Damaged Goods
A Poem72 total reviews
Comment from wilkswrites
Wow!!!! This poem is magnificent and awful at the same time. Your rhyme scheme is on point, the flow of the poem is well-done. Most importantly, the story that is told is done so clearly that the reader is instantly captivated. The ending made me say out loud, "WOOOWWWWW!" as I came to realize that the victim was a boy. Oh my God. You have absolutely encouraged me to write about the multiple molestations that I have endured. It would be interesting to read about how this experience negatively impacted the victim later in life. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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Wow!!!! This poem is magnificent and awful at the same time. Your rhyme scheme is on point, the flow of the poem is well-done. Most importantly, the story that is told is done so clearly that the reader is instantly captivated. The ending made me say out loud, "WOOOWWWWW!" as I came to realize that the victim was a boy. Oh my God. You have absolutely encouraged me to write about the multiple molestations that I have endured. It would be interesting to read about how this experience negatively impacted the victim later in life. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
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I am glad I could inspire you to get it out, it's the best way to begin healing. As for the negative impact on MY life, I spent 30 plus years running, hiding behind shallow relationships, dead end jobs and drugs.I'm finally to a point where I feel I can live and actually be happy for the first time in a long, long time. Thanks again, and take care.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from K.W.
Wow. Amazing. Eloquent even while describing horrendous abasement and abuse. Stunningly vivid and sharp. Very moving and powerful. Would that I had a six. Very best, k
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Wow. Amazing. Eloquent even while describing horrendous abasement and abuse. Stunningly vivid and sharp. Very moving and powerful. Would that I had a six. Very best, k
Comment Written 28-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend, for your thoughts on this unpromoted piece. I am touched.
Curt
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My pleasure Curt!
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And my sorrow, as well.
Comment from Cmin7flat5
Wow. Truly, wow. This is so deep, so true. So sad. This poem brings out such raw emotion in the reader. I wish I could just grab that little boy and hug him and show him true honesty and care. Show him a better life and a peaceful world and a beautiful view on love. Yes, he might be damaged, he might be a victim. But he is also a survivor. Anyone who suffers this type of abuse and comes out on the other side, damaged or not, is a survivor. And that is something to be so, so proud of. The fact that you could write something so moving and still have it rhyme is beyond me, honestly. Personally, I find that when I try to rhyme my poetry is always comes out very "cheesy". I am very impressed with the advanced writing skills you display in this poem. And the idea of the song inside the boy's head...that just adds so much more. I can understand how that little boy is feeling. And I can understand how music can help one feel just that much safer. It is a staple within such chaos and danger. Something to hold on to when everything else is moving wildly around.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Wow. Truly, wow. This is so deep, so true. So sad. This poem brings out such raw emotion in the reader. I wish I could just grab that little boy and hug him and show him true honesty and care. Show him a better life and a peaceful world and a beautiful view on love. Yes, he might be damaged, he might be a victim. But he is also a survivor. Anyone who suffers this type of abuse and comes out on the other side, damaged or not, is a survivor. And that is something to be so, so proud of. The fact that you could write something so moving and still have it rhyme is beyond me, honestly. Personally, I find that when I try to rhyme my poetry is always comes out very "cheesy". I am very impressed with the advanced writing skills you display in this poem. And the idea of the song inside the boy's head...that just adds so much more. I can understand how that little boy is feeling. And I can understand how music can help one feel just that much safer. It is a staple within such chaos and danger. Something to hold on to when everything else is moving wildly around.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend, your heartfelt comments on this piece truly touch me. It is difficult for me to sometimes accept that other writers I admire think so highly of my writing, I have never taken a class or done anything but write how I feel in a way that expresses my emotions.
To know that I can touch you with the craft is all I can ask for, and I thank you once again for the honor of letting me write for you.
Curt
Comment from Gungalo
This was very good in that it hid none of what happened to that little boy. It is so sad that such monsters live among us. So very said indeed.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2013
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This was very good in that it hid none of what happened to that little boy. It is so sad that such monsters live among us. So very said indeed.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend. It is sad indeed that there are those that can rob the young of their innocence and a crime that most get away with it. Let us hope there is justice in another place for them.
Sincerely,
Curt
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I certainly hope so.
Comment from Marvel1963
It sounds strange saying this poem was enjoyable, it was not, it was heartbreaking, I felt the fear and pain. Well written
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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It sounds strange saying this poem was enjoyable, it was not, it was heartbreaking, I felt the fear and pain. Well written
Comment Written 12-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C
Comment from joki_smurf
Wow, this was powerful. I really felt your heart and soul in this poem, not everyone can be so naked in expressing themself through words. You painted a very vivid picture, I could actually see every moments you described. Incredible work.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Wow, this was powerful. I really felt your heart and soul in this poem, not everyone can be so naked in expressing themself through words. You painted a very vivid picture, I could actually see every moments you described. Incredible work.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C
Comment from Shannon Raili
Wow...this almost can leave you speackless. The sadness of reality is heartbreaking. The words cut through you like a knife...fantastic. Luv it...not the subject however. Great writing. lols
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Wow...this almost can leave you speackless. The sadness of reality is heartbreaking. The words cut through you like a knife...fantastic. Luv it...not the subject however. Great writing. lols
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C
Comment from LovnPeace
As I am heartbroken reading this and speacless, I wish I didn't have to write useless words in response. I is brilliantly written and as it say bio I can only say I am so sorry for the suffering. Blessings, Barbara
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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As I am heartbroken reading this and speacless, I wish I didn't have to write useless words in response. I is brilliantly written and as it say bio I can only say I am so sorry for the suffering. Blessings, Barbara
Comment Written 01-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C
Comment from Abba Lin
Hi Curt, wish I had a six.. I have been on the road for the past few months.. Just had time to get back to fanstory and do some reading.. I saw your name in the first paragraph and imediately went to your work.. I love reading your work.. God has given you a talent.. This poem actually broke my heart and made me cry.. I still hurt when I relive those words and pain.. I do know, that what the devil has made for bad, God can and will turn it for good.. Your words and story will help and strengthen many and you are being used mightily to stand for truth and give substance to the hurting.. I commend you..I had a rough childhood and knew pain at a young age.. I asked God one time why he made me so tender hearted..and then allow so much pain..Why He didn't make me tough..Why I had to pay for everything with blood, sweat and tears.. His answer to me was, If you hadn't walked their mile how could you really understand their pain.. Then I understood, that God did not give me that pain, but He would pick me up love me, strengthen me and use me to go and pick up the others.. (hurting, used and abused). There is an army of us broken out there.. standing up, getting stronger everyday.. We will win when all said is done.. still faithfully praying God's best for you.. remember when the devil is constantly attacking you, it is because He knows your great destiny and he is trying to discourage you, so you will give up.. I say, never give up, stand up, keep writing and keep on keeping on my friend..when all said and done you will be standing and standing STRONG.... Love always, Lin
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Hi Curt, wish I had a six.. I have been on the road for the past few months.. Just had time to get back to fanstory and do some reading.. I saw your name in the first paragraph and imediately went to your work.. I love reading your work.. God has given you a talent.. This poem actually broke my heart and made me cry.. I still hurt when I relive those words and pain.. I do know, that what the devil has made for bad, God can and will turn it for good.. Your words and story will help and strengthen many and you are being used mightily to stand for truth and give substance to the hurting.. I commend you..I had a rough childhood and knew pain at a young age.. I asked God one time why he made me so tender hearted..and then allow so much pain..Why He didn't make me tough..Why I had to pay for everything with blood, sweat and tears.. His answer to me was, If you hadn't walked their mile how could you really understand their pain.. Then I understood, that God did not give me that pain, but He would pick me up love me, strengthen me and use me to go and pick up the others.. (hurting, used and abused). There is an army of us broken out there.. standing up, getting stronger everyday.. We will win when all said is done.. still faithfully praying God's best for you.. remember when the devil is constantly attacking you, it is because He knows your great destiny and he is trying to discourage you, so you will give up.. I say, never give up, stand up, keep writing and keep on keeping on my friend..when all said and done you will be standing and standing STRONG.... Love always, Lin
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you so much.
C
Comment from Barthalamew
Lots of hard gut feeling in these lines. Right off hand I cannot think of an end to a pedofiles life that would be appropriate to cleanse them from the evil they perpetrate on the children God has created. Good piece, Curt. Hey, how about an answer buddy? Thought you were dead, jack.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Lots of hard gut feeling in these lines. Right off hand I cannot think of an end to a pedofiles life that would be appropriate to cleanse them from the evil they perpetrate on the children God has created. Good piece, Curt. Hey, how about an answer buddy? Thought you were dead, jack.
Comment Written 27-May-2010
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2011
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Thank you.
C