The Chief
The aging Indian reflects on his life.17 total reviews
Comment from Tawnyowl
This reads very well Beth. I liked the easy flow of the words, and the sentiments are pleasant too.This is an engaging poem without any obvious faults.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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This reads very well Beth. I liked the easy flow of the words, and the sentiments are pleasant too.This is an engaging poem without any obvious faults.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009
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Thank you for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from amada
This is a great tribute to our great ancestors. I like the picture of the chief you depict. He hates to be seen as an entertainment. My fav phrase "So silently the fang of death was sent."
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a great tribute to our great ancestors. I like the picture of the chief you depict. He hates to be seen as an entertainment. My fav phrase "So silently the fang of death was sent."
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you amada, I apprecate your nice comments.
Beth
Comment from GentleWind
This poem is lovely, but sadly the truth speaks. This has vision of the past atrocities, and hope for the young ones who still have a future. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This poem is lovely, but sadly the truth speaks. This has vision of the past atrocities, and hope for the young ones who still have a future. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you for the review and for you insightful comments.
Beth
Comment from RaymondJohn
Powerful. The meter and rhyme are so perfect, it flows like music. The story is heartbreaking, as many times as I hear it. Marvelous job. Best of luck in the competition. You should have a very strong entry. Ray.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Powerful. The meter and rhyme are so perfect, it flows like music. The story is heartbreaking, as many times as I hear it. Marvelous job. Best of luck in the competition. You should have a very strong entry. Ray.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you very much Ray, I appreciate the review and you nice comments.
Beth
Comment from wierdgrace
I have always loved stories and poems written about westerns and the so much of indians and cowboys, and this is great, a wonderful story in a great poem, and it tells alot, with great structure, good luck in the contest. great entry.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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I have always loved stories and poems written about westerns and the so much of indians and cowboys, and this is great, a wonderful story in a great poem, and it tells alot, with great structure, good luck in the contest. great entry.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story/poem with an excellent rhyming scheme. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a very well written story/poem with an excellent rhyming scheme. It has very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you so much for the review and the comments.
Beth
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You're welcome, Beth. Charlie
Comment from patwannabe
Beth, this is beautiful. I feel so sorry for the Indian Nations and I'm so ashamed of the past, both with the Indian and with the African-Americans. Wish it could have been different. Thank you for this, pat
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Beth, this is beautiful. I feel so sorry for the Indian Nations and I'm so ashamed of the past, both with the Indian and with the African-Americans. Wish it could have been different. Thank you for this, pat
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Pat, for the review and the comments. The more I learn about the Indians the worse I feel about the way they were treated.
Comment from adewpearl
Your rhyming quatrains do a most compelling job of telling the tragic tale of what European explorers and settlers did to Native Americans in usurping their land by focusing on a single elderly chief, whose life has been reduced to posing for tourist photos. This is an excellent story poem, Beth. Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Your rhyming quatrains do a most compelling job of telling the tragic tale of what European explorers and settlers did to Native Americans in usurping their land by focusing on a single elderly chief, whose life has been reduced to posing for tourist photos. This is an excellent story poem, Beth. Brooke
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you Brooke, I truly appreciat the review and nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a first-rate piece
of verse, Beth - has a smooth
flow to the words and excellent
rhythm and rhyme - telling of
a life of an indian chief -- a
great entry for the contest.
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a first-rate piece
of verse, Beth - has a smooth
flow to the words and excellent
rhythm and rhyme - telling of
a life of an indian chief -- a
great entry for the contest.
Good luck, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you Margaret. Those are nice words from one of my favortie poets. I appreciate your review.
Beth
Comment from WRITER1
This is a very good story in a poem. The Indians were pushed out of their land and made to live on reservations. It is one of this nations great sins.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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This is a very good story in a poem. The Indians were pushed out of their land and made to live on reservations. It is one of this nations great sins.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009
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Thank you for the review and your comments.
Beth