Contest Entry and Winners
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29 total reviews
Comment from BJean
Maybe the fairy tale endinbg:) Sounds like quiet an excursion for her and she will probable come back with a whole new meaning for fashion!. Congrats on the win. This is a well written story. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Maybe the fairy tale endinbg:) Sounds like quiet an excursion for her and she will probable come back with a whole new meaning for fashion!. Congrats on the win. This is a well written story. Love, Jean
Comment Written 07-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2010
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Jean,
Yes, I am sure she will be looking at life with a different perspective...at least I hope. Thank you...smiles, Carol
Comment from patmedium
You have plastered a wide smile on my face... I hope that spoiled brat finds out he's got a doll of a wife and two kids in tow! This is an excellent read, friend. I have related strongly to the characters... emphasis on STRONGLY ... Pat.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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You have plastered a wide smile on my face... I hope that spoiled brat finds out he's got a doll of a wife and two kids in tow! This is an excellent read, friend. I have related strongly to the characters... emphasis on STRONGLY ... Pat.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Pat,
Yes, the poor little Barbie Doll has no clue to what the real world is all about at all...Smiles to you,
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A memorable read. Pat.
Comment from highlander104
Oh, good grief, can you imagine. Yes, I could. Poor Ms. DoGooder is in for even more surprises when she gets off the plane. Enjoyed this story.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Oh, good grief, can you imagine. Yes, I could. Poor Ms. DoGooder is in for even more surprises when she gets off the plane. Enjoyed this story.
Jean K.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Jean,
Oh yes, She hasn't the slightest clue what volunteering in a devastated country means..let alone work! Smiles to you...
Comment from missy98writer
Writer.
I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story. Your writing is concise and tight for great flash fiction. Great descriptive writing. Natural dialogue. I loved your narrative. I liked the ending when Miss Fashion Plate found out Miguel was the doctor. I laughed when he allowed all the animals on. An excellent entry in the writing prompt. The Longest Flight of My Life.
Missy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Writer.
I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story. Your writing is concise and tight for great flash fiction. Great descriptive writing. Natural dialogue. I loved your narrative. I liked the ending when Miss Fashion Plate found out Miguel was the doctor. I laughed when he allowed all the animals on. An excellent entry in the writing prompt. The Longest Flight of My Life.
Missy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Melissa.
Thanks for stopping by and checking out the story. Appreciate it very much. Smiles to you...
Comment from douglasgclarke
Very good. I like the style and the flow.
You did drop the inheritance thing and then didn't follow up with it at all.
I also think it could have been better with out the sexy bit. She can be high fashion and out of place without being sexual. I think it took away from the story.
You did do a good job at showing her confidence.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Very good. I like the style and the flow.
You did drop the inheritance thing and then didn't follow up with it at all.
I also think it could have been better with out the sexy bit. She can be high fashion and out of place without being sexual. I think it took away from the story.
You did do a good job at showing her confidence.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Douglas,
The inheritance was merely to say it was her last chance and she needed to be on the plane and the outfit was to show she was a rich spoiled brat, not a true volunteer. hank you for the kind review.
Comment from --Turtle.
Hi Carol,
Read this story tonight too, didn't see anything to change, though it was a bit weird for plot, the leather skirt image. Dialog was strong, inner thought felt pretty smooth.
Sorry if I'm scattered on this one. I liked the slight twist at the end.
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Hi Carol,
Read this story tonight too, didn't see anything to change, though it was a bit weird for plot, the leather skirt image. Dialog was strong, inner thought felt pretty smooth.
Sorry if I'm scattered on this one. I liked the slight twist at the end.
--Turtle.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Turtle,
Guess all this purple prose lately has gone to my brain -- just wanted to show she was a rich spoiled brat with no clue as to volunteering...Smiles to you
Comment from anabelle
Good entry. I like the Miss Fashion Plate and the missing the plane, but being rescued by such a good samaritan.
Although, I think it might be difficult to not have penned in animals on a plane. Pretty close to impossible, actually. But the story's good.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Good entry. I like the Miss Fashion Plate and the missing the plane, but being rescued by such a good samaritan.
Although, I think it might be difficult to not have penned in animals on a plane. Pretty close to impossible, actually. But the story's good.
Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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anabelle,
Thanks so much for the kind and generous review. I always appreciate hearing from you, Smiles to you...
Comment from warbler
I enjoyed reading this story. It was entertaining from beginning till end. The livestock in a plane was a very unique idea. The surprise ending was great.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I enjoyed reading this story. It was entertaining from beginning till end. The livestock in a plane was a very unique idea. The surprise ending was great.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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warbler,
Thanks so much for the kind review. I appreciate it very much. Smiles to you..
Comment from Sacred Heart
This isn't based on a true story is it!? I mean nothing would surprise me now a days. But seriously, I enjoyed this story. I see this is a writing prompt entry, best of luck! This would be a one crazy flight that's for sure! Take care, have a great weekend! Love Light Patty
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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This isn't based on a true story is it!? I mean nothing would surprise me now a days. But seriously, I enjoyed this story. I see this is a writing prompt entry, best of luck! This would be a one crazy flight that's for sure! Take care, have a great weekend! Love Light Patty
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Patty,
No, just my imagination in overdrive. Thanks for the great review and for taking the time to read. Smiles to you...
Comment from Mary's angel
Very unique! Different and interesting! Good use of descriptive words like your imagination. Can you see this truly happening to anyone of us. It would be the longest flight! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Very unique! Different and interesting! Good use of descriptive words like your imagination. Can you see this truly happening to anyone of us. It would be the longest flight! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Mary's angel,
It would be a horrible flight...Smiles to you and thanks for the generous review.
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Yes it would! You are welcome! Good Luck!