel for the characters and the background of the neighborhood in which they live. I look forward to reading additional segments as they develop.
Daphne W. Robinson
Comment Written 01-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2010
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I am not sure why you gave me a four for this chapter. I will make any corrections that you feel is needed, just tell what is needed.
Comment from meg2
Just now getting around to the first chapter, nice start good hook, good imagery. I like the characters and the dialog is good.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Just now getting around to the first chapter, nice start good hook, good imagery. I like the characters and the dialog is good.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I am sorry you didn't get to read this when it had the bonus points on it.
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Thank you for your kind review. I am sorry you didn't get to read this when it had the bonus points on it.
Comment from MysteryGirlz
This is very well written. I was drawn in from the first paragraph. You have done a great job of introducing each character without over doing it. Each character you spoke of seemed like an old friend.
I enjoyed how there was an immediate connection between Sara and Joe. I later learned that he was her brother's best friend. This added to the enjoyment of the reading.
My favorite part was toward the end of this chapter when Joe wants to know who Cassie's father is. Love the mystery of it. Can't wait until I have time to read more. Well done Barbara. Thank you for such an enjoyable story. It can only get better.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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This is very well written. I was drawn in from the first paragraph. You have done a great job of introducing each character without over doing it. Each character you spoke of seemed like an old friend.
I enjoyed how there was an immediate connection between Sara and Joe. I later learned that he was her brother's best friend. This added to the enjoyment of the reading.
My favorite part was toward the end of this chapter when Joe wants to know who Cassie's father is. Love the mystery of it. Can't wait until I have time to read more. Well done Barbara. Thank you for such an enjoyable story. It can only get better.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I am sorry you are reading after the bonus dollars have ended.